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Name: llilli (Signed) · Date: 03/31/11 3:14 · For: Chapter 2: Breakfast
Rawr! I feel so angry with James! Lily Evens is gonna pay....

Haha awesome, like always. And also, another thing i forgot to mention, when James and Lily went to Hogwarts, Dumbledore wasn't headmaster (i think). He was Transfigurations Teacher.

Anyways, update QUICKLY!!!!!!

Author's Response: Actually, he was Transfigurations when Tom Riddle was there, but headmaster during the Marauder's era because he had the Whomping Willow planted for Remus :) Anyway, thanks for reading this old story! Like I said before, I'm not sure if I'll be updating this one much, but if I do, it will be after I finish Snowflakes! Thanks :D

Name: llilli (Signed) · Date: 03/31/11 3:06 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
I'm back! Hehe I love this story aswell! It won't take as long to catch up on this one so please update quickly!!!


Author's Response: Haha this one has only got two chapters up... and it's pretty bad... but I'm glad you like it =D I might go on and work on the rest of this story after Snowflakes is finished, I'll just have to wait and see! Thanks for reading and reviewing!!

Name: LILY_ISTHEBEST (Signed) · Date: 03/26/11 3:14 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
i love this story!:)

Name: LILY_ISTHEBEST (Signed) · Date: 02/25/11 0:39 · For: Chapter 2: Breakfast
not really interesting!i qould say u add more lily and james then james,lily and snape!

Author's Response: That was quite blunt. Really, there have only been two chapters of this story, so please don't judge it so harshly. It won't be updated for a while, but it will get more interesting in the third chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

Name: miss ginny1 (Signed) · Date: 12/29/09 20:12 · For: Chapter 2: Breakfast
Oh, that is so like James- feeling like he needs to prove himself no matter what. I know someone like that.... anyway, I loved the second chapter. You never disappoint.

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! Maybe chapter 3 will eventually be posted... unfortunately, the typos and errors are a little overwhelming! =o Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Name: miss ginny1 (Signed) · Date: 12/29/09 20:07 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
Ooooooooooooh! I loved it! You're a great author! You're stories always exceed my expectaions!

Author's Response: Well, hello! I'm glad you like this story, too! This one hasn't been updated in forever, but I have ten pre-written chapters... the problem is getting them validated! Thanks for reading and reviewing! =D

Name: ron lover (Signed) · Date: 07/22/09 22:05 · For: Chapter 2: Breakfast
I really like this chapter. It's really good. My favorite part is the last paragraph.

But James would not give up. He would prove to her that Snape was a no-good Slytherin and that he was the heroic one, worthy to be in the house of Godric Gryffindor.

That explains why he makes fun of him all the time. It's great. I really like this storyand I hope you update soon.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate the feedback! Hopefully I will be able to update soon(and I personally enjoy chapter 3...)! Thanks again! :)

Name: stillwaitingformyletter247 (Signed) · Date: 07/13/09 2:16 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
Great! write more asap

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! i just have 2 re-submit the second chapter and im gonna do that 2day!

Name: TheCursedQuill (Signed) · Date: 06/15/09 21:36 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
Hey Dream Team!

That was a good start to your story! Your writing is so light and joyful; it makes the story sound so happy and energetic. You must have been in a good mood while writing it =).

It was nice to see how you incorporated the canon scene of how James and Sirius met, along with Lily and Severus. It was a nice touch to show it from James’ point of view, which I really enjoyed.

The characters in your story could have been a little more in depth, though. I feel that you skimmed through the characters and only stated what we know from the books. When Peter goes to sit down with the other three, he kind of just sits there and that’s that. What were James’ thoughts about him? Did he feel he could become close friends with him? And why did he like Sirius so much? A little more exploration with the characters in future chapters could greatly improve your fic. If you need some idea of what struggles the marauders are going through internally, there’s a nice little thread on the Beta Boards for each of the characters. There’s always a helping hand to guide you through exploration on the Boards too =)

Another little nitpick I have is that the marauder’s seem to become friends so easily. Remus didn’t even introduce himself, but he’s calling James his mate a couple of lines down. The friendship was a little rushed, and I know that you probably want to get on with the story, but sometimes the small things can create a world of a difference.

All in all, wonderful chapter! By the way, I forgot to mention, I love the title! It’s a nice play with the ‘map’. I’ll certainly be waiting to find out what happens to the marauders!
Happy Writing! Cheers.

Author's Response: WOW! thats quite a fantastic and long review! first i would like to thank you for all the tips! I know i havent developed the characters very well, but i hope i can explain them a little better as the story goes on! ya about the mate thing... isnt it sort of a british thing? in my own little head it sorta is equivalent to dude... im probably VERY off tho! sigh... how i wish i had an accent... yeah this first chapter was really hard because i thought of an idea for a story and then i was like, "now how in the world am i sposed to start it?" anyhu, thank you for the review! i really appreciate all of your advice! thanx!!!! :D

Name: LovelyWonder (Signed) · Date: 06/13/09 16:51 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
I thought it was really great! I liked that you decided to portray James' point of view, and do the opposite of what DH said. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yeah, I like James a lot so I decided to make most of the story from his POV. There are a few times where you get to see what Lily's thinking in the later chapters, though, which is fun, too! thanks again! :)

Name: ginnygirl16 (Signed) · Date: 06/11/09 20:33 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
I'm excited to read more. I particularly enjoyed your line "Ladies first." when James respons to Lily telling him to shut up. Very good! Keep up the excellent writing!


Author's Response: Ahh thanks so much 4 ur review! yeah i rather enjoyed that line, too (if i dont say so myself XP )! I've submitted the second chapter so i'm just waiting 4 it 2 b validated now. Thanks again 4 the review!

Name: Professor Applebom (Signed) · Date: 06/09/09 13:20 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
You portray the characters really well! Their personalities are very developed. It's very well written! Almost as good as Wuthering Heights!

Author's Response: Why thank you Professor! Thanks for reviewing! BTW i don't really like Wuthering heights Trevz... X)

Name: ron lover (Signed) · Date: 06/08/09 21:09 · For: Chapter 1: The Journey to Hogwarts
I really like it. I can't wait to find out what happens next.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I appreciate it! :)

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