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Name: the opaleye (Signed) · Date: 09/01/10 5:45 · For: Chapter Four: Each In His Prison
Oh no! Gasp! What an ending! First though, I have to tell you how excited I was to see an update on here. Hannah told me that more chapters are posted on FF and I was about to wander over there when I saw this update. So yay! An excellent chapter, again. Your imagery is very powerful and it hooks me ccompletely from the first few words. I love the darkness of the plot and how you seem to be building an incredibly intriguing story. This is not the average Dramione with a sole focus on romance. You are building up a great plot, so well done! I'm looking forward to the next update. I think I'll stick around this site to read this fic... Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I lost track a little of where I was up to with posting. FF has about another - uh, six chapters, I think. I'm delighted you're enjoying the fic - it's tremendous fun to write. The romance really isn't the main part of the plot for me; it's something that happens because of the plot, really. I've tried to think very hard about just what the world would be like and how people would have been changed by all that's happened: i hope it works!

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 08/31/10 15:51 · For: Chapter Four: Each In His Prison
Uhoh, thats not a good place to end up...Nice chapter! I hope the next one is ready to get posted soon :-)

Author's Response: Nope, anywhere with Bellatrix Lestrange has got to be low on the list of places you'd want to be! The next few chapters are done, so it should be a fairly short wait... Thanks!

Name: coolh5000 (Signed) · Date: 08/29/10 15:17 · For: Chapter Three: A Farther Room

Having just read the entire fic (I started off on MNFF and then moved to another site when I discovered there were more chapters posted - it would be great if you could get them up on this site as well) I am absolutely hooked. The tension you build is incredible and I am so immersed in the world you have created that when I finished, it took me a few minutes to realise that I wasn't actually in it!

Generally I am not a Dramione fan but so many fics of this type now are Dramione that I decided to give yours a go and it has definitely been well worth it. I am particularly enjoying how much focus you have given to the plot and other characterisations and have not laboured too long over forcing a relationship between Draco and Hermione. It is clear that it is going to come but it feels more like an organic process than romance for the sake of romance. And for the moment, they remain completely in character, with their traditional hatred still present, even if other feelings are beginning to surface.

Draco’s character in particular fascinates me, and I think the dark elements you have given him are excellent and fit perfectly in to this new darker world. He is a person who has been forced to do terrible things and it is right that Draco would be very different after this.

As for Hermione, I think the choice she made at the end of the war is interesting. It is hard to imagine her as one in hiding, rather than being there with the rest of them, keeping the order going. But on the other hand, she had no choice and there would obviously have been a complete lack of mercy from the DEs so I think her decision was probably the only one she could have taken.

You have paid so much attention to the details of the world you have created and it is a truly believable Alternate universe. I can really see this being the way Voldemort would have wanted things run. There is clearly so much thought behind every part of this. I think that in particular, the comments about Voldemort preferring pain and suffering to immediate death are a great inside into the mind of the Dark Lord.

My only comment would be that occasionally the transitions between characters were confusing. I would almost have preferred some sort of line break or symbol between characters and it would often take me a paragraph or two to adjust into the new voice, which would then change again almost as quickly, especially in the later chapters. Generally, I enjoyed the technique of showing us different characters and how their lives were intertwining with each other and I definitely think including them all helped build a clear picture of the world and everyone’s role in the story.

Anyway, I have really loved this story and I hope that perhaps this review will encourage you to post more chapters on here as I know many other people would enjoy reading it, and maybe also to continue on from the cliffhanger of the final chapter!


Author's Response: Hi Hannah! Thank you so much for such a thoughtful and detailed review. It's wonderful to get such considered commentary and you really made my day! I shall move the continuation of the story onto this site as well (I'd forgotten about it, to tell you the truth). I know Dramione isn't everyone's cup of tea, so thanks for giving the fic a go despite that :) Hopefully this is a story that happens to have Dramione in it rather than a story which is all about Draco & Hermione. The romance is secondary to the main plot, for me (mostly because the main plot has become rather larger and more complex than I ever intended, but I'm having tremendous fun with it.) I'm very keen on keeping the characters IC, so if anything goes wayward, please let me know! Yes, Draco has been in a position where he has had to make some horrific choices; and Hermione, I think, would not agree that he should have made those he did. I view it more that Hermione had no choice - she found herself hidden in the castle with no opportunity to escape for the first few months (as you can imagine how afraid Voldemort would be that Hogwarts could be used as a base / rallying point for his opponents), and later no way of knowing how to contact anyone. I have really enjoyed the world-builiding side of it :) I wanted to think through the way the world worked and how Voldemort control the world once he had it. After all, no use running the world if everyone else is dead. Ack! You are the first person to have pointed this out to me - I've just realised that fanfiction.net has swallowed all of my breaks between characters. I do put breaks in - unfortunately I used symbols that FFN eats (~*~ is my usual break). I've gone back and amended all the scene breaks - they show in the editor for me, but not on the page the reader sees. Apologies for that. I shall go back to using my old break. I'm midway through the next chapter and going ot get stuck in today. Lots of turmoil in my personal life recently, hence the elongated break, but it's all settling down now, thank god! Thank you again for the review :D Halo

Name: the opaleye (Signed) · Date: 11/06/09 1:04 · For: Chapter Three: A Farther Room
Argh, I can't believe I didn't see that this had been updated! Another intriguing chapter. I love how you worked in the Mirror of Erised. Keep up the great fic and I'm looking forward to the next update. Hopefully I won't miss it again!

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/29/09 9:06 · For: Chapter Three: A Farther Room
Hmmm Very interesting ending, I am looking forward to reading the next chapter! :-)

Name: darkchocolatemntn (Signed) · Date: 09/26/09 21:37 · For: Chapter One - A Dead Geranium
yay! new chapter. you've done a really good job with creating hermione's character. its really how i think she would be if this had happened in the books. Draco isnt so much, but we don't know everything about him yet, so i guess ill just have to wait for the next chapter to find out what the past 3 years have been like to cause this abrupt character change. good job though. keep it up :D

Name: ProfPosky (Signed) · Date: 09/26/09 20:41 · For: Chapter Three: A Farther Room
Angsty, a very intersting level of angst to sustain, BTW. I'm waiting to see how he gets her in to see Victor, and what that whole story is.

Name: ProfPosky (Signed) · Date: 09/17/09 22:43 · For: Chapter Two: Pearls
Very interesting! I think you've got Hermione pretty well - a scarred Hermione, but clearly well motivated. Draco is arrogant Draco...I love the horror you've put into the midnight reliving of the dead...

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm trying to keep them as IC as I can, given what we know of canon and what has happened to them at the point where it all goes AU. Writing canon characters is a new challenge for me - I usually write OCs - so it's good to know that so far, so good! I was caught by the idea of Hogwarts ghosts rising up at midnight, reliving the war every night for those few moments. I'm glad that worked. Thanks!

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/17/09 21:01 · For: Chapter Two: Pearls
I really liked this chapter and am excited for the next chapter to be posted! :-)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm aiming to get the next chapter up on Sunday :D

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 09/17/09 21:00 · For: Chapter One - A Dead Geranium
Hmmm, Ok here is my backstory. When you first posted this chapter I read it and it did not really get my attention and was not planning on commenting or reading the upcoming chapters. However I just saw your second chapter and thought that I would give it another shot. So I really liked the second chapter and thought that you should know how I came to comment on this story...lol

Author's Response: It is a quieter first chapter as I wanted to set the scene of the battle-torn world, and just how Hermione had lived since the 'end' of the war. I'm really glad you gave the story another chance, and that you like where it's going! The action moves on pretty swiftly in the next few chapters (I'm up to Ch 10, currently). Thanks so much!

Name: keber (Signed) · Date: 09/16/09 22:43 · For: Chapter One - A Dead Geranium

Author's Response: Ahhh...thanks? :)

Name: the opaleye (Signed) · Date: 09/16/09 20:07 · For: Chapter Two: Pearls
Oooo, this is getting really intriguing! I'm loving the plot right now. Just one nit-pick...

And too, all that dwelt here would be part of him...,

I think 'too' should be 'two'. But great chapter, looking forward to the next update!

Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it - I'm having a lot of fun writing it. I believe it is 'too' as I'm using the word in the sense of 'as well', rather than as Hermione enumerating her reasons, but I can understand the confusion, and I'll look to see if I can rephrase it. Thanks!

Name: darkchocolatemntn (Signed) · Date: 09/16/09 20:03 · For: Chapter One - A Dead Geranium
very well written, its really quite captivatinig. i am looking forward to seeing what happnes

Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you're enjoying it.

Name: bunsen (Signed) · Date: 08/30/09 3:07 · For: Chapter One - A Dead Geranium
I really enjoyed this first chapter - I hope a second is on its way!! Wondering what you are going to do with Hermione and Draco?? Is Ron really dead??

Author's Response: Thank you! The second is on its way. As for Ron - well, all will be revealed :)

Name: bubbag (Signed) · Date: 08/29/09 21:47 · For: Chapter One - A Dead Geranium
Wonderful! Please continue quickly.

Name: bubbag (Signed) · Date: 08/29/09 21:47 · For: Chapter One - A Dead Geranium
Wonderful! Please continue quickly.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm thrilled you liked it - and new chapter added :)

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