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Name: lupins_girl2006 (Signed) · Date: 05/10/09 19:50 · For: From the Past to the Future
*clicks 'add story to favorites'* *confirms saving story* *gushes over first chapter*

This was really cute Terri. I noticed you spelled Sirius' name wrong once, but that's not a big deal.

The main thing I noticed was that you sometimes started sentences off with the same word.

“No, you weren’t dreaming, Sirius. You were in the afterlife with James and Lily for all this time,” Hermione said gently.

Hermione quickly finished telling Sirius the rest of the story. When she told him of Molly’s outburst as she approached Bellatrix, Sirius laughed.

With the repeating of Hermione's name here, it kind of slows the chapter down. Instead of both Hermione's, it might have sounded better with a she replacing one of them.

I think this happened a few more times in the chapter, but I can't remember. The awesomeness of the story is blanking my memory of it. :D

Overall, I loved it. Sirius' reactions to the parts of Hermione's story were very in character and Hermione's want to include Harry is also in character.

I can't wait until the next chapter. Keep up the great work with this story!

~Allie

Long live Sirius! He did not die, he fell. There is nothing in the book to say it was the killing curse, and thus JK Rowling made the mistake and opened up this argument of Sirius being dead or alive!

Author's Response: Allie,

It wasn't a killing curse that hit him. The light of the spell was red, not green. Which lead to the thought, if he was alive when he went through the veil...

I will fix those things. Thanks for pointing them out.

And I can assure you, he didn't die. The Veil transported him to America and to me. LOL Thanks for your review.

Terri


Name: QueenElizabeththe3rd (Signed) · Date: 05/10/09 19:44 · For: From the Past to the Future
Wow, what a unique idea! I wondered about the mysterious time-turners, and was always annoyed thinking about all the events that could have been reversed before the time-turners were destroyed. however, i now see the merit of them, as they inspire stories such as this one.

Author's Response: Yes, I always wondered why not change things a bit? After all, a time turner saved Sirius before. Thanks for your review. Terri


Name: minervassister (Signed) · Date: 05/05/09 10:45 · For: From the Past to the Future
Great start, can't wait for the next part of the story.
So good to give Sirius another chance and Hermione too.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. This idea just came to me one day. And I thought, why not? Terri


Name: The_Dream_Team (Signed) · Date: 05/04/09 6:53 · For: From the Past to the Future
Wow! your summary was a real eye catcher and brought me right in! Fantastic! You did a pretty good job with keeping them in-charactor and I thought it was an overall great story! I hope that you update really soon because I can't wait to read more! Keep writing!!

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I have several more chapters ready to go, so updates will come without much wait. Thank you for saying I kept them in character. I work hard at doing just that. I am glad you liked the summary, it was actually written as the plot bunny formed in my head, and I didn't have to change anything as I wrote the story. Thanks again. Terri


Name: ProfPosky (Signed) · Date: 05/04/09 0:34 · For: From the Past to the Future
This must have been a very difficult chapter to write. On the one hand, you have so much Sirius has to know, that you have to show him learning it, reacting a little. On the other hand, it is so much, you sort of have to tell that he heard it, instead of showing him hearing it, at least for most of it.

You know, I have never understood why the time turners couldn't have been remade or fixed. No reason is ever given in canon. I think you explained where this one came from pretty well.

What I don't understand is how the time turner turned him back five years to being alive, but ended with him here in the now. I also don't understand Kingsley's problem. He can always say that while Sirius Black had been presumed dead, he had in fact been _ fill in trumped up story of your choice. In fact, why would he have to say anything. "But you were dead!" person exclaims. "Well, the rumours of my death were obviously wrong, weren't they?" The few people who actually saw him fall through the veil seem to fall mostly under three categories - 1. In Azkaban, 2. Dead 3. Can be trusted to keep their mouths shut. So unless Lucius Malfoy is out there running around looking to make trouble....

Of course the real problem is also not people wanting their families back. "We don't know how it worked and we are not mucking around to find out how." - Simple enough. How many people even know about the veil, anyway. No, the real problem is people trying to get Voldemort back. That Kingsley doesn't mention....

Just my random thoughts. I think you picked good details to show Sirius reacting to - Molly's duel, his walking with Harry in the woods, details about Snape... I think they are the points in the story he would have had the greatest reaction to. And I think you did a VERY good job with Hermione's conflicted feelings about the wedding.

I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I wondered the same thing about the time turners being remade. An interesting point about why it brought him to the here and now. And that will be covered in a future chapter. As will reactions about him coming back through the Veil. Thank you for your interesting points as they are sparking situations and conversations in my mind. I will be updating very soon as my muse wants to work on this story now. Terri


Name: rayasunshine (Signed) · Date: 05/03/09 17:12 · For: From the Past to the Future
I've read this before, on a different site though. It was by you, obviously.
It's still just as good, and an amazing idea.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I am glad you enjoy this story and the storyline. I will be updating soon. Terri


Name: Love_Snape (Signed) · Date: 05/03/09 16:17 · For: From the Past to the Future
Really good story line. Update really soon.
Ana

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I will be updating quite soon. Terri


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