Reviews For Redemption
Reviewer: horntail_luver
Date: 07/16/09 18:03
Chapter: Redemption

WOW. THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST STORIES I HAVE EVER READ.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was really pleased with it as well.

Reviewer: Padfoot Patronus
Date: 06/18/09 12:54
Chapter: Redemption

Wow is the word.

The Ron-part: The basic concept is so very wonderful and as I related to Ron in some places it was really engaging. My issue was the constant repetition and so much italics really. Actually, if only you hadn't proceeded so wonderfully with the plot, the style of writing would have got in the way.

I absolutely adored the reference to eyes. Because this is the sort of description you drop out of nowhere, yet adding so much value and leaving a very lasting impression on the reader.

Remus was adorable. This is the one interpretation I just didn't get bored of Remus moaning over his condition and misfortune. This view of Tonks' big news was heaven. Remus' reaction is rich and I was in awe.

Because in the end, it doesn’t matter how much he hates himself for doing this to her, or how much he wishes it wouldn’t have happened, or how utterly terrified he is, the only thing that matters is that she is happy, and right now, he can feel her grinning into his hair and he knows that she is absolutely ecstatic.

He lays a hand over her still-flat belly, and presses his lips to her ear.

Aw. I mean I don't have really any words to express how much I loved this. This sort of has become the standard Remus characterisation for me. Whatever Remus I read in fanfiction now I'll compare it to your writing of him :D

He is not expecting her quiet confession, though—she’s not one of those people who will openly and willingly share their feelings—and he feels his eyebrows jump up a little as he turns his head again to look at her.
Ah. I'm in the process of writing J/L myself but I'm writing the other way, so that James is the one who doesn't always share what he is thinking. I like this though. It was very platonic, nice, non-romantic yet powerful look over this pairing.

He studies her for a moment, not sure that he understands this curious girl at all. But she smiles at him, her teeth so bright in the darkness, and begins to talk once again.
Haha. Just before I read this line, I knew what you were going to write! Was it predictable? Hell ya! Was it well-written, well-incorporated? Certainly :D

Now the thing that didn't work for me: Sirius. It was nice, but I think its just due to a pet peeve of mine, having Walburga to be a torturous, villanious thing. Plus, it wouldn't have been an issue if it were not for the vivid vivid detail, which just was a little too much for me. I like Sirius' resulting reactions though which were described very well, but its just the concept of Walburga being an evil mum that sort of annoys me.

Great job overall. Wouldn't forget your Ron, Remus and Tonks ever!

- Akay

Author's Response: Aw, thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm glad you thought the characterization was good. Ah. I'm in the process of writing J/L myself but I'm writing the other way, so that James is the one who doesn't always share what he is thinking. I like this though. It was very platonic, nice, non-romantic yet powerful look over this pairing. I'll definitely have to check your fic out and compare it ;) Now the thing that didn't work for me: Sirius. It was nice, but I think its just due to a pet peeve of mine, having Walburga to be a torturous, villanious thing. Plus, it wouldn't have been an issue if it were not for the vivid vivid detail, which just was a little too much for me. I like Sirius' resulting reactions though which were described very well, but its just the concept of Walburga being an evil mum that sort of annoys me. I usually don't go for this type of Wlaburga either, but i dunno...she sorta just popped up, I guess. *shrugs* I guess i write Ron and Remus really well. Haha. Everybody's been saying how well-written they are. Anyway. Thanks so much! :D

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 06/10/09 9:10
Chapter: Redemption

I like this story and how you have brighter colors with better things. Its a very good story.

Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: Ravencorgi
Date: 06/06/09 19:04
Chapter: Redemption

I am in complete awe. Lately I've been into drabble pieces, and this is a perfect example of the genre at its finest. Your writing style is amazing--descriptive, colorful, detailed, and it just...runs like thoughts, especially with all the repetition and italics. I particularly like the scene with Ron: first of all, so few people write canon Trio anymore, but also you portrayed him so sympathetically at a point where most readers probably hate him. Overall...just wow.

Author's Response: I am in complete awe of your review. Thank you so much for the flattering comments, Ravencorgi. You've left me speechless :)

Reviewer: The Pottermaniac
Date: 06/06/09 10:59
Chapter: Redemption

This is superb. I especially liked Ron's part - I really think you got inside his head at that point. It was childish of him to walk out. And Pettigrew's brief piece is really horrific - just as it should be for Voldemort's rebirth. Very good indeed.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I tried to take special care and time to actually think over how I would feel if I were in ___ character's postion. I'm glad you thought it worked well.

Reviewer: welshdevondragon
Date: 06/06/09 10:37
Chapter: Redemption

This is amazing- I think it works really well as one story. I love the idea of colours, and how from the, I think, darkest first part where there isn't a trace of optimism, the colours get brighter and more hopeful, with a quiet insistence. I also like the way its not chronological, so that it feels as if somewhere all the characters feel this at teh same time (sorry if that doesn't make sense- can't think how to explain it). Anyway I really loved it, and it is different but definitely interesting different.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm very glad you enjoyed it :) I was a little discouraged at first when I started writing, because it ended up darker than I originally wanted it to be, but after looking back over it, I think it really works well how it is. I actually got the inspiration from a "Colors of Christmas" card where it listed all six of the colors and how they fit into the holiday. It was an interesting piece for me to write. Anyhoo, thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: decdraft
Date: 06/06/09 6:36
Chapter: Redemption

Thiis is awesome. It is very different. I loved the glimpses into each of these souls

Author's Response: Thank you very much! :)

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