James and Sirius remind me of some guys I know from my class. I've found that the best way to deal with them is to ignore them or laugh at whatever they say. That usually shuts them up!
Waiting for the next chapter =]
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Haha, I think I've tried to portray James and Sirius like msot guys I know. (They think they are all that and never shutup).:) I'm hopefully going to finish up chapter four and submit it this weekend, but you know how validations are these days (they stay in the queue for about fourteen days). Anyways, keep checking my bio and Most recent for updates on the story, and if you want a sneak preview of chapter four, I will posting one later today on my bio page.:) Cheers! --ginnygirl16
wow! another great chapter! i really like how peter was friends with snape and Lily... they are all kinda outcasts so i guess they would all get along together! i wonder how peter will go from liking snape to hating him like the other marauders. and im still waiting for Lupin! great job! please update soon!!
Author's Response: And another great review from you! I've never really seen Lily as an outcast, just more of a person who cares about others, but looking at my portrayal of her, she does seem to be a bit of an outcast. Hmm...yes, how will they go from err...on speaking terms to...not on speaking terms? (Haha, it feels great to know:)) Yes, I know that you are still waiting for Remus. In fact, it seems as if we have a queue of readers waiting for him. Ah, well, I guess I give in. You can have Remus in the next chapter. (Seriously, I've already written his entrance scene and everything.) I'll due my very best to update this soon, but I am working on a one-shot for a class and also another story. Chapter four is half way done, and I'm about to go work on it some more. Keep checking my bio for updates on it. Keep reading, and thanks for another lovely review! --ginnygirl16
I always thought fanfiction was unfair to Peter, so i really enjoyed this!
I hope you introduce Remus soon, he's one of my fovorite charachters from the book.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you are enjoying this. I'm afraid my portrayals of Peter in other works of mine have been rather unfair too. Actually, this whole story was really a challenge to write him as non-wimpy, which was surprisingly not difficult to do. I guess I had a soft spot for him after all. Ah, Remus, Remus. Whatever am I going to do with you? I find it funny how all the Remus fans are the ones to review and yet, the Sirius/James fans stay away in groves. (It couldn't have anything to do with my characterization of them could it;))I'm writing Remus chapter right now. Unfortuantley you will have to wait until chapter three is validated, but I promise Remus fans: He is going to make a grande entrance. Thanks so much for reviewing! --ginnygirl16
wow james and sirius are horrible! they r so mean to poor peter! another great chapter! please update soon! o and when does remus come in?
Author's Response: James and Sirius are so mean. Funny how none of us thought that they were horrible when they treated Severus the same way, eh? Haha. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. Chapter three is in the queue, and I'll give you a hint: It is called Transfiguration Trouble so you can guess what that means ;) I'm writing Remus grand entrance right now and it should be ready soon. Keep reading! --ginnygirl16
You've stayed meticulously true to the canon...good job! Isn't it interesting that Peter (as portrayed by you) was rather kind as a kid, yet ended up dark, while bullies Sirius and James fight with the Order? My favorite character in this fanfic so far is Peter himself. Despite his clumsiness, he has a happy-go-lucky air about him. Not unlike Neville, eh?
Author's Response: Thanks so muchfor your awesome review! I'm glad you are enjoying Peter how I have written him. I try to show a connection with the boys (including Snape) in comparison to there connection and relationships as adults. (Snape and Peter as DE's). I am glad that you like Peter. I really actually despised his character until I started writing this and now I've started to take a liking to him. I hope you'll keep reading! --ginnygirl16
well i'm not really a peter fan myself and it did make siruis look mean but ......its okay can't what for chapter two thow!!
Author's Response: Thanks very much for reviewing! You know, until I took the MWPP class on the forums, I despised Peter's character too. Actually I sort of challenged myself to write this because it is a character that I would normally never explore, nor would I ever try making him look like anything other then his snivelling self. Yes, I know Sirius looks mean (sorry Sirius fans!) but if you think about it, Sirius and James were rather bullyish during their years at Hogwarts. I'm glad you've given it an okay rating. Before writing this, I don't think I would have even looked at a Peter fic. Funny how writing a story changes your opinion on it... Concerning chapter two, as soon as the Mods get through one of my other stories I'll submit the second chapter which is completed. I hope you'll keep reading and maybe I'll be able to turn you into a Peter fan! (Just kidding) --ginnygirl16
Hey there, I like this opening chapter (and certainly no cliches to be seen). There are very few Peter-centric Marauder era fics (although I have one *sniggers as self promotion*) so it is always good to read one that doesn't portray him as the cheese-eating coward beloved of the cliche!Peter world. I'm still unsure about him being bright enough for Ravenclaw, but I know you'll explain that in furture chapters (so hurry up is what I'm saying).
Sirius and James turning up and being horrible to him was a good idea. It immediately dispels the notion that they were all 'chummy' to begin with. Mind you, I'm not sure they would have been quite so rude - not because I don't think they're capable of such appalling behaviour - but because Peter is a fellow Gryff and I kinda think James would be more welcoming.Sirius wouldn't necessarily think his father's friend's son isn't worth knowing because after all, they've both now been Sorted into Gryffindor and broken with tradition.
What I particularly liked were the scenes with his mum (the mention of asthma struck a chord with me) and also the tentative friendship with Lily and Severus. I'd like to see Peter try and continue that - is that to be a part of your future story?
Minor nit-picks (sorry). There were one or two places where you didn't leave a line between two different speakers.
Peter was slightly annoyed at this remark. “What do you mean? Why shouldn’t I be in Gryffindor?” “Well, look at you. I thought you’d be a Hufflepuff for sure.”
Because you didn't include a dialogue tag, I initilally thought Peter was saying it, so I got a bit confused. This happened before when Lily and Snape were talking - except that wasn't confusing.
Anyway, they were two incredibly minor nitpicks in what was an original portrayal of Peter, so well done! I await chapter two.
Author's Response: Wow, Carole. Thanks for your awesome review! I'm glad that you think I've kept Peter uncliched. ;) Uh, oh. I'm afraid James and Sirius are going to continue being rude for a few more chapters. I think that the main plot in the story is Peter struggling to fit in in Gryffindor, and for Sirius and James to accept him as their friend. Maybe they have a reason behind it? (We'll see). Yes, the Kings Cross Station scene is one of my all time favourite scenes that I have written. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. And the tentative friendship with Lily and Severus, you guessed correctly. Those two are going to be making a few more appearances so watch out for them. Oops, yes I can see how that line could be confusing. I shall have to go in and edit that. I've been having a problem submitting, where paragraph breaks etc. don't come out the way they are supposed to in the actual story once it is validated. Chapter two is written and waiting for a spot in the queue (I already have two stories in there). I'm glad that you think the story is original, and I hope to hear from you some more when the next chapter is up. Cheers! --ginnygirl16
Sarah!!!!!!!! I loved this!!! Please write more :D! Btw, I'm getting to work on Chapter....5? I think you sent me... Chao!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, Maddy! Second chapter is written, and in case you are interested I have just submitted a one-shot about Sirius. And, Harry Potter: The Following Year is in the queue, with the next chapter ready, so I've got quite a few WIP's at the moment. Keep checking for updates on this one. Glad you enjoyed this. --ginnygirl16
I liked it a lot! very interesting... i like how you have Sirius not liking peter in the first place. I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Yes, I tried to have Peter as uncliched as possible, including not having him see Sirius and James as his idols. Chapter two is finished and beta'ed. It will hopefully be up as soon as I can get a free space to add a new story:) --ginnygirl16
This is really good! I love the scope of your world and your writing is very Rowling-esche.
It seemed oddly fitting too that Pettigrew and Snape should share a boat. They both became double agents, and their stories share certain echo's, though usually with Snape making a more aggressive, polarizing moves.
Well done and I look forward to seeing this develop.
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much for your awesome review. I'm very glad that you are enjoying this. I was afraid people wouldn't like the way I had characterized Peter, but I am happy to know that someone enjoyed it;) I've just finished chapter two, and it has been beta'ed. I'm only allowed two stories in the queue at once, so as soon as there is an open space I'll submit again. I hope you keep reading and reviewing! --ginnygirl16