Wow, Terri. Wow. You have outdone yourself in this one-shot. I loved how you were so straight forward with Molly and what is going through her head.
I also really like your writing style. It's great! Good work. I'm excited to read more of your stories. :) ~MJ
Author's Response: MJ,
Thank you. I wrote that when I was going through the very real the possibility of losing my own son, so I really connected with what Molly would have been feeling. I guess it was just my own way of dealing with everything I was feeling and just couldn't express outwardly to anyone. After all, I had to keep those rose-colored glasses on that everything was going to be fine, which thank Merlin, turned out to be.
so sad made me cry. great job :)
Even without knowing your situation, this is an extremely poignant story. No mother should have to bury her child, yet Molly has to face that. You have written this superbly. It would be easy to become melodramatic - to be honest I wouldn't blame you - but you haven't, and because of that it's even sadder. I love the way you've interweaved happier days into the story. They would have so many glorious memories of Fred. Of course it in no way makes up for his death, but at least they have something.
It's taken me a few days to write this review because I was crying too much the first few times I read it. I don't cry easily with fanfiction. You and Pallas have managed it. Beautiful! ~Carole~
whoa. i got teary eyed..that was great
Terri, this is so wonderfully written. You were definitely right about the tissues. I hate to nit-pick, but I am going to bring up one or two things, just to make this a proper review.
She knew now the twins had defiantly done something. Did you mean “defiantly” or definitely? This is confusing.
“I am more worried about how Hogwarts will survive them than I am about them,” Arthur said. This is awkwardly phrased. I think it’s the double use of “them” that makes it weird. Perhaps “I am more worried about how Hogwarts will survive than I am about the twins,” would make it flow better?
In my opinion, the end was the strongest part, the section that made the whole piece come together. The emotions were so tangible. Thank you so much for writing this story and sharing your experience with us. As has been previously stated, this is the best account of Molly's grief I have encountered yet. Excellent job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review. And you are right, I did type the wrong word. I try to catch myself when typing it, but for some reason, I tend to miss it and use the wrong one. You are also right about the awkward phrasing. Reading it again, I can see it. Thanks again. Terri
Never having been close to this situation, I can't imagine what Molly might have been going through, but the anguish and the grief is palpable. I found it realistic that Molly would view Fred and George's troubles as exasperating and troublesome as they occur, but as strengthening and with fondness when looking back. I can imagine her blankly looking arouond her house, the memories rushing through her, slowly increasing the pain and that's what you've shown us. I like the memories you've selected as well.
I hope this served as an outlet for you as well, Terri. Your writing is always wonderful, and this is no exception.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. This began swarming in my head last week and with everything, it just sat there until my muse decided today she had to write it out. Thanks again. Terri
Not surprisingly, best account of Molly dealing with this that I have read.
Sorry, I just can't say more...
Author's Response: Thea,
Thank you. From you those few words mean everything.
Wow this is such a moving concept I was pretty much in tears before I started reading! It must have been quite difficult to write for that reason alone, and the fact that no one can really imagine what another person is feeling in times of grief so great job.
The way you incorporated the memories was fantastic. I loved how you used the memory of the twins turning Ron's teddy into a spider. That made me laugh through my tears, it was a nice touch. And I thought your characterisation of the twins was good too. Your invented memory of them receiving their acceptance letters was very credible.
One thing about the ending though. I found it a bit too wordy and repetitive. I understand that there are only so many things that Molly can bear to think about but perhaps the way you structured the sentences could be more varied and worded differently? Just a few thoughts, but overall I loved it :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. There is a reason it seemed so repetitive. In that situation, facing that, the brain grabs hold of a few thoughts and keeps repeating itself. I was trying to capture Molly's turmoil over the loss of her son. I am going to look it over again and see if I can make that a bit clearer. Thanks again. Terri
I really like this story. It's so sad. I probably would've cried if I wasn't listening to music at the same time I was reading it. You did a really good job on Molly.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I warned about needing tissues because I knew for some, this would be too much. Thanks again. Terri