Awwwww! Again, you blow me away with your writing style! It's so sophisticated. Seriously, you should publish all your poetry. (your original stuff, if you have any) I'm positive that your work would sell really well!
Author's Response: Thank you! I would love to publish more of my OF poetry. I am definitely working on it!
beautiful and in character. I love Cho, I really do. (But I'm very glad she and Harry did not end up together)
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I like Cho as well and enjoyed writing this for her. She gets a bad rep in fanfiction. But like you, I don't think she and Harry worked well together at all. They're much better off with other people! Again, thanks for reading and reviewing!
Haha, now I'm lurk/stalking your author page. >:-)
Here is an oft-misunderstood pair. While I'm ambiguous about whether Cho truly loved Cedric, I'm reasonably certain that Cedric did love her in that way. He just had the right personality, the correct disposition to love unrequitedly.
Now Cho is starting to realize that she was hurt on a completely different level than she had previously thought, and how you captured the essence of this was...crud, I can't think of the proper word, so I'm just gonna go for awesometastic.
The last stanza with the breeze that kisses her, it seems almost as if she is remembering her romantic relationship with Cedric, which makes it a much more poignant and powerful last line of 'Goodbye.'
That's all for now...still feeling tired/retarded, so I'll stop rambling. I'm enjoying this stroll in Julialand. :)
Author's Response: Oh I'm enjoying your stroll in Julialand too! It's lovely getting new reviews! I really do think that Cho is a misunderstood character. I know she was incredibly annoying in OotP but she was a sixteen year old girl! I think we should give her a bit of a break. I admit, I used want to ram a cattle prod into her back a while ago but writing this poem changed that. She was just an incredibly sensitive person who had a lot of crap thrown her way. I think she redeemed herself in HBP by returning to fight alongside the rest of the DA. Thanks for the review! Julia
This was such a pleasure to read (and beta)! Your characterization of Cho really made me stop and think about all that I knew from the books and how much my dislike for her (for I *do* dislike her, haha) was from something specific in the books and how much of it was from a general dislike of Harry/Cho - and I think your poem proved it was mostly the latter! Cho and Cedric really seemed to have a special relationship in your poem, and you brought out her feelings of loss very well. I liked the length of the poem, too - it let you set up everything wanted to say really well. The lack of a rhyme scheme threw me off a little, but I can see why you structured the poem the way you did. All in all, nice job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and recommendation, Apurva! I'm glad I made you think more about Cho. I admit I heartily disliked for a long time and then I realised it was the Harry/Cho thing that really put me off. She does redeem herself. And the fact that she stood up for her misguided friend is less shameful and more admirable considering Harry himself always stood up for his own friends. I think her character has a lot to explore within fan fiction so I'm happy to know I can make authors reconsider their own dislike of her. Again thanks so much for the review and rec and most of all for being an amazing beta! *squish* Julia XD
Dear the opaleye –
That was an extremely beautiful poem. It was wonderfully subtle and powerful – things that I cherish when I find them in poetry. I’m not so much of a fan of over-the-top imagery and symbols; a poem is so much more moving (for me, at least) when these things are subtle and underscore your poem, rather than dominating it. You did a lovely job with this.
On that extremely general note, I would like to zoom in on some specifics. One of the things that I found to really add depth to this poem was how you began every stanza with a different description of “night”. Your first five stanzas have descriptions that are fairly negative/scary – words like “empty” and “loneliness”. The last two stanzas, though, when Cho is actually at Cedric’s grave are much more positive – “comforting” and “windless”. The shift in the description of the night from something scary and almost threatening in some cases to one that is almost embracing is, I think, extremely powerful. This more than just about anything else demonstrates the love between Cho and Cedric. She’s depressed, scared, and lonely, but once she reaches where he died she’s calmer, a little more reflective, and at peace with her surroundings. It’s as if the reminder of the love that they shared tempered her natural surroundings to a point where she could deal with them, rather than be overwhelmed by their negativity.
Furthermore, I really like that this poem takes place entirely at night. The night is very ambiguous and can be interpreted in so many ways: calm, mysterious, stormy, romantic, etc. Having this poem – this goodbye – take place at night rather than in the daylight makes it feel softer, somehow, rather than harshly exposed by the bright sunlight. Cho has obviously kept this ache within her for years and having her say her goodbye at night, when she can be nearly hidden and protected by the dark, I feel is more realistic (or, at least, prettier in the mind’s eye) than if she had done so in the daylight. The darkness makes things more private whereas daylight exposes things and this is an extremely private moment in Cho’s life that you are allowing the reader to get a glimpse of.
I wanted to point out these lines as being extremely powerful because they really resonated wit me:
I stand where you stood
I fall where you fell
I weep where you died
I speak to you at last,
And I know you are near.
This was a very touching insight to Cho’s healing process. We know that she went through a lot of suffering and grief when Cedric died. It made me feel more hopeful for the mental well-being of her person to see her reenact his movements and take comfort in it. This is, though still grieving, a large departure from when she would burst into tears whenever Cedric’s name was mentioned. The fact that she can even stand where he died is a huge step forward in the process of healing. It gave me one of those little sad smiles to see that she is starting to come to terms with the fact that while he is dead, Cedric is still with her. You described this process very beautifully and very poignantly and I think that it’s through this passage especially that the reader can see just how well you understand Cho’s character and her way of thinking.
I also liked the image of Cho telling Cedric’s grave all about the Final Battle. Not only is that touching that she goes through those motions, but it’s a further step in her healing process. She can now rationalize that, while his death was a horrible tragedy, it wasn’t in vain. Voldemort didn’t win and her explanation of this to Cedric is a further step in her acceptance of the fact that he is gone, yet still present.
To bring my thoughts to some sort of conclusion, I think that you did a marvelous job with this poem. Through your characterization, your word choice, and your structure, you presented a very private portrait of grief and an eventual acceptance of loss. As a casual reader of poetry, I think that you have quite a gift for writing in this style. Wonderful job.
Author's Response: Hi Kelly! Thank you so much for this wonderful review. It's so nice to see that my poetry brings pleasure to others as much as it brings pleasure to me when I write it. I really wanted to give Cho a proper ending, I suppose as I felt her story was never wrapped up within the books. So thank you for reading and reviewing. You've made my day :) Julia
A heartbreaking poem. Cho, a character often given little depth, is perfect. The last lines were particularly heartbreaking. I love the concept of the wind. Thanks for writing.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I really wanted to give Cho a fair go. I'm glad you thought she was well written :)
I really like this poem. It makes me sad for Cho.
Author's Response: Thank you, Alyssa! Yes, I always felt sorry for Cho, actually. I think she is a bit of a misunderstood character but she redeems herself in DH, of course.