Great start, can't wait for the next part of the story.
So good to give Sirius another chance and Hermione too.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. This idea just came to me one day. And I thought, why not? Terri
Wow! your summary was a real eye catcher and brought me right in! Fantastic! You did a pretty good job with keeping them in-charactor and I thought it was an overall great story! I hope that you update really soon because I can't wait to read more! Keep writing!!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I have several more chapters ready to go, so updates will come without much wait. Thank you for saying I kept them in character. I work hard at doing just that. I am glad you liked the summary, it was actually written as the plot bunny formed in my head, and I didn't have to change anything as I wrote the story. Thanks again. Terri
This must have been a very difficult chapter to write. On the one hand, you have so much Sirius has to know, that you have to show him learning it, reacting a little. On the other hand, it is so much, you sort of have to tell that he heard it, instead of showing him hearing it, at least for most of it.
You know, I have never understood why the time turners couldn't have been remade or fixed. No reason is ever given in canon. I think you explained where this one came from pretty well.
What I don't understand is how the time turner turned him back five years to being alive, but ended with him here in the now. I also don't understand Kingsley's problem. He can always say that while Sirius Black had been presumed dead, he had in fact been _ fill in trumped up story of your choice. In fact, why would he have to say anything. "But you were dead!" person exclaims. "Well, the rumours of my death were obviously wrong, weren't they?" The few people who actually saw him fall through the veil seem to fall mostly under three categories - 1. In Azkaban, 2. Dead 3. Can be trusted to keep their mouths shut. So unless Lucius Malfoy is out there running around looking to make trouble....
Of course the real problem is also not people wanting their families back. "We don't know how it worked and we are not mucking around to find out how." - Simple enough. How many people even know about the veil, anyway. No, the real problem is people trying to get Voldemort back. That Kingsley doesn't mention....
Just my random thoughts. I think you picked good details to show Sirius reacting to - Molly's duel, his walking with Harry in the woods, details about Snape... I think they are the points in the story he would have had the greatest reaction to. And I think you did a VERY good job with Hermione's conflicted feelings about the wedding.
I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I wondered the same thing about the time turners being remade. An interesting point about why it brought him to the here and now. And that will be covered in a future chapter. As will reactions about him coming back through the Veil. Thank you for your interesting points as they are sparking situations and conversations in my mind. I will be updating very soon as my muse wants to work on this story now. Terri
I've read this before, on a different site though. It was by you, obviously.
It's still just as good, and an amazing idea.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I am glad you enjoy this story and the storyline. I will be updating soon. Terri
Really good story line. Update really soon.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I will be updating quite soon. Terri