Reviews For Gambit
Reviewer: drcjsnider
Date: 08/26/09 17:54
Chapter: Gambit

I liked them coming together after the misunderstanding... nice job

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! (And if you're the same drcjsnider as on, then I'm extra flattered, too because I'm a huge fan!)

Reviewer: Rislans88
Date: 05/08/09 15:03
Chapter: Gambit

this is great!! nicely done :D

Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it. :)

Reviewer: delirioustk
Date: 05/02/09 22:54
Chapter: Gambit cute!!!! I don't read a lot of Next Gen fics so I'm probably not the best reviewer for this but I really like your Scorpius!~ =) He's really sweet...

Author's Response: Haha, I believe there's no such thing as a bad reviewer! :) I'm really glad you enjoyed the story. And it was really fun creating the NextGen character's personalities. (I swear, Scorpius is different in every fic I write.) Thanks for dropping a line!

Reviewer: Inverarity
Date: 05/02/09 14:37
Chapter: Gambit

 A good rule of thumb is that if there is a point in the story that requires an out-of-story explanation from the author, then you either need to clarify it in the story, or leave it out.

I think this was fairly well written, but the cause of Rose's distress was a bit contrived. (As amusing as Scorpius's comment about all of them being "named after sodding flowers" was, it's not really likely that anyone is going to mistake Pansy for Rose just because they're both flowers.)

Also, you can't castle after your king has been put in check.

Author's Response: Oh, I really do agree with you about the out-of-story explaining. The truth is, I normally wouldn't have bothered because I would have assumed that the reader either (a) wouldn't notice or (b) would understand the creative license; however, I've noted that Harry Potter fans tend to really be concerned with the little things. There's nothing wrong with that but, as a precaution, I decided to clear up anything I thought might be cause for concern no matter how unnecessary I thought it was. I suppose it could be considered contrived. I took liberties with the idea that pansy can be used as an adjective, Scorpius would be smart enough not to use Rose's name if he really WAS insulting her, and Giulia's native language being Italian instead of English. It is a bit wild but... I don't know. Plus the story went through enough people-- gossip tends to do that. I just liked the idea of miscommuniation and all that and figured it was plausible enough to survive suspended disbelief. Hey, thanks for the heads up about chess! I really don't know anything about it. Next set of revisions, I'll be sure to fix that. :) Cheers.

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