You tell him Ginny!
Again, a great poem! A sonnet, too, no less! I think this would be a great idea to expand- perhaps some more sonnets following, turn it into an epic poem! Or something worthy of Shakespeare. Not that this isn't already! :) but I know you have a skill with words, and this idea could really expand! Even if you decide not to, it's still a funny, awesome sonnet! :) I totally laughed at the last line, because it captured Ginny's character so well!
Author's Response: Thanks, Nagini :) I'm not sure I'm up to expanding this as I'm happy where it's at but I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Wow, that was brilliant! That was just...wow. Sorry, I'm usually more coherent than this--I'm actually pretty verbose in reviews but just...wow.
Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely review :)
that is soo beautiful, am nt a big fan of poetry but this is beautiful, amazing, wonderful.
it put me to tears
Author's Response: Thank you so much :)
Very cool! I can totally imagine that Harry went through something like this. This was very well done, so easily readable, and the concluding couplet was perfect. Great job! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks Gina! Yes, I can't imagine that Harry WOULDN'T have gone through something like this. After everything he went through finding the Horcruxes and to the Final Battle where so many loved characters died... it's hard to imagine a happy!Harry afterwards. But thanks for the read and review! Glad you liked it!
Ah, now here is where, in my mind, you have reversed the roles as they lived in my head. I always pictured Ginny as the one with the nightmares and Harry as finally dredging himself up by himself for her sake.
But as I read this, I can picture her, watching him sleep his troubled sleep, worried that he might not come back from his private hell the next time.
As you know, though...I don't believe in them as a couple, so I'm pretty jaded to the concept that she would be able to bring him back from his purgatory of nightmares.
All in all, minus my pedantic ramblings, I really enjoyed this sonnet, and I even found myself reading it in iambic pentameter in my head, lol.
Until we meet/I stalk again!
Author's Response: See, I said I have my canon moments and this is certainly one of those. I'm surprised you read this poem, Jess! But I'm glad that you enjoyed it despite the pairing. The prompt for the challenge was
'One need not be a chamber to be haunted; One need not be a house; The brain has corridors surpassing Material place.And the first thing I thought of was Harry coping with everything AFTER the war and for some reason, as I sat down to write the poem, Ginny's voice came out. I think that although she has her flaws she is still a strong person (she let Harry go in DH without begging him not to etc) and, since JKR has deemed it so, would have been the one to carry Harry through life post-Voldemort. Thanks for the review! I hope you come strolling through my author's page again sometime! Julia
Here I come, as promised.
Julia, Julia, Julia! I am sorry, but this will not be one of the better reviews you have received for your poetic skills. This is because I know next to nothing about meters and consistencies and @#$@#%$3 about poetry. Lol! However, I can write about an author’s portrayal of emotions and her subject matter, and that is exactly what I will do.
I think one could write one-shots on Harry’s demons post-Hogwarts Battle. And one could certainly tell tales of Ginny helping him recover, acting as the balm that soothes the pains that have gone deeper beyond the skin. But you achieved that in a compact, beautifully written sonnet.
Yet he refuses to see and spurns my hope
Harry and his heroic sufferings actually don’t tire me. I know many fans call him names for his hero-complex, but I honestly admire Harry in spite of it. The thing is, he doesn’t see it as glorious – he is just so damn mechanical about the whole thing, so detached despite the fact that his identity will never be separate from it. Even more admirable to me is his vulnerability – one that springs from love. And this vulnerability is so intimately connected with his strength, and that, perhaps, is the thing which fascinates me most about Harry.
I noticed you put a “Mental Disorder” warning, but actually I didn’t notice that in the poem. This may be partly due to my FAILNESS at poetry, but I don’t see any reason why it can’t be read as Harry struggling with the memories of the war. Anyway, this is how I interpreted it:
In your poem, we hear nothing from Harry. We are told of his nightmares and fears. Yet, it doesn’t misrepresent him, and neither does it grasp at straws to salvage it. It tells me of Harry as he is, and I love it.
I am here, I tell him, Ginny, your wife
Do not dwell on death, accept our new life!
Light. That is what Ginny is. But not a ray, nor a torch – a blinding force of light that spreads around the vicinity. These lines effectively sum up her character. Her optimism, her strength, and her loyalty are clearly visible.
Apart from your good grasp of Rowling’s character, and canon sensibilities, there were some other things I really liked. The title itself was not only intriguing, but quite fitting. I also loved the “Titian locks,” even though they made me think of a different Ginny. The one in my mind has long, and rather straight red hair. But there is a sensuality, a certain softness about Titian’s women that I find engaging, and to put Ginny in such a mould is refreshing.
All in all, great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review, Natalie! I have to admit when I first started reading it I had this horrible feeling that you hated the poem. But you didn't! I am so relieved that you are like me and admire Harry for his hero-complex and vulnerability. It's sometimes hard to believe that someone can dislike Harry for all his faults and weaknesses and strengths yet remain a fan of the entire series. You are totally correct about Ginny. She is a light. I really wanted to portray that. But she is still human and all this darkness must get to her which is why I wanted that feel of helplessness in the poem. Again, thank you for this review. Now I'll be able to go into work with a smile on my face! -Julia XD
wow. its well written (unlike this review) its clever, and it makes sense. now im off to see if there are other posts by you to read.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad you thought it made sense.
I really love this poem. I really do. It tess a storykinda, and I love poems like that. It's hard for me to write them, so I notice when poeple write them. I love how you write this. It's so sad.
I like how everything rhymed it it. It was very good. Very, very good. I don't know what my favorite line was because they are all so great.
Great job with the QSQ, by the way. It's not really related to this poem, but I wanted to tell you that. You have amazing poetry and I'm excited to read more of it.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much Alyssa! I'm still smiling about that QSQ and I'm glad you enjoyed this poem as well. Thanks for reviewing :)
nicely done. Poor Harry. Of course, he's bound to have nightmares after all he's been through...
Author's Response: Thank you for the review!