Kudos for constructing a rather interesting plot and keeping the action moving without becoming maudlin. The issue of "friends in a relationship that turns badly" is not uncommon: you seem to have found a brief resolution to the conflict with Ron's running off. That being said, the bigger picture is yet to be seen...Hogwarts, The Burrow, the Weasley family, and Hermione's parents! Hope you work out the details in believeable ways! Good luck!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you're enjoying it. I have some plans to work out the conflicts you've mentioned. You'll have to wait and see how that all turns out. ;)
Excellent work! Can't wait to read more!!!
Author's Response: I'm extremely glad you enjoyed the story so far. I haven't had a lot of reviews lately. I also haven't been very active, or had much time to write. I do hope to get back to this story some day, finishing it is still a goal of mine, but unfortunately one that is on hold for now. It's always amazing to have a new reader enjoy something you've written so long ago. Feel free to browse the rest of my author's page. And welcome to MNFF. If you have any questions, feel free to email me, you'll find my email address on my author's page in my info. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Excellent work! Can't wait to read more!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Excellent beginning! Can't wait to see where this goes
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it. :)
hawii really ?
Author's Response: Yeah, Hawaii. It was a random thought from long ago that begs to be rewritten, however, I sadly don't have the time to finish the original, let alone rewrite at the moment. Some day maybe...
Ok...this is my first review....and i have to say you have a talent.
Author's Response: Thank you!
O_O!! WOW.....why didn't you write Harry Potter lol this would of been a better ending then the one that was...No offense to JK cause i love the books!!!
Author's Response: Wow... thank you... I don't think I've ever received such praise. I'm really glad that you've enjoyed the story thus far. But, stay tuned, this isn't the end. Be on the lookout for more chapters. Hopefully sooner rather than later. I've been busy with working full time and going to school, but I'm still working on this fic. If you're interested in knowing when the next chapter is validated, feel free to favorite the story and you should get an email update every time I add a chapter. Thank you so much for your kind reviews. =)
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The images I got when i was reading it was too cute
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm really glad that I was able to make this story visual for you. I've been striving for that as an author since the beginning. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
:-) ooooooo gettttiiiiinnnnnggggg sooooooooooooooo good between them to it's giving me goosebumps lol
Author's Response: I am immensely glad that you are enjoying the story. Thanks so much for reviewing. =)
WHOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love Hermione's ass kicking of Ron lol though I do feel a lil bit bad for him he totally deserved it!!!
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WHOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love Hermione's ass kicking of Ron lol though I do feel a lil bit bad for him he totally deserved it!!!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing. =) I felt a little bad too when I was writing it, but I enjoyed it too much to let the guilt last. =)
I wish all guys were as romantic as Harry is to Hermione in this fic...very sweet : )
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Hi, before saying anything else, I really liked your story, though initially I had a hard time getting used to Ron/Hermione's ship as the never-meant-to-be-one, after that it was really great and I didn't want it to end.
I noticed a few details in your story and i'd like to tell'em to you, if you're ok with it.
First, it appealed to me that, well obviously Ron and Hermione's relationship was not working because of her not feeling really comfortable with him. But what about HIS side of the story? I mean, I know he's suspicious and he's worried, but given the fact that he loves her so much I find it difficult to get that we don't get to see a lot of effort from him to make it work. Which takes me to the next point...
We're really taking in account all of the facts on the real series, only changing the way H&Hr feel....so I find it really weird to notice that Ron just gave her up so easily. I mean, Harry's his best pal and she is the woman he truly loves. Would you be willing to lose the one you love, specially in this case, so easily? Wouldn't you have fought for him/her until the very end? Even if the one you were fighting was your best friend??
And what was all the we-found-out-about-our-feelings-so-let's-hit-Ron-while-his-down?? I found it really selfish of Harry and Hermione to just ignore him and move on with their lives. After all his their best friend...
All of this I'm saying not to attack your story, which took me back to the beautiful years when I thought Harry and Hermione were meant to be together before Jo took the Ron/Hermione route, it's just my point of view. As much as I want them to be together, I think Ron should get a chance to, at least, hit Harry back for taking the love of his life away from him, even if she feels she never belonged there...but that's just me.
Other than that, I loved it. And I look forward to reading something else of your material, for I think you're a wonderful writer.
My best wishes.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the constructive review. I appreciate your honesty. Reviews like this help me to become a better author. I apologize for taking so long to reply to your review. I obviously haven't been getting my email updates as to when I get reviews because I didn't know this was here until I happened to glance at my reviews tonight. I am currently working on chapter six and hopefully it will be on the site soon, though I will make no promises as to when. Every time I do, something in RL gets in my way and I miss the deadline I've set for myself. I agree with your points, and Ron isn't finished yet. I don't want to spoil the story for you, but to reassure you I will drop this one bit of information. Harry and Hermione are mildly caught up in the newness of being together. During which, not much is on their minds. However, they haven't forgotten about Ron. There will be a conversation between the two of them regarding him and his feelings. Harry at the moment is protective of Hermione, as he's always been, and that driving force in him, along with his anger, is keeping him from worrying about how Ron is feeling at this moment. That will all come crashing down on them eventually, and as much as I don't want to admit it, Ron will get his chance at Harry as well. It will be awhile before things level out for the trio, but I don't plan to just write Ron out of the picture all together. Over time they will all be friends again. I hope I haven't spoiled too much for you, but I just wanted to reassure you that I'm not trying to leave Ron out, or make him a weak character in my plot. I will admit that trying to write a Harmony fic that is canon through book seven has been difficult. I started writing this fic back in 2009 and the initial draft was literally just a spew of plot points all thrown haphazardly onto paper and then compiled into a document. I'm really taking my time rewriting to try and make something good come from the initial crap heap of ideas that I had all that time ago. I really appreciate reviews like this, and I'm really glad that you have enjoyed the story thus far. I hope that you'll hang around and keep reading, and please, feel free to keep the con-crit coming. I really do love it, because I truly think that it makes me a better author. Thank you again for reading, and reviewing.-Ash
Awesomeness!! Will there be another part?
Author's Response: Yes! This story will most likely be a monster when I finish it. So be on the lookout for the next chapter. Hopefully I'll have time to get it wrapped up and in the queue soon!
cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Next chapter coming soon!
**new reader**
Its Amazing just awesome bt need some more sooooooon
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. Don't worry, chapter five was just put in the queue today, so it should be available for you soon!
I am absolutely in love with this story!! Please post the next chapter quickly! I am dying to know how Rons going to react!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! The next chapter will be coming soon. Real life sort of dragged me away from mnff for awhile, so I'm sorry for the delay. As for Ron's reaction... You'll just have to wait and see. =) -Ash
I loved it! Can't wait to rad more.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Don't worry, more will be coming soon. =)
I worship you!
Author's Response: Wow... Thank you... I don't know what to say... Thank you for sticking with the story. I'm really glad you like it so much. I'm thrilled with the amount of support I've gotten for this fic. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. The next chapter will be posted soon. =) -Ash
So good :) I love the Harry/Hermione thing :) He's soo sweet and they're perfect. Write more as soon as possible!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. Chapter five is currently in the works and should be in the queue soon. They've just closed it for a week to clear it out, and that should give me enough time to get my chapter written and ready to submit. Feel free to favorite the story if you'd like an email sent to you when I update. Thank you for reading and reviewing. :) More to come soon I promise. -Ash