awwww..... this is the reason why i love ron and hermione.. they are just too cute together,, :)
well done.. 10 by 10 for you :)
Oh em gee. It’s going to be so hard to not make this review sound overly excited!
I think you can gather that I loved it. So much. I think it might be my favourite Ron/Hermione one-shot. Why? You write them so well! It was a small moment, but it wasn’t overly fluffy and emotional, it’s what would have actually happened when Ron and Hermione weren’t bickering and were alone having a serious conversation. They both were very mature which reflected great with the timeline and they shared that moment where they knew each other’s feelings, yet never really admitted to it. That’s really like the story of their life; playing around each other’s feelings, knowing but at the same time, not knowing. They’re both too insecure to really say it out loud, and I got that sense while I was reading your fic.
You’re summary says it all really, short, sweet and touched with humour.
” Hermione made a small squeaking noise, and Ron suddenly looked wide-awake and alert.
"Er- So's Harry," he added hastily, "So I reckon I don't really mind where we're going or any of that if we're all going together," he finished gruffly.”
I smiled at this part. It’s such a classic Ron thing to do, and it’s rather humorous. I also like the part when Ron mentions to Hermione she should think of shoes because that’s what makes Fleur happy. Again, this is very in character of Ron, not understanding how different the two women are, just placing them both as “women” and therefore, they both should like shoes!
Hermione, too was well in character. One part that makes her work so well for me is, “Maybe I’ll check on Harry and Ron, she thought worriedly, This is ridiculous, she told herself firmly. Harry and Ron are fine! Voldemort didn’t stroll in, kill them in their sleep and creep out quietly, shutting the door behind him!”
She knows her logic is right, but she can’t help but worry about her friends. I always saw Hermione as the sort of “mother” of the group, and you wrote that part spot on.
The thing I like most about this though, is how close to canon to it is. Being able to write the couple so well really makes it great because it’s not too sentimental and emotional, which the characters aren’t! We’ve never seen Ron and Hermione be all loving together, and that’s how most of the romance fics turn out. But yours is perfectly within canon and it makes me even more happier to read than to read Ron and Hermione dating.
The style of your writing is a lot like the actual books too, which is great to see! I’ve always tried to mimic JK’s writing, and just can’t quite do it. But you’ve pulled it off real nicely! The flow of your piece was also nice, no short choppy sentences, it all just flowed together, much like Ron’s words when he wakes up :P
You did a great job with this! I am now going to go off and find more things written by you :) Very wonderful writing!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked it! I wrote this a few summers ago when I was waiting for Deathly Hallows to come out and wondering how JK Rowling was going to finally throw these two together.
That was lovely. I love fluffy pieces like that.
i liked it! it was very realistic and it could have been in the book..very cute..and what makes it cute is that the characters are very realistic