Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/19/09 15:22
Chapter: Chapter 2: Surprises

hey Hannah :D I really really liked this-it was so interesting to see how it could have happened. I have never read a fic like this, and I am super exited too! I was surprised about how the Evans reacted to the news, and that Lily knew almost everything before she went to Hogwarts. i cannot wait to get the next chapter!!!

Andrea

Reviewer: ginnygirl16
Date: 10/04/09 9:34
Chapter: Chapter 2: Surprises

I would like to say that you have started an amazing story. Your characterization of Lily is very very good, and I really enjoyed your first chapter where you explained her Muggle life. It was very entertaining.
I think perhaps that you have characterized her so well that it seems so real. I completley love the world you have created around her, as we see so little of her life outside of Hogwarts and the Magical world.
One thing I think could have been improved is Lily's parents and their rection to her statement that she was a witch.
To me, having a daughter tell me that she was a witch would result in more then calmly removing dishes from the table. I think perhaps that they would not have believed it until they had a meeting with a Ministry Official or Professor Dumbledore. Of course, after everything Lily and Petunia relayed to them they would have certainly been thinking of it. Perhaps you will explain this in further chapters, but it was the one thing I thought a little underdeveloped.
But besides that, I thoroughly enjoyed your interpretation of Mrs. Snape, and I think that you have a wonderful story in the making. I look forward to reading the rest of the story.

~ginnygirl16~

Author's Response: I love long reviews! Thank you for reading and reviewing, I'm ecstatic that you liked Lily and Mrs. Snape. I'm always a little worried that my characters turn out a little too cliched. I also think that Lily's life before Hogwarts is interesting to think about! As for the parents' reaction, I very much appreciate your criticism. I agree with you to a point. I kind of went through a couple of phases of thought for that. I just thought that out of anybody they would trust, wouldn't it be their own daughter? (Let me mention that I believe Lily was very trustworthy up to that point.) So I must say I think they would have believed her over any stranger, though I'll take your advice and attempt to develop it better, because it is a little weak. As I am not in the parental stage of life it's easier for me to look through Lily's eyes rather than Mr. and Mrs. Evans, so I'll work on it! Again, thank you! *loves ginnygirl16*

Reviewer: The_Dream_Team
Date: 09/23/09 16:42
Chapter: Chapter 1: Lily

that was a really good 1st chapter and i liked it a lot! are you going to go through all seven years of hogwarts? so there will be seven volumes? well, i hope that you can update soon because i cant wait 2 c wut happens next!!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really relieved that someone likes it. :) Don't worry, the next chapter's in line. Yes! There should be seven volumes. Phew! I get tired just thinking about it. Thanks again for reviewing!

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 09/23/09 15:29
Chapter: Chapter 1: Lily

ah, she's nine. I get it (; At fistrst I was like... WHAT? But it's coole, I love it ! ;p

Author's Response: Haha yeah. "Is there some twist she didn't mention? Why is she in public school???" I can totally see it. Thanks very much! I'm glad you like it.

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