Reviewer: Guitarxfreak
Date: 01/08/11 9:13
Chapter: Memories and Truth

Nice thinking! I know what u mean about not u writing this! I sometimes wirte things and when i read it the day after i think: Did i really write that? Nothing to be asshamed off! Those things often turn out to be great stories! Like this one ;)

Reviewer: h_vic
Date: 09/16/10 8:36
Chapter: Memories and Truth

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. I thought you captured both Lily and Remus perfectly, and it's impressive that you kept them in character despite the situation, because infidelity fic often seems to stray wildly OOC in order to justify itself.

I've read a fair amount of Sirius/Lily but not much Remus/Lily as there seems to be less about, which surprises me as it seems to me that Remus/Lily ought to work better for a number of reasons. Remus seems more Lily's type, with his reserved sensibility, than Sirius, and he isn't as close as Sirius is to James so the depth of the betrayal is lessened. Also, I rather think Lily has a soft spot for the underdog that comes through in her friendship with Severus (thinking about it, it's probably where Harry got his 'saving people thing' from) and you use that well here to make the story work.

I think part of what works so well is that you created a space for them that was utterly separate from their everyday lives. Somehow, because there is this moment once a month that is just about them, it almost makes it seem as though what happened doesn't count somehow or isn't quite real in their minds. I wonder, if Lily hadn't fallen pregnant, if perhaps they might have both left it well alone without ever mentioning that morning again.

It intrigues me that Remus seems to view the mistake of a lifetime as risking losing Lily rather than the betrayal of James though and I wonder if perhaps he feels something more than he lets on for her.

“Lily, don’t. This is my life. It does no good to wish,”

I think this is my favourite line. Remus' bitter acceptance is both sad and fitting, and I really enjoyed his gruffness and the way he can't help but blurt out the one question he's already resolved that he can't ask. I really like too how you've captured the nurturing side of Lily, but balanced that with a no nonsense temper that keeps her very rounded.

All in all, I thought this was an interesting and surprisingly believable little tale.

~Hannah

Author's Response: Hannah, Thanks so much for your review. Sometimes, my evil muse takes over and I never know what she will come up with. Luckily, this one isn't as evil as some of her thoughts. I am glad you enjoyed it as I did enjoy exploring it. Truth be told, it all came from a picture I found of David Thewis and it just turned into a story. Thanks again.

Terri

Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 10/28/09 20:58
Chapter: Memories and Truth

Hehehe.... Quite inverosimil to me that those two WOULD do something like that... But enjoyable and well writen nevertheless.
I very much liked the way you ended it. And, clearly, Harry was James'. Hehehe!! Liked it very mucho!

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 10/28/09 16:44
Chapter: Memories and Truth

Is it a bad thing that I rather like Lily cheating on James with Remus? Yeah, I thought so.
I loved that she takes care of him, though. He needs that. Love how they know so much about each other that it's almost like they're married--and I am a little bummed that the baby wasn't Remus'. (I know, he wouldn't have been Harry otherwise!)
Liked this very much!

Author's Response: Thank you for your comments. It was a rather strange pairing to write, but I am a slave to my ebil muses who insisted on writing this one. Thanks again.

Reviewer: miniding17
Date: 10/28/09 9:05
Chapter: Memories and Truth

oh my god, lily and remus your insane!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: All I can say in my defense is it wasn't me, it was my ebil muses who wrote this story. I argued, but they insisted. I won't deny them when they get that persistent.

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 10/25/09 18:51
Chapter: Memories and Truth

Hm...How would she necessarily know?

And...oh, Remus, we would really all prefer you as Harry's dad, even if maybe he did need some idiot genes to do what he did...

Author's Response: Well, let's just say without detail, she is only 6 weeks pregnant, and the last full moon was 8 weeks ago. Enough said. Thanks for your thoughts. My ebil muses had fun with this. Terri

Reviewer: voldiegirl
Date: 10/25/09 14:11
Chapter: Memories and Truth

Loved it! ^.^ Great work, was a good as well as a fun read.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

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