Reviews For Across the Pumpkin
Reviewer: FawkesToTheRescue
Date: 09/17/10 20:13
Chapter: Across the Pumpkin

How cute. You would assume that Lily and Sirius would become friends. They just seem like the kind of people that would, don't they?

Anyhow, I really enjoyed this story. Every moment counts. That's what's neat about fanfiction - you can take a small moment, like a conversation between Lily and Sirius, and turn it into something worth reading and enjoying. With good authorship skills, of course.

I think you did an incredible job on this fic. It was cute and believable, with a nice plot and a warm theme. It brightened up my heart a little. Don't ask me why - it just did. ;)

Thanks for writing this. I enjoyed it.


Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely review! I'm happy that you enjoyed reading it. There's no greater compliment to an author than a content reader.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 07/28/09 15:16
Chapter: Across the Pumpkin

This story is lovely, Bine. I truly like the way you've written a tentative friendship between the pair of them. The first line had me in stitches. Sirius sums up Lily very accurately, and in speaking that line, we see how perceptive he is.

It is the simple things that make this good. A pumpkin plant, both of them liking the feel of dirt on their hands. You've successfully stopped Lily being a Mary Sue by that one line. I also liked the comparisons between their two families, and the realisation that perhaps they have something in common. Sirius last few lines to Lily, about giving James a chance are obviously heartfelt - so well done.

I have a nit-pick over the use of the bark-like laugh - simply because since MWPP I'm hyper sensitive to any dog references regarding Sirius. But it in no way detracted from the fic, and other readers would probably find it valid (and it is canon). I did like it when his laugh changed from not being 'bark-like'.

Lovely tale, especially from someone who professes not to write Marauder.


Author's Response: Thanks, my dear. And I do write Marauder - from time to time. True, not all the time like you *wink* but in my opinion often enough. And I love reading a good Marauder story. The characters are fantastic to explore and read about. So this one-shot in a way was my exploring of Sirius and Lily and how their friendship might have started. The comparisons between their families I never saw like this; it developed while writing. While having Sirius and Lily talk about their siblings, I realised that, indeed, they have quite some similarities in regard to their brother and sister respectively.

Thank you for reading and leaving such a lovely review.

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 07/27/09 16:48
Chapter: Across the Pumpkin

I really like this story. It's really good. It was fun to read, too.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: The_Dream_Team
Date: 07/27/09 15:34
Chapter: Across the Pumpkin

Oh i liked that a lot! it was really sweet. i like how you made the connections between sirius and lily. it was very interesting! two thumbs up for an excellent story!

Author's Response: Thank you!

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