Oh, jeez, I can't decide whether I like your banners or your writing better :) This story was really well written. I especially liked the parts Remus and Peter played. Their dialogue was fantastic.
It's quite odd to think about Sirius doling out advice like that, but the way you wrote it was completely in-character. Both James and Sirius seemed unsure of what they were saying, like they had never thought about growing up or deep relationships before. That is completely true to their character, in my opinion. Well done.
Great one shot. I really think who the advice is coming from made the world of difference in this case. Too bad for Sirius, that advice is going to help James become Head Boy! LOL
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Ashley
As that was really good! I liked how u included more from the rest if the year... I give it a 10/10!
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Ashley
It is the sort of story you read and nod with certainity and think that this is exactly how it'd have happened.
I like how you left me with an interesting conflict. I think that Sirius can't have matured before James did, but then the hint of him liking Mary, and the fact that he was often at loggerheads with his family, and also that at some time in future Lily does also see him on a personal level, all contribute to your idea. I loved how James was so much true to his character. There's this subtle arrogance, a bit of meaness he often excerises with Snape that you have weaved in the story with Remus and Peter. The start of what would be his transformation isn't one bit forced and I just loved how you brought it about. Peter was brilliant. The dialogues were remarkable and flowed with such a natural ease, I felt like I was there witnessing it. Great job with the whole thing.
-Akay-
Author's Response: Oh, wow, thanks for the amazing review! I'm glad the story left you with something, and that you found my writing enjoyable; it means a lot.
Ashley
Awesome. :-)
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Ashley
I like this story. I really like the ending to it.
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Ashley
This story has a very cute plot- you never think about Sirius being the one to hand out advice. Your writing flows smoothly, and your portrayal of the characters is realistic and believable. Nice work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Ashley
