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Name: Madame Lestrange (Signed) · Date: 11/30/09 17:10 · For: Chapter 1
A really excellent story!! Please write more!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

Name: Russia Snow (Signed) · Date: 10/30/09 11:12 · For: Chapter 1
I think there are some real Gems in this story. Some small bits that just make me go "aww!" or smile, that part about the fireworks at Fred's funeral and the friendly banter from Fred about Harry.

Other bits though, I wasn't so crazy on. There were quite a few Americanisms "Picture" referring to "film" you have film later on, and the use of the word "Picture" confused me, at first I thought you meant photograph. Toward the beginning there is a "realize" which was a 'z' instead if an 's' ( A little nitpicky I know, sorry!) But one of my pet hates, is the Americanism "Write me" To me it doesn’t make any sense. It should definitely be "write to me".

Well that is all the technical things sorted, but I'm not all too crazy about the plot. Some of it was really good, like I said before, gems. I just think you rushed some things. I appreciate that this was a one-shot, and a long one at that! But I think it might be better as chaptered, just some of the scenes like the funerals, it doesn't seem right that you describe having to go to her brothers funeral as "dreary" That just isn’t the right word at all. And Harry's Auror training? I didn’t like that bit about "Kingsley wanted him to be an Auror straight away with no training" I find this very unlikely. Being an Auror is a highly skilled job; I doubt anyone could do it with no training, even if you were Harry Potter. I’m not too mad about the condensed Auror training either, I know he fought the dark lord, but it doesn’t really qualify him as an Auror. I am glad you decided to give him some training though, and because you tied in his Auror training with Ginny’s school, it did actually flow quite nicely.

There were other parts that I felt were rushed too, the year that Ginny spent playing Quidditch, and especially the time she spent waiting over his training in France. I thought it was completely OOC for Ginny to blow up like that and write him an angry letter, she was supposed to love him, I understand her being mad, but it wasn’t his fault and she knew that. You say a lot that she had “grown up” and yet this seems like a very childish thing to do.

I am sorry if that seemed a little harsh, I did actually like this story. Surprisingly I loved the eloping part at the end. I thought that was very Ginny, and so sweet! It was a lovely concept for a story, the little dictionary definitions, a very nice touch. I just think it could do with a little tweaking here and there. Overall, well done!

Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: Thanks very much for such a long, detailed review! I'll have to fix those Americanisms, which will eventually be the death of me in the Harry Potter fandom! I understand what you mean about it being rushed at parts, and numerous scenes probably would have been better had they gotten a whole chapter for themselves. However, there are plenty of stories out there that do go in to full elaboration of the time after the war for Harry/Ginny, and this was meant more to give a general feeling than go into detail. I'm glad you liked bits and pieces of it, though!

Name: Phia Phoenix (Signed) · Date: 10/25/09 3:10 · For: Chapter 1
Oh, and I forgot to say - in Britain, it's "petrol", not "gas". Because it's not actually a gas. One of the few times that the British version makes more sense than the American, haha.

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

Name: Phia Phoenix (Signed) · Date: 10/25/09 2:24 · For: Chapter 1

Well. Where to start? I really enjoyed this fic. It was well built-up, characterisation great, romance just right, plot concepts entertaining and realistic. Very well done.

Except... well, usually I wouldn't bother bringing this up, but you've evidently made an effort to be relatively British (what with the sweets and mUm and all) so I thought I'd just give you a hand and point out some Americanisms that jumped out at me (I'm Australian, but that's closer to British than it is to American). 

*Going steady - there's not really a British equivalent, but something like "be my girlfriend officially" would do it.

*Overuse of "dating" - it is used in Britain, but not regularly. I think the Brits do the same as us in that we say "going out" rather than "dating". So, my boyfriend and I aren't dating, we're going out. And we don't go on dates, we go out. Geddit? That said, as Americanisation takes over the world, "date" is probably used as much as anything. But HP is decidedly more old-fashioned and British than modern-day teenaged Australia, so...

*"Road trip" - I've actually only ever heard this term once before, and that was in an American film. Probably just "travel" would work... let me think. My mum regularly tell ms how she and dad "drove around Australia" twenty years back, and she's certainly never referred to it as a road trip. That's a snarly one.

*"Diner" - decidedly American.  "Takeaway" might work better there.

*"Don't say anything until I'm done" - done in this context is another Americanism, though few people realise it. You might want to use "finished" instead.

*You sporadically switch between British and American spelling. There are a lot of "realiSes" but still "favOrites" etc. Just whack it into Word and change the language preference to British, it'll pick up the American spellings.

But, they're all about as nit-picky as you'll get. I don't have any criticism for the actual story. Well done. :)

xoxo Phia

Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate all the pointers -- I'll have to fix all that :) I'm glad you enjoyed the actual story!

Name: TheV94 (Signed) · Date: 10/23/09 21:02 · For: Chapter 1
Yowza! that was ...WOW!
Its always so great to see people using their natural talents. Yours is amazing. I love how you made this so realistic and funny and quirky all at the same time.
Keep it up-you're BRILLIANT.
Love Always,
The V94

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it and thought it realistic but funny, too! :)

Name: ginnypotterx33 (Signed) · Date: 09/06/09 20:21 · For: Chapter 1
WOW! this made my day! it was so cute and well-written :)
best harry/ginny story yet!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you think it the best ;)

Name: My Wicked Quill (Signed) · Date: 08/20/09 22:01 · For: Chapter 1
that was just incredible, perfect, and every wonderful adjective you could possibly imagine! harry and ginny to the point where you'd think that J.K. Rowling her self gave you a lecture. and i don't JUST say that. i have high standards, i don't usually finish reading these stories, they are either too far fetch from the potter story or the writing is just unberable, but yours was the first i couldnt stop.

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad it wasn't too far-fetched and it seemed in-line with the Harry Potter universe! Thanks for the review :)

Name: fairylights1006 (Signed) · Date: 08/04/09 13:07 · For: Chapter 1
I liked this story alot. You did a great job staying true to the characters, and I always love to see Harry get to be happy.

Author's Response: Thanks! I always like to see Harry happy, too :)

Name: Megshfoo (Signed) · Date: 08/03/09 23:58 · For: Chapter 1
Well here's some sugar for your tea ;)
I loved this fic!!
it was really sweet, not overly lengthy, and had some really cute lines in there!
The only thing I would have liked even more is if you continued to write about the family reception and fluff :). But then again, I also wish the harry potter books continued until one was titled "Harry Potter and the Balding Baffle" or "Harry Potter and the Missing Cane", but we all can't get what we want now can we? :p

Author's Response: Thanks very much! It would have been fun to include more of the Weasley family, but I couldn't make it much longer without making it multiple chapters, and I wanted to keep it as a one-shot. I'm glad you liked it!

Name: bk64 (Signed) · Date: 07/21/09 18:50 · For: Chapter 1
wow i've read a lot of Post DH H/G stories which pick up from right after the battle and this is definitly one of my favourites! i really enjoyed Ginny's POV too.


Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it :)

Name: REMi iS AWESOME (Signed) · Date: 07/18/09 16:27 · For: Chapter 1
Another wonderful story coming from your mind! How do you stand all this wonderfullness practically bursting outta your ears!! If you ever wanna trade minds, im totallly for it!

Author's Response: Haha, thanks very much! :) That's high praise!

Name: magical_katie (Signed) · Date: 07/09/09 14:31 · For: Chapter 1
I enjoyed you story Wait, I think it was an original and inspired idea. It was an interesting collection of stories, although I was dissapointed to see that Ginny's final year at Hogwarts wasn't written here, as that would certainly come under the category of 'Wait'. You simply had Harry describe his pain to Ginny, and his speech was not recorded and I think that that would have added a new element to this story. Never mind though.

I liked the way you included the dictionary definitions for the word 'Wait' as it added interest to the read and gave it variety and diversity. Well done, that was a great story!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I could only fit so much into the story without making it multiple chapters and more of an epic project than I wanted to take on. I'm glad you liked it nonetheless!

Name: siriusblackhead (Signed) · Date: 07/09/09 0:19 · For: Chapter 1
Absolute perfection. Best H/G fic I've read by far. And I loved that it was a oneshot, but part of me still wants more!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. I could have easily split it into chapters, but I thought it was best all in one. :)

Name: TheManagement (Signed) · Date: 07/07/09 9:09 · For: Chapter 1
This is my absolute favorite Harry/Ginny fic. I love the use of the word "wait" scattered throughout the story- it made your writing fresh and really stand out from other fanfics. Also, you portrayed the characters very well. Harry and Ginny were incredibly believable, which made your fic ten times better. I LOVED IT!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! That's high praise. It's really important to me that characters stay in-character in my stories, so I'm glad to know you think I managed to that in this! :)

Name: NoMinistryIdiot (Signed) · Date: 07/02/09 21:49 · For: Chapter 1
Great, but it was a really long chapter.

Author's Response: It was really long, you're right. I'm glad you liked it nonetheless!

Name: ron lover (Signed) · Date: 06/09/09 8:53 · For: Chapter 1
This is a very good story. Its cool how you did the things with the different meanings of wait.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you think so. :)

Name: Ginny4life (Signed) · Date: 05/14/09 21:07 · For: Chapter 1
That was awesome, totally loved it, couldn't of thought of a more awesome story myself.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you think so :)

Name: coolh5000 (Signed) · Date: 05/05/09 8:16 · For: Chapter 1
I was giving this another read and wanted to leave a follow up reveiw because I noticed some changes since my review and wanted you to know that it's always nice to think that the comments you make in a review can have an effect on the author. The changes you have made may only be small, such as the odd American to British word here and there but they really make a difference to way I read it and it's good that you took the time to do them.


Author's Response: I always like it when people leave help in reviews -- if there are typos or small words I can change that will help the story, then I want to know. So thank you for telling me! I'm glad you appreciate the changes :)

Name: ahattab33 (Signed) · Date: 05/03/09 21:52 · For: Chapter 1
What a lovely, lovely story. The time period immediately following the Final Battle is on that I am usually the least satistifed in general for some reason with canon compliant stories, and this was great! The time period right after the final battle to the transition to their careers was nice all the way to their marriage - everything felt nice and...real. I also related to this story on a personal level having been in a long-distance relationship for several years, so I definitely identified with Ginny's frustration, lol. Even if I hadn't though, the "waiting" theme was wonderfully done and this story was a delight to read.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you found it realistic -- that's always something I strive for in my stories. I've read a lot of fanfictions that take place right after the final battle, and while I have read a lot of good ones, I generally -- like you -- aren't very impressed by them. It's good to know you think mine does a good job! :)

Name: ILoveHarry 3_14 (Signed) · Date: 05/02/09 23:41 · For: Chapter 1
That was great. I really loved reading it. Thanks for writing it!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

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