This was a good story! Hermione is my second-favorite character (after Neville) so I love to read stories about her (and write them). Only one mistake I found:
'She then abruptly turnded on her heal and left the kitchen.' This is the wrong spelling of 'heal' and it should be spelt 'heel'.
Very nice :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I really appreciate readers' input.
Brilliant story! I love your writing style :) Are you planning on writing more Hermione fics?
Author's Response: Thank you for your review and yes! I love writing about Hermione because I think there's so much of her story yet untold =)
I really enjoyed reading this, and I hope you will write more. I always appreciate it when authors incorporate characters not often included in the books, so I was pleased to see Hermione's mother in the story. I agree with dandy_like_a_lion in that you showed Hermione and her mother's relationship. Overall, a really good story.
Author's Response: Thank you for your input! And I definitely hope to write more Hermione fics!
Very well done. I especially like the last paragraph, it really shows their relationship.
Author's Response: Thanks for you review!
You did a great job introducing the story, setting the stage and making us want to read. I like the idea that Hermione was intrigued by magic and wanted to research it at the library (where else?) even before she finds out she is a witch.
I would have liked to see more time spent in the explanation of Hogwarts. And I thought it a little out of character that Mrs. Granger would keep him on the stoop while he (very precipitously) launched into his explanation. You could have added a little more suspense by expanding this section.
I really like your characterization of Hermione. It feels very true and I love (love, love) the way you brought out her mother's love, pride and sympathy in the very last line.
Delightful story, please write more...
Author's Response: Im glad you liked it and thank you for the tips. I plan to write more Hermione fics in the future, hopefully soon!
oh that was really cute and really good! i like the last paragraph the most. it was awesome! two thumbs up!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.
