Alyssa, I really love this story. It's interesting to read about Harry when he's that much older. You did an amazing job aging him, but still keeping him in character. The mirrors were a nice touch. It connected the future Sirius to the past.
This story is definitely a tear jerker. The ending made me cry. I really love a story that pulls me in, and makes me feel something. It's quite a talent to write something that draws people in emotionally.
It flows really well, and the plot, though short, is a perfect story. Harry really loves that little boy. I can't really find anything I don't like about it, besides the fact that you made me cry. I normally don't cry.
Great work Alyssa! I can't wait to read more from you.
-Ashley
Harry is 37 in the Ep., when James is at least 12 and possibly older. Let us give James, say, 15 years before he has Sirius - that would make James 27 - certainly a decent age to have a child, and Harry fifty two. Which means that Sirius is 11 when Harry is 63.
Sixty three is not old enough to die of old age. It is certainly old enough to die of things that get worse with age, but not really old enough to be dieing from old age itself.
It is especially not old enough to die of old age when you are a wizard and have personally met people over one hundred years old who themselves were not dieing of old age.
Even if we give James 25 years to get around to having a kid and make him 37 and Harry 62 -, which puts Harry at 73, he is still not old enough to be dieing of old age. I know this because I know a lot of people in their 70's, and the ones I have known of who died in their 70's died of something specific. Cancer, for example.
Is this explained in a later chapter?
OH, Lyssa, I'm really, truly and genuinely crying and I rarely do that. It's your last line that has set me sobbing.
I really liked this all the way through. Little Sirius is living up to his namesake in spades and Harry is just perfect. Their relationship is simply beautiful and very well written. Your characterisation is excellent; the story is heartrending and ... I can't say any more because I'm in meltdown.
Carole *still sobbing*
Author's Response: *huggles Carole* I don't know whether or not I should be happy or sad you cried over this...-Alyssa
