oh my god this story was beautiful, romantic, and heartbreaking all at the same time...sigh...I loved it!
Author's Response: I was going for those three! Thanks so much!
Wow!! that was one of the best fan fics I have ever read and I have read a lot
Author's Response: That is the highest compliment that I've recieved! Thank you so much! It means a lot to me. :)
I love the way you characterised. Lily and James! It is so easy to forget that they were so young, but you did a really great job of bringing their ages into the story while exploring how fear and anxiety can age a person. This one shot is a really great piece and definitely worthy of the QSQ!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Writing them was so much fun, but it's a shame that I can't do it again! Have you ever tried writing them? If not, I think you should! Thank you so much for this review, it means a lot!
nice. thats all i have to say. nice
Author's Response: Thanks!
This is very sad and sweet at the same time. I'm a big fan of James/Lily and you captured the mood perfectly. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm a huge James/Lily fan myself, and I'm glad that I accomplshed something. It's like I'm giving back to James and Lily, as odd as it seems. : )
Aww! This is one of the few oneshots on MNFF where I can genuinely go "awww" every time I read it. It's really sweet, from start to finish and I love how it ends. I especially like the reference to redheads. Well done, you really deserved the QSQ!!
Author's Response: That is such a high complimant! I really like that reference too, and I'm glad it wasn't to cheesy. Thank you so very much!
Author's Response: I'm glad you think so! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
wow that is really goof love it!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I bawled like a baby while reading this. Beautiful. Best of luck with the QSQ's- you have my vote!
Author's Response: That last sentence made my day! Thank you so much; it really means a lot. Thank you for the compliments and reading and reviewing. :)
Ohhhh man. If I ever meet someone who is not a J/L shipper, I will refer them to this! It's hot and funny and yet not at all too fluffy. It's very real and I love the way you pull of this characterization. Well done. Beautiful.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's an amazing compliment. I tried to keep away the fluff because of what's happening in the story, and also because I'm not a big fan of reading it. I hope it wasn't too hot, because that wasn't what I was going for, but I wanted a balancce of everything that you mentiond. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. : )
Very good! Baby Harry= sooooo cute!
Over all very sweet : D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad that Harry was so cute! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
This is so sad . . .
Author's Response: (I'm going to assume that by sad you mean the story itself and not my writing. ;) ) Thank you for reviewing, and especially for reading. I'm glad that I got emotion into this story. Thank you again for reading and reviewing!
great story babe! lol i read it before i just didnt know you wrote it! ;)
Author's Response: Haha, thanks, honey. : P I'm glad you like it.
Awww. It's so sweet, especially the end.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad that you think it's sweet.
Very good story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad that you liked it.
Gorrgeous writting. Really really sweet. Ending was perfect and I think you got James and Lily's relationship perfect.
So nice. I'm favouriting it. xx
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It means so much that I got their relationship right. Wow, you're favoriting it? Really? Thank you so much!
That story was adorable. Whilst ostensibly being about something as mundane as everyday life I think you beautifully captured all the characters you mentioned. It was sweet, and fluffy without being sickeningly sweet, and I think you captured the relationship between Lily and James really well.
However I also liked your little characterisations of the others, like Remus being a flatterer, and Harry liking to chew redheads' hair. I LOVED the part where Lily suggested he might have a husband, which shows an optimism in her in terms of the gay rights movement and also Sirius' response. I love Sirius, but you can definitely see him as a heterosexual man who is slightly wary of gays.
I love how honest James and Lily are. It helps prove that they really could have spent the rest of their lives together. And the way they know they are going to die but try to enjoy things for now. I also loved the way James was playing 'mother' to Harry while Lily wanted to get him back into bed. That is a very rambling review- but thank you so much for a beautiful story that held the attention throughout and managed to be optimistic despite the reader's knowledge that James and Lily will die, partly because we know Harry doesn't (again, squeal over Hungarian Horntail reference which would have seemed clunky in a poor story but here managed to fit seamlessly). Thank you!
Author's Response: I think that I should be thanking you, not the other way around! I'm glad that you liked the other characters characterizations. I'm so happy that you loved that Harry might have a husband. I can't tell you how happy I am that you wrote that paragraph. I think that Sirius could be too. It's a shame, though. I'm so glad that the Hungarian Horntail fit. I was worried about that part. I wasn't sure if it would fit or if it would ruin the story. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story, and you are welcome for me making it, I guess? Well, thanks again!
Hi Alyssa! I'm the really weird girl who reads this story daily! (well almost daily. I think I have added a fair few reads to this story... like a lot :o )
I just wanted to point out one of my favourite parts of the story
He’s chewing on the tail of his favourite toy, a Hungarian Horntail. Remus got it for him - he says that Harry needs to have at least one manly toy.
“Look at you, my young man - playing with a Hungarian Horntail. You’re growing up so quickly. You’re also very handsome. All of the girls will be chasing after you.”
This makes me smile a lot when I read it and then think how ironic it is that Harry actually battled one thirteen years later (MERLIN. he was only fourteen. Yes I just realised how small he was :O )
The mashed potatoes thing is just too adorable, I seriously go AWWWW every time I read it.
“Now, you don’t spit on your mother,” he says to Harry. “It’s not nice.” Harry cracks a smile, and James leaves the kitchen.
Of course, he just had to jinx it. Harry spits out the bite that I gave him.
I can totally see James doing that. Haha.
Alyssaaaaaaa, I love this story loads!
Okay, this is where I'll end my super random review.
I wish you posted more stories!
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, Ronnie! I was smiling so much when I read this review. Thank you so much! I'm glad that you told me your favorite parts. I like to know what people like. I can't believe that you read this so much! I'm more shocked that its worthy of being read so much. You just made me realize how small he was too! He seems so old in the movies. Do you mean more James/Lily stories? If you do, I'm working on one now. It takes place when they are in school. I've stopped working on it so I can get Gryff some points. I have other stories up. I don't like them as much as this one, but I don't think that they are terrible. . . Thank you so much for this review! You don't know how much it means to me that you made this.
Hey Alyssa! That story was really well written! It was a little much at the beginning for me, but that's what I get for reading a high rated story =P
Although it was something that really surprised me, it was something that most likely happened. James' playful attitude is spot on to his personality and I like how you portrayed Lily as well. She was lustful and playful herself, which reflects how her and James aren't that different after all.
All of the scenes with Harry were so cute and sweet! I like the interaction between Lily and her son and the descriptions how he was "half of me". And of course all of the little reflections on how Harry is so much like James! It really makes me wonder how Harry would have turned out if his parents were to live.
And that's exactly what you wanted to happen wasn't it? The ending is what makes this story entirely. It's just so... sad! James sticks up for his friend, which he would do quite often, and we know that he shouldn't! Lily's so accepting of her fate and the acceptance is the tear jerker!
You've done a good job on writing something that shows so much emotion! Awesome job Toaster! =D
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Sarah! I'm glad that you liked this. To be honest, I didn't try that hard for the emotion. It just flowed right out of me. I can't write anything that will come out good if it's forced, so I didn't really try for all of the emotion. (Is it just me or does that sound braggish? If it does to you, then I'm sorry. I didn't mean for it to end up like that.) I'm so happy that you like how I portrayed James and Lily. I really work hard on that so I'm super happy that I got that right. I can't thank you enough, Sarah! Thanks!
Very cute yet sad story. The beginning of this story is very fluffy, though maybe a bit too much for my tastes, however it is still sweet and made me smile.
I forgot until the very end that this is written a few days before their deaths, and when I did remember, it threw a shadow of sadness over it all.
I like Lily's feelings about the book, I thought that part was very well written, as was her interactions with Harry.
I think my favourite line was 'curled up into a ball of blue fabric'. I thought that was so sweet.
I thought the inclusion of Lily's dreams were good as well, especially the bits about Muggle torture. I think a lot of people sort of forget that she is Muggle-born, and so would have a lot of Muggle ways of life ingrained in her as well.
Only thing was:
'Waking up at five in the morning to the sound of Harry crying is common. Having James get up, too, is out of the ordinary.' something about this sentance doesn't really make sense. I think its your use of the word 'too'. It implies that Harry waking in the early morning isn't common, where you have just stated that it is. I think you should rephrase the second part of the sentance, if you mean that it's a rarity for James to get out of bed to go to Harry. Something like 'However, having James get up was out of the ordinary.' To me, it just makes more sense.
Other than that, it was a lovely fic :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad that you liked it. Thanks again!