Reviewer: Gone_2_Honeydukes
Date: 02/20/12 1:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ah, so perfect! I never really thought about the lack of affection, since the epilogue was kind of centred around their kids, and the continuation of the story, but I really really love this! You capture the essence of the Potter kids so well :)

Reviewer: nayin
Date: 10/14/11 4:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ty for writing this,I'm disappointed w/ Jk's version so in my mind your story is included in


Dh....love it

Reviewer: LunaLvegoodgirl
Date: 04/30/11 12:33
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ok that was pretty funny with the bet and stuff

Reviewer: lifewhatever
Date: 09/14/10 18:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

omg, that was a very lovely story. it was cute. good job :)

Reviewer: BattyGirl
Date: 05/02/10 2:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

that was really cute! I loved it!

Reviewer: GinnyPotterFan26
Date: 02/22/10 2:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really liked this story. It was a great plot idea, well-told, and (unlike far too much of what you read on this site) it flowed very nicely.

Reviewer: mugglemallory07
Date: 07/28/09 22:37
Chapter: Chapter 1

lol great story! haha good ending

Reviewer: jenny b
Date: 07/14/09 2:52
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was really lovely. I don’t really read many fics with James, Albus and Lily as kids, but this was very sweet. I think you’ve portrayed Harry and Ginny’s relationship very well – I can imagine them being the affectionate couple, always hugging and sneaking kisses around their children. The bet was such a cute and clever idea – it’s so typical of children to be disgusted by their parents being all lovey-dovey around each other. ;)

I thought James was characterised especially well – he had that kind of Fred and George attitude that so many next-gen writers seem to attribute him with, but in this case, it wasn’t overdone. I love the sly little comments he makes, trying to make them be affectionate without prevail. Albus and Lily, too, were very well done – they were just adorable little kids, really. It’s obvious that Lily has inherited a lot of her mother’s traits. ;) She’s so determined and prepared to beat her brothers.

With Harry and Ginny, though, I don’t think you’ve captured their characters quite as well. I can’t see Harry as the type of person to get so frustrated so quickly with something as trivial as this – he’s not really an impatient person and I think he could quite easily last out the few days just to prove a point to his kids. He wouldn’t like it, but if Ginny wanted him to he could do it. As for her, I think she is much more likely to be the one getting annoyed and impatient and wanting the few days to be up. Although I imagine Harry to be the more affectionate one, I think Ginny would get fed up with it a lot easier.

I absolutely loved the ending – I can just imagine after all that pent-up frustration of the last few days … ;) You very cleverly got Lily out of the way, too, without making it look too obvious. I like how you’ve worded the last few lines, because it keeps it appropriate for the type of fic you’ve written – it’s just a light-hearted bit of fun, and going into anything too heavy would have ruined it, in my opinion. You’ve written the whole thing very well and it put a huge grin on my face. Well done! :)

--Jen

Reviewer: TheManagement
Date: 07/07/09 9:05
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is wonderful! It's one of my favorite fics.

Reviewer: megwinsor
Date: 06/26/09 8:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh crap, forgot
PS - I was sooo pissed off that there was no HG action pre-epilogue. I mean, there was the kiss.. sure, but, I mean, COME ON. ;)

Reviewer: megwinsor
Date: 06/26/09 8:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

you have no idea, this story made my day. I always imagined HG's relationship like that.. always BUBBLING over the edge. Also enjoyed how you mixed it with the epilogue of DH and sent Lily away. That would have sucked if she .. walked in .. haha.

Great story. Loved it.

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 06/09/09 8:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really like this story and I think that it's a great explanation.

Reviewer: gweasley95
Date: 06/03/09 21:05
Chapter: Chapter 1

I totally like that explanation of why there wasn't any thing between them in the end of DH!

Reviewer: manatee
Date: 05/21/09 15:32
Chapter: Chapter 1

wow lol i love it but lol LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: bk64
Date: 05/20/09 19:26
Chapter: Chapter 1

Awesome! you stayed very true to everyone's character...and if you think that you're the only one that thinks that JKR jibbed Harry and Ginny at the end of DH, then you've never heard my rant on the subject!

Reviewer: Momo Wellish
Date: 05/20/09 9:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

Nice

Reviewer: Trucker
Date: 05/19/09 21:06
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very good story, but the constant switching of tenses during the first kiss story needs to be fixed.

Reviewer: Essence of Potter
Date: 05/19/09 13:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! That was one of the best Harry/Ginny fics I've ever read!It was so funny and I think the personalities of James, Lily and Albus were perfect. Also, the ending was great, sometimes I find it hard to put a good ending on a story but this one was just brilliant!
Great job!

Reviewer: potterfan48
Date: 05/19/09 7:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very interesting story! I liked it a lot.

When I read the Epilogue, the lack of affection between two parents with three children in a public place didn't seem unusual. They were probably too busy trying to stay one step ahead of the children to save the world from destruction.

Reviewer: Saif
Date: 05/19/09 1:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

this was fo funny!!!

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