Reviewer: perfect witch
Date: 10/01/11 19:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

you should write more!!! this was really amazing :)

Reviewer: SmartOnes
Date: 08/09/11 14:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

One of the best Dramione stories I've read in a while! I love one-shots, and this was both light reading and a good story. Keep on writing :)

Reviewer: guptadips
Date: 07/08/11 6:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

i jus lubb dramione ships ... this was awesome:)

Reviewer: Malyu
Date: 05/05/11 17:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

It was good. There could have been more description in the sex instead of just skipping till after. Especially after the scene in the street.

Reviewer: mindenaubrey
Date: 02/18/11 12:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

Brilliant. :)

Reviewer: September December
Date: 10/29/10 0:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

Haha! Really cute story, loved it. :)

Reviewer: FangedFrizbee
Date: 08/19/10 4:10
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ahaha cute! I love dramione.

Reviewer: xMagicalletters
Date: 08/03/10 14:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aww I loved it.

Reviewer: annabelsmith
Date: 05/02/10 15:33
Chapter: Chapter 1

ha ha ha ha well that was my first reaction on reading this.........if only harry knew!!!!!!!!!1

Author's Response: I know, right? Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Kyouko
Date: 12/06/09 20:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

Your writing skills are really good, I don't think I can think of anything really to improve upon. So congratulations, because i can usually think of something to criticize constructively.

"She did not move her lips to respond to him, but remained frozen, not even caring to shut his eyes, even though he had."

that part doesn't make sense to me though. The whole part about not caring to shut his eyes, even though he had. Maybe you meant "she had". But other than that really good. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really appreciate your help! The only excuse I can give for that horridly shoddy line is that I probably wrote it at 3 AM during the summer, after I'd spent all day in the sun (I've got cabin fever - winter is sometimes hard for me!), I believe I meant "not even caring to shut her eyes". But I guess that one slipped through the cracks. Thanks again!

Reviewer: draco_rulz
Date: 10/15/09 0:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

being honest it was a realy good !!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Hope you enjoy the later chapters!

Reviewer: livstarrify
Date: 10/11/09 16:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, i love any romantic story to do with Draco & Hermione, but this is the hottest one i have read so far :D loved it. But i do think everthing happened a bit too fast, and i would have thought that Hermione would have been a bit more shocked by Draco kissing her and he would have had to do alot of convincing. But i love this !!

Author's Response: "Hottest one you've read so far"? I'm so honored! I do get what you are saying about the speed of their relationship though. I think it was more of me getting excited about what I was writing! I tend to do that whenever I get excited about what I'm writing. And I also think Draco turned me on as well ; ). Thanks so much! Take a look at Chapter 3!

Reviewer: Alice_Kedavra
Date: 09/30/09 16:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

I Really like this fanfiction... and i'm very picky. I must say this is one of the best I have read tbh. I hope you continue writing cause i will read them (:

Author's Response: You're sweet to write, Alice_Kedavra, and it is because of these great reviews that I wrote Chapter 3! Thanks again!

Reviewer: ThatRomantic
Date: 09/16/09 14:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

Sequel? Maybe the 19 years later scene and Draco's observations


Author's Response: You know, ThatRomantic, I think I'll take this moment to reveal that, yes, the last chapter will in fact relate to the 19 years later scene. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: i_enjoy_acid_pops123
Date: 08/26/09 7:14
Chapter: Chapter 1

heheh, like the ending! lol

Author's Response: Thank you! Chapter 3 is up on, hope you enjoy! By the way, your name is HILARIOUS.

Reviewer: Starsmile
Date: 08/12/09 15:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

Nice one
I like it and hopefully you will continue writing such wonderful stories :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Reviewer: tomslovevishu
Date: 07/30/09 12:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

good shot!!!

Author's Response: Why thank you tomslovevishu!

Reviewer: Microchic
Date: 07/04/09 22:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

I think this story is wonderful
one thing you could make more clear is the scene with them in the hotel room, the way it's written seems like it was just, she gave him permission, but then had to leave, maybe put a space in there, add another line along the lines of "Harmione laid back in disbelief of what just occured, though she's pleased it happened. Then she looked at the clock on the wall and realized she had been gone 2 hours!" ect.
hope you post the rest that your working on

Author's Response: Hi Microchic- Thank you so much for the review! I was a little hesitant to give details on the, err, *on the dirty* (because I want the story to get approved) but I will try and add some more details in the full story version. Thanks!

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 06/20/09 21:06
Chapter: Chapter 1

I like it

Author's Response: Thanks locanena!

Reviewer: eLiz
Date: 06/18/09 23:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wonderful! I love the way you describe things in such detail and care. There were a few small things that I found could use improvement. Suppose they could have talked a bit more in the grocery store? I'm perfectly happy with it the way it is though. Your Draco is quite sexy.

Author's Response: Thanks eLiz! I appreciate the review so much! And thanks for the tips- dialogue is a key! In the full version, I have quite a bit, so it won't just be some raging hormone fest (although there will be some sexual tension, of course!)

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