I like your fic as it represents a slightly different Lily – one that is more acutely aware of how the world is changing for the worst around her. We find her being angry with Voldemort, and James comes to give her some company.
What I liked best about your Lily was that she wasn’t cocky/super-talented/super-fiery. She wasn’t like, “Yeah! I’m gonna whup their a**s right after I graduate.” There was just the right amount of self-doubt, coupled with and intense desire to seek vengeance for the wrongs Voldemort and his followers had committed.
Her feelings for James were still a little mixed, but she was shown as slowly realizing how important he has become in her life. He had matured, and she had stopped accusing him of being arrogant. She wasn’t completely in love with him, but she had grown to accept that he is more than just a friend, a suitor, a classmate. He has become special to her. What’s more, we are shown that both have grown out of their old bickering phase, and may have become friends.
Alos, her feelings were written as something that developed naturally, from mere acceptance to willing embrace. The romance was not overwhelming, or in your face, but the reader knew those two were headed for a wholesome relationship. Lily hadn’t fallen in love with James overnight, it had been coming on for some time – and you managed to show all these in a one-shot. Great work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review!! I'm really glad you liked the story :D And I'm especially glad you noticed all the things you mention, since those where some of the things I wanted to work in the story. Thank you!
Very sweet! I like the idea of something like this bringing them together, in this subtle way. It had a touch of the dark times, but was hopeful as well. Nicely done! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I really wanted to make a one-shot where there wasn't any drama over the pair of them getting together, so I'm glad you liked it :D
I adored this story. It was so beautifully and heartbreakingly written and I was enthralled. I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed it. Can't wait to read more of your stories!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it :) Thank you so much for the rerivew, it really made my day (and my day sucked, but that's another story..! ). Again, thank you :D
One word: Beautiful. :)
Author's Response: Another word: Thanks! :D
that was good!! definitely enjoyed it, makes for a good read. =]
Author's Response: Thank you for the review :D makes my day a lot better when people leave reviews :)
Seriously loved it. Especially the beginning. You should write another James/Lily fanfic, but not as a one-shot.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! :D And I have nothing against writing chaptered fics, only this sort of scene I can't really write a captered fic about, as I think I would get stuck. I'm better at lighter stories for that :D
loved it. really well written though kind of sad at the beginning. great job :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :D
I really like this story. I can really see it happening.
Author's Response: thank you! I'm so glad you liked it, and thank you for the review! :D
love it!!!!!!!!!!! u should try making a story on the pairing instead of one shot... i really like tis one...keep up the great work!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it :) I'm afraid this story is just a one shot though, I think it would sort of ruin it if I kept writing on it :D