Reviews For A Popped Bubble
Reviewer: Afifa
Date: 07/31/09 8:28
Chapter: An Understanding

The starting to this chapter made me go all, ’Wait, what?’ but then I read the next few lines and laughed. :D But later it made me think a bit. Are you hinting at Hermione/Harry over here? I’m not too sure, but it does look like that even though Ginny is mentioned once. But then it could be possible that she’s ‘just a friend’ or something like that.

Harry reassuring Hermione instead of the other way round was also refreshing. In fact, I liked it that he thinks that Draco must have changed, but in the end he goes back to encourage Hermione in case Draco is the same old self.



Draco’s quite civil in his own annoying way, which is quite in character, not the civil part, but the irritating one. Of course, he'll show manners now that he's boss and if only to bug Hermione. But a physical trait which seems quite a cliché that you’ve slipped in: him having a fantastic, muscular body. But the work out part was hilarious. xD Also, the green curtains and carpet seems a very Slytherin related cliché though it's nice that it isn't all silver and green, but golden and green.



I mentioned in the previous review my curiousity about this fic being canon complaint or not. Seeing that Scrimgeour is in this chapter, I'm thinking that this not DH complaint so I'd advice you to put up the DH Disregarded warning. I'm eager to see how you'll show that Voldemort is defeated, how Draco managed to score such an important job that he's being considered as the next Minister and the rest.



This tiny thing:



In the first chapter: The day that Hermione, after having spent five torturous years working in the lowest position possible at the Ministry of Magic [...]


In the second chapter: Throughout her six years of working for the Ministry, she had never once had to face Malfoy and saw now that she hadn’t missed much.



First it says five years, then six. You’d want to edit that accordingly. :)



I really like the fic so far and am hoping for an update. :) Good job!



- Afifa

Reviewer: mugglemallory07
Date: 07/28/09 22:06
Chapter: An Understanding

this was intriguing...can't wait for more!

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