you said you finished this story.........? who was the letter from? who is he going to get with? what will lily say? when are you going to write a sequel and/or other chapterrrrrr?
this is soo cutee and very well written! but it definitely seems like its not finished...
Interesting story, I really like the idea of taking bits and pieces of the years and making them into a one shot. It’s a good way to show the reader what they need to know, when they need to know it.
Your characterization seems spot on to me, and I love the repeating theme of “I am a Gryffindor.” James was very proud to be one, though his family had a history of Gryffindors, and it makes sense that he constantly thought of it. He probably wanted to impress his family, though who knows if they would think James jumping into an icy cold lake is impressive…or just place stupid, and to live up to the Gryffindor name. I also love the relationship between James and Lily. This was something that was being debated not long ago on the forums in the MWPP class, whether or not James love Lily from first sight, and it being a kid love or not. I have to say I agree with what you have here. I think that James would have thought Lily was cute, but would have never really pursued her because of the fact that she is friends with Snape, first and foremost, and maybe he did have interest in other girls, that is wholly possible. You definitely have a lot of food for thought in this story. It is very uncliched and original. :D
Other than that, I would have liked to see some more at the end. As a reader we have a suspicion as to who the letter was from, but we don’t know. I would have really loved to know that. It just feels like there is so much more that the reader doesn’t know at the end, and while it’s implied as to what happens, I would have really loved to read it happen.
Overall, great story! It’s very original, and a good read.
Ahh, you're back, you're back and I'm delighted. (Now go and finish Light Up my Life!). You know something, yours was the first fanfiction I read on this site, and I still rave over it. You have a wonderful lyrical quality to your writing. I love this story and Lily is a joy. Not at all stuffy, or rulebound and I LOVED it when she kissed him (the first time).
I have to agree though, that it seemed a very abrupt ending. I had to go and check whether the story was completed and was then puzzled because it is. Hmmm, I don't know. I sure hope he's not going to let Moony down.
Great story though. Carole xxx
I loved it. really i did. it was original and everything that was already said. BUT. it does seem unfinished. =/ and i'd like to know how you end it. because they OBVIOUSLY end up together and everything.
but great work all the same. ;)
I like this story. It's cool how it's in different years.
Uhhhh, it was really good!!! James was perfect!!! I was getting annoyed with all of the cliches in L/J fics, but this one made me realize why I love them so much!! It was great! Amazing! I loved it!!!!! LOVED IT!!!
bujt therer are a few things that are a llittle unclear to me....
Like which years it always was...I get that they were differern, but if I remember correctly, a part of 7th grade came at the beginning - and then it jumps back???
And the note.
Well, obviously it's from Lily (IS IT??? *hopes*).
But there isn't more?
Althoughit's kind of neet leaving it open for readers to imagine their own endings....
what?!!!!!!!!!!!!!! there has to be something more. it was sooo perfect up the the very note and im a sap for happy endings. srry "trite" as it is MORRREEEEEEEEEEEE plzzzzzzzz! note! note! note! im never going to forget about this now
I thought it was really good. I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work=)
Author's Response: Thanks!
Oh my darling KASK!!! What did the note sayyy!!?!?!?
This is when of the most original approaches to James/Lily I've read in a while. I think it's great that James doesn't fall for her during first year and persue her for all time after. I think it's nice that he takes time to realise. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
i loved it! it was soo good. i love how you showed james he was perfect!
but is it over? the ending was kind of random. it seems unfinished
Author's Response: Hmm, that seems to be a popular thought. I'll see what I can do!
It was really nice to see a story from you again! I always like your stories :) and I liked this one too... I like the way you showed Lily and James' relationship developing and everything ... it was really good ... but is this the actual end?? It seems a bit abrubt and unfinished?
Author's Response: Haha, I was thinking the same thing, but I did just want to do snippets into each year and I think I succeeded with that. Maybe I'll add a follow up or something, who knows!
hi... i love it! LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!! its really good... :) i mean it.... is there going to b another chapter????
Author's Response: I'm not sure yet. Thanks for the review! :)