Hi there,

It's refreshing to see an Oliver fic and also one where Percy gets his revenge on the twins. As someone who has just written a whole fic about Oliver (albeit with a very different partner) I was intrigued at the set up.

First off, your characterisation was good. The twins, of course because you know them so well, were great, and so were the girls. I liked your OC - she was very strong. I'm very pleased they got together in the end.

I do have a few little nit-picks *sorry*

What have you gotten yourself into now?” This, unfortunately is a pet peeve of mine. 'Gotten' is an American word and Percy wouldn't use it. You could possibly get away with Teddy Lupin saying it as it's more modern but not Percy - or any Trio characters *crawls back into Brit pick hole*

narcissus the plural is narcissi

Rent Sorry, timeline error, they couldn't have seen this before 1993 (which is when your fic is set) because it didn't come out on Broadway in America until 1994.

But, they're all very minor, and it is good to see a fic where Percy gets revenge.

~Carole~

Author's Response: G'day Thanks for the review, Carole. I'm actually writting an Oliver fic too, that's why I wrote a one-shot. To see if I could get his characterisation right. I'll have to take a look at yours. LOL, I am good at the twins characterisation, cause I love George and Fred is just a more extreme George in a way. The brit-pick is fine, no idea what I'll change it too, although I could always be a Smart-Alec (LOL, that's my nephew's name) and say he picked it up from Antoinette, since Aussies say it too. Damn about the Rent... I have no idea what to turn it to... hopefully no one will mind. That section was based on someone I know. Go, Percy, get your revenge! LOL ...xXxLove SandyxXx...