Reviews For The Last Evans
Reviewer: ginnygirl16
Date: 08/13/09 20:43
Chapter: Beginnings of a Bad Summer

Hello!

I wanted to start off by saying that your summary was wonderful, it got me hooked before I read the story, and started the story off with a great bang. Great job!

The originality of having the Evans dislike Vernon was fresh, and I thoroughly enjoyed it, though I don't think he would be rude enough to belch at the dinner table;)

One thing though, that I'm not sure about is your characterization of Lily. For the most part, there is nothing wrong with it, except that I think you may have confused your timelines a bit. If Lily is eighteen, then she is dating James (Remus says that they were dating during seventh year in the OOtP), but you have her referring to him as Potter. Unless this is meant to be a joke (which I didn't get from it), then I rather doubt they would still be calling each other by their surnames.

Besides that, though, it was quite good (especially for missing your beta). Your ending was quite good, though, I will admit, I thought that Petunia and Vernon had eloped. (Or have they? Next chapter perhaps). Overall it was very enjoyable, and I look forward to reading more. Keep up the good work.
~ginnygirl16~

Author's Response: I'm glad you've liked it so far. One thing I want to clarify is that the very beginning of the story is something that hasn't happened yet. Its the moment when she realises that she is the last Evans. but that is still to come. as for Vernon, I don't like him at all. i think he fostered Petunia's hate of magic. He will get more classy in future chapters, though only because he wants to appear better than the "magicians". Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 08/13/09 10:30
Chapter: Beginnings of a Bad Summer

I like this story so far. I hope the next chapter is up soon.

Author's Response: Don't worry, I have it written. I just need my beta to check it over

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