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Name: SaboteurVictory (Signed) · Date: 11/30/11 6:18 · For: A War of Words
This was wonderful! Definitely put a smile on my face :)

Name: I hate Tuney (Signed) · Date: 03/09/11 14:51 · For: A War of Words
How nise..you perfectly described the characters! I really enjoyed it! Well done :D

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 09/08/09 2:11 · For: A War of Words
"You see, Moony you really are so stubborn at times. I don't know why you didn't just give in to start with. You always knew she was going to win."

"I think I put up a good fight, actually, Padfoot."

"Call that a fight? HA! Weak as water, you dumb werewolf."

"OY! Just because I decided there were more important things than playing the field, you mangy cur, doesn't mean I'm weak."

"If you say so, Moony. If you say so."

"Prongs, back me up here."

"Errr, leave me out of it. You know I'm not supposed to be here. If Lily caught me she'd skin me dead."

"Where are you supposed to be then?"

"Oh, tea with Sniv .. I mean Severus. She has this idea that we can all be friends now."

"Well, perhaps you can."

"Don't talk rubbish, Moony. Just because your wife quite likes him, doesn't mean you have to."

"It has nothing to do with Dora."

"Why are your ears going pink then?

"He saved my life, remember. And Harry's a few times."

"PAH! So what. He's still a snivelling, greasy-haired ..."

"He's not really greasy-haired now though, is he? I mean his hair now he's not-quite-a-ghost-more-of-a-solidified-memory is in reasonable condition."

"Godric, Prongs, you sound like you should be writing the beauty column for Witches Weekly. Face it, I'm the one with the luscious locks here - not Snivellus!"

"Oy, Sirius Black. If anyone has great hair here, it's me not you. I can change mine whenever I like."

"Ah, Nymphadora. We were wondering when you were going to show up. Been tripping over things recently?"

"Actually, cousin dear, I've been talking to Fred."

"Hmm, I don't like the sound of this guys. My wife and Fred Weasley - very dangerous combination."

"You better believe it, O-husband-of mine."

Carole sighs and turns all of them out of her living room, except Sirius because his hair is looking rather gorgeous today. Lovely story, Terri. Both characters very IC, and the touches where he remembers the Marauders are beautiful. Gah! Remus must have been so lonely, for so long. I still can't accept that they're dead *Rushes off to read ALMT again* Hope you like this review ~Carole~

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 09/01/09 2:54 · For: A War of Words
Ahhh, I love you Terri, but you have just ruined my life. (okay exaggeration). How am I going to write this scene without plagiarising the heck out of it now.

First off, characterisation spot on. Remus and Tonks at their most stubborn. You know he's going to have to give in, but he puts up a fight, doesn't he - silly man. The age difference and Tonks' logic really made me giggle. She's so sneaky and I'm glad you mentioned her Potion making skill. She had to get an O at OWL level to study at NEWT so must have been pretty handy at it. (Plus she learned Wolfsbane in year seven *sniggers at nod to own fic*

I really liked the humour you added to the dialogue. Too many Remus/Tonks fics are angsty and show him as totally humourless - but she had a sense of humour (see her sparring with Moody 'Both buttocks still on') and would not have fallen for someone totally devoid of fun.

The only nitpick I have is Remus calling her 'honey' because it doesn't quite ring true to my ears. It is hard to think of an endearment he would have used really - dear can sound so patronising, 'darling' is too much for him and 'love' just makes him sound like a cockney - ha ha.

The flow of this was excellent. I forgot really that it was all dialogue because it didn't seem forced.

Great job. ~Carole~

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 08/23/09 5:45 · For: A War of Words
Wow! I really liked this conversation and I think you stuck to all the competition rules very nicely. And, WHAT? You can't win because you are a mod? You should, really. I think it's one of the very best in the competition.

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 08/22/09 21:05 · For: A War of Words
That was lovely! I enjoyed that very much. It's amazing how well you can convey character through dialogue alone, and you did a great job with Remus and Tonks. I loved the humor too - good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Name: MorganRay (Signed) · Date: 08/22/09 14:50 · For: A War of Words
I love this conversation. :) I like how Tonks is cheeky through the entire thing, and there are some really funny lines in here, too. I like how they're comfortable talking to each other, and even in a serious conversation, they're obviously still enjoying each other's company.
Good challenge entery!

Name: Racing Co (Signed) · Date: 08/21/09 19:39 · For: A War of Words
I haven't read much in the way Tonks/Lupin fics, but I thought this was absolutely fantastic. It was charming and sweet without going overboard on the cuteness. It's a tough line to walk. I thought you picked a very good "untold story" that suited an all-dialogue challenge well. I think half the battle for the Gift of Gab is picking a tale that can be easily told by conversation.

Anyway, I really liked your portrayal of Tonks. She's a fun character, isn't she? You made her very lively, and I enjoyed the whole side story about wrestling the squid. That seems like such a plausible thing, knowing her!

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. When the restriction was put in no Marauder Era, I was at a loss. So, I got to write a Marauder and include a bit of Marauderishness in my story. If you haven't read it yet and are looking for a great Remus/Tonks fic, I would suggest Carole's (Equinox Chick) Apparently Asleep. Thanks again, Terri

Name: ron lover (Signed) · Date: 08/21/09 18:01 · For: A War of Words
I really love this story. It's my favorite for the Gift of Gab prompt thing. I really love what they said. Some of it was funny and some of it was cute. I really hope this one wins. You did a great job on it.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Unfortunately, as a mod I can't win. But, it was so much fun to write. Thanks again, Terri

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