Reviews For After Breakfast
Reviewer: hanname
Date: 01/18/13 14:30
Chapter: After Breakfast

Like it.

Author's Response: Thanks -N-

Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 06/20/12 14:55
Chapter: After Breakfast

Oh this is so sweet! I loved Ron's and Harry's speeches.

Author's Response: Thank you. -N-

Reviewer: Seedy
Date: 05/24/12 5:18
Chapter: After Breakfast

I like ittttttttt, should do one for Harry's wedding too?

Author's Response: Thanks, it’s started, and it’s called Epithalamium. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 05/03/12 2:29
Chapter: After Breakfast

Very nice speech for Harry, it sound like something harrynwould say.

Author's Response: Thank you. -N-

Reviewer: Ginnypotter2699
Date: 01/29/12 5:32
Chapter: After Breakfast

Was this your first story ever on mnff?

Author's Response: It's possible that it was predated by a couple of chapters of Grave Days, but it's my first one shot and therefore my first completed story here, yes. -N-

Reviewer: MaybeOneRaindrop
Date: 01/12/12 11:12
Chapter: After Breakfast

Awwwwww! That made me laugh and cry at the same time! It was really good!

Author's Response: Thanks. That’s what weddings do. -N-

Reviewer: Ginnypotter2699
Date: 12/31/11 4:28
Chapter: After Breakfast

I'm guessing your from north of hadrian's wall but south of the border of England and Scotland. Anyway, nice story.

Author's Response: Your guess is correct (but my pseudonym is a bit of a givaway, too). Thanks for the review. -N-

Reviewer: Shreeja
Date: 12/16/11 19:24
Chapter: After Breakfast

I loved this. It was touching, funny, and everything wedding speeches should be. Ron was hilarious as usual, and Harry had his moments too. And the quick recap of the relationship Ron and Hermione shared throughout the years they've known each other was wonderful..

I would like to know something, in my country, we do not have the same rituals in a marriage, but what is the 'traditional top table layout'? I'd like to know please!

Author's Response:
Thanks again. This is my first ever one shot and (I think) the first story I had approved here. I was working on Grave Days at the time, so it's possible that there were a couple of chapters of Grave Days first. I was aiming for a decent wedding speech. Harry would want to do his best for his best friends.

The Top Table layout in the UK is traditionally: Chief Bridesmaid (not Maid of Honor, which is an Americanism - but she's a Matron of Honour if she’s married), Groom's Father, Bride's Mother, Groom (or Bridegroom if you prefer), Bride, Bride's Father, Groom's Mother, Best Man. This puts Harry and Ginny at opposite ends of the table.

-N-

Reviewer: nayin
Date: 10/20/11 20:41
Chapter: After Breakfast

I don't like it.... I love it!!!

Author's Response: Thanks. -N-

Reviewer: sejackson91
Date: 09/23/11 13:00
Chapter: After Breakfast

I loved it! Please do one of Ron's speech at Harry and Ginny's weding too (or maybe Hermione's speech would be better since Ron was alway oblivious to Harry's feelings)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
The Story of Harry and Ginnt's wedding will be a longer one. The story is Epithalamium and I have several "chapters" planned, but until I finish one of my other chaptered stories (one either side of the wedding) Epithalamium will progress slowly, sorry.
I suppose that you could argue that it started with "The Question (Again)". It will be some time before Epithalamium reaches the wedding, and Ron's best man speech.
-N-

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall
Date: 09/06/11 23:24
Chapter: After Breakfast

Didn't like it, loved it. I have now read your entire output here on mugglenet, some of it twice, and I'd like to ask you to please give us another chapter of 'Aurors & Schoolgirls' which is my favorite of your unfinished work.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
The next chapter of A&S is in the queue. The next Strangers is being reedited and the next Moons rewritten.
-N-

Reviewer: Mie--jadus
Date: 07/16/11 11:04
Chapter: After Breakfast

Cute :)

Author's Response: Thanks :) -N-

Reviewer: Averypotterlover
Date: 05/04/11 21:50
Chapter: After Breakfast

I really loved this!

Author's Response: Thank you. -N-

Reviewer: littlewolf
Date: 04/17/11 20:19
Chapter: After Breakfast

i smiled through the whole story, so i loved it. =)))

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.
-N-

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 03/17/11 4:02
Chapter: After Breakfast

Your perfect grasp of JKR's characters continues to astound me - this one-shot was funny, well-written and just perfectly characterised.

Using Harry as your narrator worked really well, and I think you captured his voice perfectly. I loved the details - especially people, like Hermione's Uncle George, or the conversations other people were having (eg Katie, Demelza and Colin) - it really set up the scene of a wedding in my head and made it so realistic. If you'd told the story from Ron or Hermione's point of view, I think it would have been slightly limited as they wouldn't have been as aware as Harry, who wants to make sure everything runs smoothly.

I liked your Ginny in this too, particularly her behaviour with Steve, and I thought this was a great description of her - "famously fiery fiance". Love the alliteration.

The idea that Hermione has to remind Ron of whom he's meant to thank was very in character.

I also loved Harry's speech - not only was it humorous, but it really showed how well Ron and Hermione fit together, and particularly showed up Ron's good qualities, which I liked, as a lot of people in fanfiction say that Hermione's too good for Ron, which I personally don't think is true, it's just that Ron's better characteristics seem to often be overlooked. (Oh dear, that was a long sentence.) Here's an example of what I mean - ‘Ron is my best friend; he’s brave, generous, clever and funny. He’s right more often than he thinks he is. He’s certainly right more often than Hermione thinks he is.’. What a great line!

Anyway... I could praise this fic for a long time, but I'll leave it here.

~Katrina

Author's Response: youre right, Ron and Hermione would have been in a whirl, although Harry was (I hope) panicking a little about his speech too.

Ive always assumed that Ginny will instinctively defend Harry, even when hes wrong (at least in public). Ron was dealing with a Muggle wedding, although the room doesnt really have much to do, there is a list of people he should thank.

I tried to make Harry tease, praise, and make fun of both Ron and Hermione, while avoiding any mention of magic. If Hermione is too good for Ron, then I suspect that shed

Reviewer: fredweasley7
Date: 03/15/11 17:05
Chapter: After Breakfast

this was great!!! i actually started crying at the end of harrys speech. thats how good it was. this is definitely how their wedding should go :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It was important for me to try to get Harry's speech right. I'm glad you liked it. -N-

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 03/02/11 9:48
Chapter: After Breakfast

Hi, Neil. It’s Soraya here. I thought it was about time I reviewed some of your stories (!) since I've started beta’ing your work.

I really enjoyed this! You told me that this was your first story that got accepted on SIYE and even though I think I’ve read it before I thoroughly relished reading it a second time. Harry’s comments to Ron were delightfully tongue-in-cheek (and so very Harry) and I became quite fond of this Steve character too, believe it or not. What I liked best was how everyone was together — everyone from Hogwarts, who was in Harry’s speech. I like how you characterised the Grangers too.

The humour was probably the best part of it all, because as you wrote “Harry let the cheers subside”, I was also cheering and laughing (in my head of course). That’s the most brilliant way of a writer saying “I know I'm funny”. Harry and Ron definitely have good senses of humour!

Since I read the epilogue of DH more than three years ago, I've always wondered about what Ron and Hermione’s wedding was like, but I never once imagined what their wedding breakfast would be like — most likely because in Asian weddings, there are no wedding breakfasts, so I didn't know about it until now. I think you did a great job on it and really filled in that crack of canon very well, so well done.

Erm, a couple of nitpicks: Demelza “Robins” should be Demelza “Robbins” if my canon memory serves me correctly; “galleons” should be “Galleons”. “In-law’s” doesn’t need the apostrophe. Plus, when someone is speaking for more than a paragraph, the rule is that you start it with a speech mark, but you don't end the paragraph with one, although the next paragraph starts with a speech mark, and this goes on until the paragraphs are broken by narrative. Does that make sense?

OK, I won’t point out any more typos! Seriously though, nice one. And was this your first fic? My first was awful, so well done!

~Soraya~

Author's Response:
Soraya

This was the first story I had approved anywhere. Its probably been rewritten half a dozen times since it first appeared, and its still not right. In my experience there is a Steve at most weddings. A loud and brash relative who is keen to score (at the last one I attended he was a she).

The reception, or the wedding breakfast is a big part of UK weddings. JKR showed us Bills, but she skirted over the speeches and that was a wizard wedding. I wanted something more traditionally English (like Hermione). After all, its traditionally the brides family who host, and they are Muggles marrying off their only daughter. The speeches take a set order, brides father, groom, best man and they all say what they are traditionally supposed to say.

Its definitely Robins, not Robbins, but youre right about Galleons. Also, when I wrote this I wasnt aware of the speech mark rule. I am now, so I really should fix this. Given that youve left me five reviews, Ill make correcting these stories a job for the weekend.

Thanks
Neil

Reviewer: One Lily
Date: 01/29/11 20:09
Chapter: After Breakfast

so good!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks -N-

Reviewer: mugglenetaddict813
Date: 12/26/10 20:29
Chapter: After Breakfast

I absolutely loved this story! The little details of Harry's speech were absolutely perfect. I loved the part where he said he wanted to lock Ron and Hermione in a cupboard to work our their differences. That was such a perfect touch and so true to Harry's character. I was definitely a little teary-eyed at the end. The toasts reminded me a lot of my own wedding! Great work! :)

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

This is the first fanfic I ever submitted. Its been edited into shape several times since then. It was fun writing a speech which was Muggle-friendly, with no mention of magic.
-N-

Reviewer: theempress101
Date: 12/22/10 17:19
Chapter: After Breakfast

this was so sweet. i love it! :) well written and funny. keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I am still writing. -N-

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