Reviews For whimper
Reviewer: AidaLuthien
Date: 11/05/10 15:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

This has no reviews and that made me sad, since this is a very interesting story.

It's an interesting idea that Snape and Regulus Black were somehow engaged in a physical relationship while they were Death Eaters. I'm not sure what to make of it. I feel like Snape was so Lily-sexual that he just couldn't have sex, even if it was just sex, with anyone else. Still, it fits the story and it was handled tastefully.

The jumps were interesting between hunting for the Muggle girl (or was she Muggleborn?) and Severus and Regulus at Snape's flat. They felt a bit odd the first time I read through. I wonder if it would make more sense if it was completely chronological.

This was a very enjoyable read. The details of the story were really good like where they hide their poisons and Lucius and Bellatrix avoiding the walls.

The story seems to be told primarily from Snape's perspective and it does seem a bit weird that Bellatrix is called Bella. It feels somewhat more fanon than canon.

Author's Response:

Thank you for the review! To be honest, I wasn't sure this story would get any, as I have taken quite a big step away from established canon!  I have been quietly shipping Severus/Regulus since OotP, so I wanted to explore that possiblity, and this was the story that emerged. 

I know personally that I tend to overuse time jumps in a lot of my writing and in retrospect, I could have done more to make this story clearer/stronger/more sense-making, so I will definitely take that ito account in future fics. I suppose Bella is more fanon than canon, hmm. I may need to rethink that.  Thank you for your review, it was really helpful and I am glad that you found the story interesting. :)

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