Reviews For A One-Sided Affair
Reviewer: ThestralSong13
Date: 07/21/10 14:56
Chapter: A One-Sided Affair

I also felt quite bad for Pansy, though I never liked her much... good job!
My only critique is that some of the sentences are quite wordy and tend to lose their meaning... clean it up a bit, I suppose.
It was very good otherwise!

Reviewer: Honking Daffodil
Date: 11/17/09 21:29
Chapter: A One-Sided Affair

This is a very interesting story. I have read very little fanfiction that develops Pansy's character past what it is in the books. I think you did a good job of portraying a side of Pansy that is softer, but still true to canon. Sometimes writing in third person sounds distant and detached, but I think you made it work well here. Overall, a nice one-shot.

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review, it really does mean alot!! :) I'm glad you think I stayed true to canon, I was a bit afraid that by showing this softer side, I may have lost the character we know from the books, but I reconciled that in the end, no "one note" character can pass for a realistic character *-)

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