I really enjoyed this. Good work! =D I loved the idea. You're writing has defiantly improved. Good work.--MJ
What a great idea. You used something so inherently Potterverse i.e Quidditch to show the Marauder relationships. I really enjoyed reading this and I think your characterisation was good. There was just one point about the characterisation of Peter which I thought was a bit off. I'm not sure that he would have like that in McGonagall's office.
I suppose I was just fed up with being shoved in the background.
I just always imagined Peter being fine in the background in his earlier years at Hogwarts and merely happy to be a Marauder even if he was ridiculed by the others. But other than that, your characterisation was good. I did enjoy your Remus. Sometimes I feel that a lot of Marauder era fics have Remus as this sort of passive mediator but I doubt he was always like that. He is a teenage boy and he is going to be a bit stroppy sometimes so well done.
Other nitpicks are merely typos.
I just pointed out to Remus how my life is much worse then yours...
...but instead they seemed even more preoccupied then usual
'Then' should be 'than'
I also loved the way you handled the scene in McGonagall's office. I liked how you had the boys sort it out for themselves with McGonagall merely mediating the process. I thought this tied in well with the title of your fic!
Bringing in the cheek and mischief we all love in the Marauders at the ending was a nice way to finish as well.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I'm glad you enjoyed the fic. Thanks for the corrections. I never really call them nitpicks because I appreciate them anyways! I'll make sure to fix those. Thanks again, ~ginnygirl16~
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This was a great little one shot! It was fun to read, and realistic, too. I can totally see the Marauders getting into a fight about a spot on the Quidditch team, but I liked how there were deeper reasons behind why they were all so upset; Remus never getting anything good because of his "condition", Sirius' horrible family, and Peter always being ignored. That's another thing I loved about this story; you actually gave Peter a voice. I've read a lot of Marauder-era stories where Peter only ever has one or two lines and virtually no part in the story, but you did a great job of incorporating him. And I loved how Professor McGonagall helped them make up in the end.
O.K., so this review is kind of long and rambling, sorry. But I loved your one-shot! Great job! :)
Author's Response: Thank you for the awesome review Vivian! I'm glad you enjoyed the story and my characterizations! I'm working on a couple other Marauder Era fics right now and really enjoying the characters so I'm pleased that you like how I have portrayed them! ~ginnygirl16~
How cute! I liked reading about how the Marauders might have fought with one another - you did a great job of showing their insecurities through their reactions to James making the Quidditch team. Awesome job!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I think that having the Maruaders argue is alot more plausible then having them all peachy friends all the time. They are only human after all! (Despite what many people believe;)) I was hoping to show them so riled up that they spilled everything that had ever bothered them about each other before, and that they had just kept quiet. And what better way then to have them over a Quidditch team? (Boys will be boys lol). Thanks again! ~ginnygirl16~