i thought chapter one was really good! you have good 'colour words' (my english/creative writing teacher calls them) i think you captured the charters well and i thought that could have really happened after the 'finnal battle' oh and i was wondering if you could send me how to post storys i cant figure out how, it probubly says my pen name but anyways, its emmer
I'm very impressed by this story. It's so good! Please, please, please update!
Awesomeee hurry up with the next chapter lol
Wow! I liked this chapter. When Ron started crying, my heart nearly broke.
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This story is great! I love Ron/Hermione stuff, and this is just perfect. I loved when they were in the RoR, and I thought it was just the right balance of fluff and... not.
I hope your musical went well (I'm assuming it's done, as musicals don't normally go for six months), but I was wondering, are you going to update this? I understand about not having a lot of time, but I would say this is a sufficient cliffhanger, and this story deserves and ending.
~Manda
I love this storyline keep writing please it inspires me to be a better person I love you for writing this. Love Ginny x
amazing story so far! u sound like jk rowling herself! and i absolutely love how its hermionies view! it is all around amazing! finish soon!
I have thoroughly enjoyed your fanfic so far! I especially loved chapters 1 and 4. Chapters 2 and 3 had slightly far-fetched dialogue but I liked it anyway. Keep up the good work on this story, can't wait to read more about Ron and Hermione!
I just read all 4 chapters and I love it ! Can't wait for more!
I like the story so far! its interesting! good luck with your musical :)
This is really good! Can't wait for the next chapter.
Just some constructive criticism though. Be careful when you are writing that you are clear about who is talking. I don't remember which chapter it was but I was a little confused as two which of the trio was talking.
Author's Response: I will take more care to watch it. thanks :)
Everything is positively perfect! Except you need to write soo much more!!!!!!!!!!!!!! These little short chapters just don't satisfy my hunger! haha' your writing is flawless
Author's Response: Thank you!!! The next few chapters are longer and I hope you like them :)
You are an amazing writer! I love this story all ready - please keep writing and update soon. It is actually quite hard to find stories about the aftermath of the battle, that aren't twisted in some way. Please keep writing!
Careful with keeping Ron in character, you seem to be doing a good job but once in a while there are just little slip ups.
LOVE all your description. It's fantastic.
I really enjoyed this, it was written quite well and the characters remained true to their original selves much more than in others I have read. You should definitely continue :)
Ive found someone that lovess describing words like I do, haha i love adjectives to descibe people i though i would share that. That was sweet her and Ron the little dance and them being made to dance together forever commenty thing.I've finally found a Ron/Hermione fic to follow!! YES MISSION ACCOMPLISHED! I'll be watching you sweetie ;)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I do love adjectives :) Haha now I feel pressure to do good
Oh this story is really cute, I like how you made the secret hideout for them to escape from reality!
Author's Response: Awe thanks! I think they deserved it ;)
Great first chapter. I think you do a nice job of conveying Ron's grief, especially through the conversation he has with Hermione about erasing memories. I also liked how Ron turned to Hermione for comfort at first, and then how he responded to her. It all seemed very true to how a person would deal with grief. There are some great quotes in the story too: "the indecently beautiful day", "both with thoughts whirring faster than an agitated sneakoscope", "his ears began turning the familiar shade of red". And the ending seems appropriate as well because it defnitely gives the message that life moves on after great tragedy. Overall, it was very nicely done! Hope you update soon! :)
Author's Response: Thank you, I tried to use personal experience with grief for Ron. I'm glad it came across! I am just waiting for my second chapter to be approved :) Thank you so much!
