Reviews For Not Like This
Reviewer: IckleRonnieX
Date: 04/08/10 14:15
Chapter: Breakfast at Stefania's

Russia, wow! This was amazing, and very different for me, since I seldom read mystery. It was really well written. I didn't really expect the murderer to be Winston, and when he told George what he was doing, framing him and all, suddenly everything clicked. The champagne, the shop name, everything.

It was really good! Though it would have been better, in my opinion, if you had done it longer. I devoured it in less than ten minutes and I wanted to read more! If you wrote a mystery chaptered fic, I would so follow it, seriously.

I loved the end. I was like, you bloody coward. But it was perfect, it kind of wrapped the whole thing. I really liked how you switched from third person, to first, then to third again. It was really interesting.

Great job! Seriously :D

Ronnie :D

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 10/23/09 8:09
Chapter: Breakfast at Stefania's

Hello, Thought it was about time I dropped you a review. This is a good mystery story, although I did get a bit confused at first because I was expecting the George to be George Weasley and I couldn't work out why he was a detective. I really should read carefully - ha ha. I liked the plot of this, although I had an inkling that Winston had done it (his surname and the shop did it for me) I couldn't work out how he'd done it - the champagne *slaps head* of course!

Okay, nit pick time. There were a few missing comma's especially after words like 'well' and before 'sir'. Also 'sir' shouldn't be capitalised. I think it is in America, but here it isn't (I had to double check this in HBP where Harry says 'You don't have to call me sir, sir." - ahh, favourite line.)

I loved the beginning of this story. The opening paragraph was wonderfully descriptive and the poor old lady's despair was well written. And the end was great. I loved that Winston just ran.

Well done. ~Carole~

Author's Response: CAROLE! Finally, SOMEONE got the shop name! That was my amazing sly detail of giving it away, you are SO clever! But it is always the Champagne, rookie mistake ;-) Russia using Americanisms? *gasp of eternal horror* /fail I will go and change those >.< Thankyou for pointing those out Caroleeee, I am glad you enjoyed the fic. *hugs* (and well done again on the shop name!) Russia xxxxx

Reviewer: Sagen
Date: 09/02/09 16:07
Chapter: Breakfast at Stefania's

Russia!!!
I loved that story! You are a great writer! I loved how much detail you used in it. I loved how ou wrote the killer in first person for most of it. It mad me feel like I was the killer. lol. I loved how you switched between third-erson to first-person and bakc to third-person. It was wonderful. I feel bad for George though. Poor George.
Haha, it was awesome!
-Gen, xoxo. :)

Author's Response: Gen! Thankyou so much! I smiled so much when I saw this :-D It was really hard to make sure you didn't know who the killer was right up until the end, I re-wrote parts of it three times or more, I just couldnt decide. I know.. poor George, but at lesst he wasnt convicted of it, or at least he wasnt in the sequel in my head ;-) Thanks again Gen! Russia xxxxx

Reviewer: Illiria
Date: 08/26/09 7:14
Chapter: Breakfast at Stefania's

Nicely ended! I really enjoyed this, you write your characters well and the murder and framing was well planned out. I liked the amount of detail you used when descriding the prosscess of finding and using evidence. I really did love the end! I think you should have a go at writting a longer murder mystery, maybe chaptered as it would allow you chance to employ more supsense and Winston Smith seems like he could cover up several murders. Very well written hun, good luck.
Ria xx

Author's Response: Yeah, I was going to make this chaptered, but I Fail at time keeping and I told myself (Up until 2 weeks before the challenge ended,) that I wasn't going to enter... then I failed and had to whip this up mega fast because the bunny wouldnt leave me alone! I do love describing things! Soe can draw.. some can describe... And the people who can do both are just unfairly talented. lol Thankyou for the review! Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: Yeah, I was going to make this chaptered, but I Fail at time keeping and I told myself (Up until 2 weeks before the challenge ended,) that I wasn't going to enter... then I failed and had to whip this up mega fast because the bunny wouldnt leave me alone! I do love describing things! Soe can draw.. some can describe... And the people who can do both are just unfairly talented. lol Thankyou for the review! Russia xxxxx

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