You meanie, you made me cry! That was so beautiful. I have no words.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the praise. I want to say I'm sorry that I made you cry, but it's meant to be sad, and it's a very tragic couple, isn't it... Thanks for taking the time to read and review!
Merlin, how I love a nice angsty tale of death and sadness.
How have I never lurked your author page? Seriously, shame on me for that, because you really have some fantastic work on here.
I am jealous, I must admit. The way you write the disarray of the battle is just so incredible. I feel like I was there but all the while I felt it like background noise like Tonks did. The scene-setting and description are just so made of win and excellence. I think my favourite part is when she reached the vacant hallway, like the eye of the storm. It is almost foreshadowing of the rest of the storm hitting, starting with the most violent part around the eye in the form of learning of Remus's death. After that, the rest of it pales in comparison.
This truly is a fantastic story. I'm glad I picked it to read, and just so you know... you have a banner in the works for a story. Not sure which one it'll be, but my mysterious bannermaker will have a gift for you soon. :D
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A very moving fic. I've always felt that JKR made happiness way too short for my liking, but I guess that just adds to the tragedy of it all, doesn't it? It's like Romeo and Juliet; it's inevitable that they're both going to end up dead. When I read that Remus and Tonks were both dead, I was outraged, frankly, that JKR could do that to them. It was awful, almost as bad as Sirius' death and Dumbledore's too. But I suppose that death is just part of every story, and definitely every Harry Potter one.
Anyway, what I meant to say was, nice job! (Sorry for the longish review!)
Author's Response: Hah, never ever apologise for that - the longer the review, the better! ;)
I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Tonks' and Remus' deaths are among the most painful ones in the story. It sort of brings you back to the whole reality of war and everything. I just wish she could have given them a... reason, or at least a proper death, you know... so that is, I suppose, a bit of what I was trying to do here.
Thank you very much for your review!
My Kara-Bolara! What a sad story. :( I do have a few things to pick at, if you will forgive me…
My first thought when I started reading was that there was a lot of telling, instead of showing. The first few paragraphs come off rather technical, which makes the emotion struggle with coming through. Especially this…
her whole mind was focussed on this one thought – where was Remus?
I think it would have been better if you hadn’t put it out there so frankly, but woven it in. Show us how Tonks is searching through the bodies; ruling out where she knows he isn’t, and let the reader learn of her objection through that, rather than telling us.
I’ve read many of your stories, and I know showing/telling isn’t a weak point for you. Rather, you’re quite strong in it. I would have loved to see more of it in this piece.
I do love how, in the end, Tonks isn’t paying a darn bit of attention to her murderer. Bella’s taunting is nothing but background noise, and you show how Tonks’ thoughts aren’t for her death, but for her family very well. Her strength in dying really embodies the message of the Battle of Hogwarts; death being inevitable, glorious even. Showing the pride and dignity in those who fought, while simultaneously telling the personal story, always hits very hard.
Overall, a very touching piece, but I wouldn’t expect less from you. =D –squiggles-
Author's Response: Ooh I had almost forgotten about this story... I see what you mean though - it's (again - that seems to be becoming a problem here!) as though I need a while to get into the... writing thing. I should probably rework this. I wrote it rather spur-of-the-moment-ly, and that probably shows in the description.
BUT! Thank youuu - I'm so glad that you thought I did well with Tonks towards the end. I'm very anxious about characterisation lately, so I'm glad I apparently did something right here :D
Thank you for the ariview, I always love them ^-^
“Now if it isn’t my itsy niecey looking for her pet wolfey!” Her cackle filled the empty corridor, echoing from the blank stone walls. “Ooh, but you won’t find him here, Dory, you won’t find him!” Bellatrix’ eyes and mouth were round in mock surprise. “You won’t find him here nor anywhere else! You want to know why, little Mudblood-lover, you want to know why?” A wide grin spread over her face again. “Because he’s dead!” Again she burst into laughter.
That paragraph is just PERFECT Bella, it's amazing Kara. I think you already know how much I like this fic, but I thought I'd just remind you :-D
This is such a sad fic :-( But is something that sounds to realistic to me, like it really could have happened that way. I much prefer to think that Tonks was killed by Bella in a one to one rather than just hit my a passing curse of chunk of debris.
Amazing writing Kara, the paragraph about Teddy and Remus and about how she couldn't feel the cruciatus curse only the pain from losing them was SO sad :-(
Lovely fic, Kara *tacklecuddles*
I told you I would read it-and I did, although I admit, it took a while. kara, this one-shot was really amazing-but so sad! Really. Like Alyssa, I love the "Remus, where are you" in a quieter voice line. (I know that wasn't the exact line, but you know what I mean) And how she thinks of the good times. I liked how it wasn't just ALL dark, the readers got to see some of their lives, too. Which is what made it so sad, though. Well, good job! *goes off to wail and re-read her favorite Tonks/Remus scenes in the books*
Author's Response: Ooh thank you so much Andy! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that you thought I did the sad/good parts well. You know, I didn't think I'd get another review for this story :D so this was a pleasant surprise. Thank you very much for your nice review :)
I ALMOST started crying ti was so sad but a good story it was nice even though I dont think it was fair that Bellatrix got to kill Tonks-I loved the ending the part about-She wasnt going to die facing Bellatrix Lestrange-she was going to die with the memory of those she loved in her heart.-It was so sad but nice almost like a poem.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review. I'm glad you liked the story, and the way you see it between sad and nice – that's really a good thing to hear!
An interesting take on their deaths. You use wonderful descripition- it sounds like very genuine thoughts on Tonk's part.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. It's really good to know that you liked the way I showed Tonks' thoughts.
:( so sad... thank you for writing this, it's truly amazing. :(
Author's Response: Thanks for your review!
Okay, I got the hint! Kara, my love, this is wonderful. Obviously, you know I'm a huge Remus/Tonks fan so tend to be picky at other people's interpretations ... but I can't pick at anything here, because I loved it all.
Tonks was so caring, so frightened for Remus - and her inability to think about anything but him whilst others were hurt was just SPOT ON!
Bellatrix was just plain evil, and the fact that she wanted to torture her niece was very IC.
I loved the end, She died thinking of happier times and Bellatrix could not take that away from her (Plus she'll be with Remus very soon).
Well done. ~Carole~
Author's Response: CAROLE! Uuuh.. what hint... *looks around innocently*
Hah, you have no idea how nervous I was about your review, because I know that you are, like, the Remus/Tonks god-authority here, and because I fangirl your writing so much...
So yeah, now I'm really cheery-happy that you actually liked it! Thank you very very much for your review (especially the bit about my characterisation of Tonks)
This is brilliantly written; it portrays Tonks and Bellatrix better than a lot of the other versions I've read. I rarely get emotionally involved in stories, but this one I found myself connected to. I felt Tonks's pain as she heard about Remus's death and though about how poor Teddy would have no parents to grow up with. This was a great piece where you do not need a ton of physical action to give the reader go through an emotional roller coaster as they read.
Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you very much. I'm really glad you liked it – it was my first time writing both of those characters (Bellatrix and Tonks), and also my first story in a darker genre, so I was rather nervous about it. I'm especially really happy that it made you feel with the characters, as this is exactly what I wanted to achieve.
Thank you so so much for leaving a review! (by the way, great taste in bands/movies/shows ;D )
I really LOVE this story. “Remus, where are you?” Tonks added in a quieter, more shaky voice. Just that line there made me sad and I don't get sad very easy. I've been waiting to read a good story like this and I'm glad that it's finally come.
I really love the charicterization of Dora in this chapter. Especially when she is being tortured. The thought running through her mind are exactally what I thought they were going to be.
I like how the story started and she was trying to find Remus. I'm not a big fan of how Bella talks about Remus, but I don't really care how she talks about him. What I do like about her is how she shows Dora the picture of Teddy. I could definentally see her doing that. The part in this chapter I loved the most was the anding. The last two paragraphs were my favorite. I just keep reading them again because I can't get enough of them. I just love all of this one shot. You did a great job on this.
Author's Response: Oooh thank you, I didn't expect you to react THAT quickly to my cry for attention :D THank you very much for your review... It means a lot really, especially as you really helped me to feel more comfortable about this story now. I just had this idea and really didn't know whether I was able to make it work, especially the sad-aspect of it.
I thought Bella was horribly difficult to write. I tried to go back a bit to how the Death Eaters talk about Remus in the Manor in the beginning of DH, but I'm not sure, maybe it didn't work... *sighs* There is this small bit between madness and her being sane in cruelty that's desperately hard to make. But again, thank you so much for letting me know what you liked about it! *huggles*