Reviews For Eyes Wide Open
Reviewer: Dagmar Beck
Date: 10/07/09 5:11
Chapter: Prologue

Interesting start but who is Ella's mom? and who is Dandelion's Dad?

Author's Response: Ella's mom was a Muggle girl who was stupid enough to sleep with Dudley, which is pretty much all you need to know about her. She wasn't a particularly bad person, but she wasn't a particularly good one, either. She just was a rather typical teenage girl who had a baby and was rather scared. I really haven't thought about Dandelion's dad too much, to be honest. I'm sure Dandelion must wonder about him, and I'll have to include that at some point to make the story realistic. However, I want this story to be about a Muggle-born girl discovering the magical world and her talents, not the rather cliched plot about a teenager discovering a long-lost parent. I expect nobody but Ella (not even me!) will know his identity.

Reviewer: hpcrazy2011
Date: 07/26/09 23:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

hope you update soon...so good

Author's Response: Thank you! My summer has been a little crazy, but I'm planning on updating as soon as I can, which may not be until September. Don't worry, though, I certainly am not going to abandon this story!

Reviewer: Windy Silvermist
Date: 06/23/09 20:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oooh this, this is good. I like this. It's interesting. GO DANDELION tis awesome. TO HOGWARRRRTTTTTTSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-Windy kooky as it gets

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll be updating soon!

Reviewer: inluvwid_pdft
Date: 06/12/09 15:33
Chapter: Prologue

Wow...I usually don't read oc stories, but this one is very interesting. I really want to know what happens when Dandelion meets Harry!

Author's Response: I don't like most OC stories, either! Plus, I hate most Next-Gen stories with a vengeance. But hey, if you can't beat 'em, join 'em! I'm glad you're enjoying my story, and I hope you'll keep reading. Dandelion will be meeting Harry quite soon.

Reviewer: Kantaka
Date: 06/11/09 11:35
Chapter: Chapter 1

Alright... I still intend to see where this is going, but I must say, I did not think the way you portrayed Prof. Sprout was too keen. The dirt was Ok, but I suspect she'd be more on queue as to how a muggle would dress up, either that or Hogwarts would just send in a muggle-born teacher in order to be able to understand the situation more clearly. I imagine Hagrid was sent in Harry's case because of all the protection around the 'Chosen One'.

I also feel you cut the chap a bit abruptly... I suspect Dandelion would have quite a bit of questions for Granpa Dudley then and he would have to explain a lot of things he doesn't know about or understand.... She's 11, she's naturally curious!!

I'm left with a million questions unsanswered myself!! I want to learn more, much more about her and her reaction to this!! Its a big thing being told you're a witch!! Keep the good work!!

Author's Response: I wasn't too sure of my characterization of Sprout, either, but my beta thought she was okay. I was more concerned with Sprout's behavior and speech, though - I was afraid that she came across too much like McGonagall. As for the clothes, it seems like almost every (non-Muggle-born) witch and wizard seems to have trouble with Muggle dress. For example, at the Quidditch World Cup, what stood out about Barty Crouch Sr. was the fact that he actually managed to look like a Muggle businessman, which indicates that he pulled off quite the feat for someone in the magical community. Still, I guess we each come away from the HP books with our own impressions. You may very well be correct in criticizing my description of Sprout's style of dress. Don't worry. Dandelion's frustration about being kept in the dark somewhat will come out over the next couple of chapters.

Reviewer: Wandering Wand
Date: 06/02/09 22:45
Chapter: Prologue

Nice start! It's a bit abrupt in many ways, but it's catchy and well written. Looking forward for more :)

Author's Response: I'll try to make the rest of the story less abrupt. I'm glad I've caught your attention, at least. Thank you for the review.

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 06/01/09 14:25
Chapter: Prologue

Laura, it's your splendiferous beta here! I do like the way you had Ella stay with Dandelion and Dudley instead of having her abandon them. (I think that's what you mentioned having happen.) All in all, it was a great read. I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter. {BeccA}

Author's Response: Thanks for dropping by, BeccA! I glad you approved of the post-beta'd change to the plot (Ella staying) that was suggested by none other than Inverarity.

Reviewer: Inverarity
Date: 06/01/09 11:59
Chapter: Prologue

The beginning is kind of interesting, but a little too abrupt. Ella's mother took care of her for seven months, and then simply handed her over with no signs of regret or remorse, and never saw her again? Also, how did she afford a P.I.?

I also found Dudley transforming a little too quickly, and right now, we know virtually nothing about Ella or Dandelion.

Dandelion is the main character so of course you want to get to her quickly, but I think the first chapter, explaining her background, her environment, her family, should have been longer, to make the situation more real and to make us actually care about these characters. Right now, they're just names and sketchy summaries.

I did like the details about Ella's mother's appearance, and her snippy attitude, which gave me some sense of what she was like as a person. And Ella's reason for naming her daughter "Dandelion" was also very clever, and actually made me like the name.



Author's Response: Thank you for your feedback, Inverarity. I might have changed things, but it's a little late to do so now that it's published. I'll try to make future events in the story less abrupt, and keep your comments in mind when I begin future stories. I'm glad you like Dandelion's name! I'm rather fond of it, and as I did more research into the name and thought about it some more, I liked it even better. You'll see why.

Reviewer: Kantaka
Date: 06/01/09 11:19
Chapter: Prologue

I think it's a fairly interesting plot so far. I suppose Dandelion wil grow into a lovable character.. I'm intrigued about Ella, it'd be interesting to find out more about her life and how she grew up!!

Please, update soon! ;)

Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I'm planning on submitting Chapter 1 to the queue today. Unfortunately, there isn't much about Ella until Chapter 2. Hang in there!

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