Reviewer: Nez
Date: 08/04/09 7:41
Chapter: Chapter 1: Dreams, Phones, and Iowa

Hey! This is a nice beginning to a story with potential.
So far, I liked Rachel's character better. Her worries are well-presented and very real.
Katie, I think, got upset too quickly - or maybe she's just extremely hot.headed :) I think she also spent a lot of time pondering over the phone thing; I don't think many people would to that.
Anyhow, it's a cool beginning! I'm looking forward to more chapters soon :-)

Author's Response: Wow! I have potential! Who knew? Thanks. I'm gonna have a lot of fun getting deeper into Rachael's character as the story progresses. Yes, Katie did get angry rather quickly, because even though she is usually a very fun person to be around, she's a little bit of a pessimist, and gets angry or upset rather quickly. And I don't think she spent that much time worrying about the phone, but if she did it's because a lot of weird stuff has been happening to her lately, and most people don't answer phones in their sleep. That I know of. :-) I"m glad you like it, and do expect Chapter 2 up soon. it would have been up sooner, but it's been rejected twice because i obviously didn't read the rules carefully enough. Hopefully third time's the charm! H_T

Date: 07/25/09 14:55
Chapter: Chapter 1: Dreams, Phones, and Iowa

I dont think this is too weird...
I think Katie got mad a bit to quickly but other than that I really enjoyed this!
Update as soon as possible =]

Author's Response: Wow...My first review!!! Thanks so much, I'm glad you like this. And you are absolutely right, Katie got mad too fast, but I'm not good at writing long chapters, so I'll go back and fix that. And the first 4 chapters are written, so updates shouldn't be too slow. Thank You! H_T

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