LiLu here. I am now going to attempt to review a poem for the first time ever. You have been warned. :)
That was funny, especially so because it expresses the true sentiments of every student at every dance since time began. (Girls are terrified of guys, too, by the way xD) The rhyming was a bit rough in the first stanza, but after that it was perfect. I liked the meter, too. It always seemed as if there were a bit too many syllables squeezed into the last line of a stanza, but it gave it more of an awkward teenager feel, so it added to the effect rather than detracting from it. I do think there was a bit of overuse of the word “frickin’.” >.>
It was really funny, though, and I did appreciate the secret message. Great job, BB, and congrats on winning that tournament!
This poem made me grin. You capture, in sixteen lines, exactly how it feels to be a teenager asking someone to a dance. I couldn’t figure out who the speaker was, though. I assumed it was Harry or maybe Ron? For some reason, I loved the line ‘Truly, what the frickin’ hell?’ If this were being read out loud, this line seems like one that would really grab the listener’s attention. Later in the poem, the first line of the last stanza asks another abrupt question. Those questions break up the narrative and really convey a lot of frustration, but they’re also hilarious and serve to engage the reader.
Yes, I did get your secret message. : )
this is so cute I love it!
Hee hee, who knew us girls were so frickin' terrifying! Nice, job with the poem, BB. It was a very funny part of Goblet of Fire and you've carried on the fun with your poem. Well done. Carole xxx
Author's Response: GACK! A GIRL! *pulls out cootie shot* :D
GoF? Hmm, I meant it to be any generic Triwizard champion, so it isn't exactly GoF, but I suppose you can assume it to be Harry. :D
Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it. :D
Haha... Very nice, BB. Very nice.
The only thing that is bugging me is that the first line of the actual poem isn't separated from the line you have before it. :P
Otherwise, you have made my morning with your poem of (Harry?)!angst. :)
Author's Response: Ich habe, um. Oh, forget it. I've separated it now.
It's previous title was "The Trials and Tribulations of a Generic Triwizard Chapion"... I guess that answers your question about the character in question. It's just a random champion, no one in particular.
Thanks for the review, and thanks for the praise! :D