oooh cheeky sirius black .i luv lily!!!!
So, I'm looking through alll of this and I'm kicking myself. Okay, not literally, because I''m Japanese with really short legs, but you get my point. I've read all your stuff and I'm just mesmerised. You can tell your a writer with experience and you write with a ourpose. For one thing, you've got this whole emotional gripping/personal struggle thing down pat.
I absolutely love this piece because it pins Sirius andf Lily down for some really deep discussion. You know, with all the scenes JKR describes in her literature, I see this happening. I imagine they all became close and that the Order acted as (especially for lonely ones like Remus or Sirius or Aberforth) as a second family. This has humour in it, but I like that you never sound cliche in any of your pieces. Yoy probably don't write much anymore, but you have talent.
I should review right after I read. like a sensible person, yeah?
Idiot ... good job, Terri.
Sorry for the delay
Ah, how we act around different people. I think this is one of the best stories I've read all week!
Looks like great minds think alike, and I’m back to leave you some more reviews due to your now official badger author of the month status! I thought this was a very thoughtful little piece. I liked the way you contrasted James and Lily’s characters and how Sirius needed both James’ banter and Lily’s serious comfort. I thought it was interesting that Sirius didn’t tell Lily everything about his encounter. It’s sweet the way he protects her. I think Lily hit the nail on the head when she told Sirius to stop thinking himself immortal; he does have an undeniable recklessness all throughout canon, despite his good intentions. Also, Lily got angry at that part, which I liked because even though she’s being calm and reasonable with him, we know she has a temper, and there it shows.
“So, do you want to hear how the almighty Sirius Black escaped ten Death Eaters single-handed or not?” Sirius smiled and began his story.
“Of course I do,” said Lily as she sat next to him and patted his hand. “You know how much I love your stories.” She smiled at his look of incredulity.
I found this bit a little awkward, because you say Sirius “began his story,” but then Lily says something else before he actually begins. I think maybe if the “began his story” could go after what Lily says, it might make more sense.
Very nice, Terri! I think you did a great job putting so much meat into this short piece.
that was nice! id like to hear the real story tho!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I, too, would like to hear the real story. Who knows, maybe my muse will coax it out of Sirius and I can tell it. Thanks again. Terri
How do you do this? How do you, so effortlessly, manage to make me smile and then weep within the space of a sentence. I'm grinning at Superhero Sirius, laughing along with Lily when James walks in and interrupts them and then my heart drops when you say he told James the real story. It drops even furthur when it sinks in that James and Lily haven't got much longer to live.
I love little snapshot stories like this. They make the characters come even more alive and adds a poignancy to the tale when you know what happens to them all.
Hmm, I bet Peter wasn't visiting him mummy. I bet he was being all sneaky and Death Eatery. *snarls at Pettigrew*
Small nit-pick. I am his best girl - not Lily.
Much love ~Carole ~
Author's Response: Carole,
Thank you for your review. However, wipe your tears and shake off your confusion. I am his best girl, this is Sirius not Remus. Of course, our Mr Black may use that line quite a bit. Thanks again honey.