Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 08/30/09 11:05
Chapter: The Beginning of the End

okay, Ash, I loved it. I was really REALLY sad though. *sniffle sniffle* I think this is like exactly what could have happend if JKR would have written about those missing hours. I especially think this lkine was great, with the double meaning: “Don’t worry about where I’m going, you’ll know soon enough.”
Because of course he thinks he'll capture Pettigrew and that Hagrid will know he took revenge, killed the evil traitor, ect. but Hagrid- and everyone he tells what happened, like Dumbledore- will think he went off to -well, you know what I mean- you wrote it!
And the end is very nice, him regretting thyat he broke his promise to his best friend... and I like how he wants to make sure Harry is safe (:
I think you could maybe add a bit more to the second to last paragraph. It's nice this way, but I would like to have a it more detail about how he was feeling, what he was thinking, blah blah blah. :P
I enjoyed this fic; great job!
~Andi

Author's Response: Thank you Andi! I'm glad you liked it. It would have been longer had it not originally been for class. Processor Terri was already nice enough to let it be much too long already so at the time I was trying to keep it short. I may rewrite this one day and make it longer though. You'll be the first to know if I do. Miss you kiddo. -Ash

Reviewer: Prongsy lover
Date: 08/25/09 20:12
Chapter: The Beginning of the End

AWESOME!!! I luv ur story, I would have NEVER thought of ANYTHING like that. Thumbs up 5 stars

Author's Response: Thank you very much! :)

Reviewer: Hermiones_Therapist
Date: 08/23/09 16:13
Chapter: The Beginning of the End

Awesome. Depressing, but awesome. good job.

H_T

Author's Response: Thank you! Depressing, I know. But unfortunately for Sirius, it's his character.

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 08/23/09 11:29
Chapter: The Beginning of the End

I really like this story. It kind of makes me sad at the end how he couldn't keep his promice. You did a great job on this story.

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

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