Reviewer: Winnyy
Date: 12/05/09 7:07
Chapter: A Piece of the Past

This is very, very good. I love the format and I could imagine the two sitting there talking. It was truly chilling at the end! Elladora was captured perfectly, bound to duty and happy to do its bidding but you could see that she did not totally detest her sister. The House of Black just won over Isla. Amazing! It reminded me of Andromeda (maybe it was meant to?). Very well done!

Annie x

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the story, Annie. It was very interesting to write, given the freedom of the characters, but the restraint of the contest. You're right, Elladora doesn't really hate her sister. She's something of a psychopath and she's using the House of Black as an excuse to hurt people. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Essence of Potter
Date: 11/22/09 7:54
Chapter: A Piece of the Past

Wow that was really good! I was curious when I started reading, I wasn't sure if it would work, the whole one person conversation. But it really did. You did such a good job at dropping little hints about what Elladoras' real mission was without being obvious. Also, the coversation worked really well, I could tell what Isla was probably saying without you having to tell us through Elladora whitch was great because I think if i were writing this I'd be terrible because I wouldn't be able to do it without making the conversation unrealistic. Overall I think you did really well! Oh, and I hope you do well in the competition!
Fi X

Author's Response: I'm glad you thought the story waas good! The format was a little tricky at first, but I think I got the hang of it. It's difficult to tell a story solely from one limited viewpoint, but that's the challenge! Thanks for Reading and Reviewing!

Reviewer: Virgil
Date: 11/21/09 19:53
Chapter: A Piece of the Past

*has an ohsnap moment*
brilliant!
~Virgil~

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm very flattered!

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