This was really beautiful, I loved the Romanian story and the interactions between Ginny and Charlie and Ginny and Harry. Your use of imagery was really good, I could completely imagine the setting and the tension. The characterisation of all three main characters was great, too, and I thought the dialogue between Ginny and Harry at the end was very fitting.
There were just a few things at the beginning that didn't quite seem to flow. and the girl who sorrowed on the sofa - can you actually use sorrow as a verb this way? It didn't sound quite right to me... though I may be wrong.
Also Her home was habited by the haunting dead - I would say inhabited instead of habited.
But other than that your writing was absolutely beautiful.
Nice! very heartfelt...sorry and happiness. is that a true Romanian tale or did you make it up? i always loved Charlie!
Author's Response: Yes! Luceafarul is a real Romanian epic poem. I read it ages ago, and now I can't find it anymore, so some of the details might not actually be perfect. I have a feeling I made up the bit about the princess' hair being red...but I blame that on Charlie. He's one of my favorite Weasley brothers - I feel like he has this whole backstory that no one knows, and it's probably really beautiful and really tragic. I wish I had it in me to write it. But maybe someone else can do it.
I really liked this story! Towards the end, when you dropped the bomb about the kiss..i was a little doubtful if this was a harry/ginny story. But it was, and I'm glad i read it! :)
Author's Response: I know, the kiss was probably the hardest part to write...I tried to build up to it, but to be honest I don't think of myself as much of a romance writer. Mostly I just wanted to tell the Luceafarul story :) I appreciate your pointing out the awkwardness of that part, though - I really really want to improve, always, and critiques like this help. And I love all reviews!
I liked this. I don't really care to read Harry/Ginny stories, usually, but you made them believable and gave them a depth that was lacking in the books. Charlie's Romanian fairy tale was a nice touch.
Hello Calico,
a lovely story. Full of depth and feeling. I liked the Romanian parable and how Ginny identified with its heroine. Lucky for her, her own fate was not quite so tragic.
Beautifully written.
Kara's Aunty :)
