Chapter 1 - Lily Goes Lightly
Very nice! Lily and Remus is really a good pairing, in some ways more real given the little we know about her. Are you continuing this? Are they going to sneak around behind James back? Because I'd love to see the reaction when James finds out!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I am planning maybe 4-5 chapters at this point, with perhaps a few surprises. I like Remus a great deal. Nothing against Tonks, mind you, but she wasn't a Marauder and I wanted a Marauder era fic, so...
There will be sneakery a-go-go. The question is more which backs it will be behind...
Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Chapter 1 - Lily Goes Lightly
OH, WOW! What a fic! I LOVE this. I have to say I have a recent interest in Lily/Remus which goes wildly against my canon leanings, and you've just fanned the flames for the pairing. This is wonderfully written, very IC and also has a few decent Marauder cliches (Peter!bedwetting, Sirius!Witchmagnet) to make me giggle.
I adore Remus utter panic when she comes in and the thoughts running through his head A hermit. I shall have to be the first Werewolf Hermit, That line made me laugh out loud - literally.
The sex scene was really well written, amusing yet touching (Poor Remus) but, yes, thankfully Lily is an understanding witch.
Your attention to detail with the curtains and the fact that they self mend (or is it the house-elves?) was lovely and I did giggle at the contraceptive charms on the castle - that's how Sirius got away with it!
I do have a couple of Brit-picks (sorry). One is the use of the word 'gotten'. We just don't use it in Britain - it reminds me of cotton fields, Huckleberry Finn and pumpkin pie - my cliched view of wholesome America. The other, and I'm loathe to say it because it ruins the joke, is Mononucleosis - we refer to it as Glandular fever- but then that's not nearly as funny. *shoos away her evil Brit-pick demon*
I really loved this though, just the thing I needed to read first thing in the morning when it's wet outside and I have another Marauder chapter to write. Adding to Favourites! Carole xxx
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Although the first thing I have to do is smack my head against a wall, as I was very specifically trying to avoid Peter wetting his pants - Remus is talking about his getting up from bed at night to use the facilities, but I obviously didn't make that clear.
Sirius might seem a little bit less like a girl magnet in a chapter or two, but honestly, I think he would have been. Men who don't seem to care so often are. I think James would have been,too, but I think he was better at keeping a lid on it because of his affection for Lily. If he's really fond of Lily.
And yes, that's just us - pumpkin pie and cotton fields and Huck Finn, although I have to say that at least two of the three aren't necessarily seen as all that wholesome over here. It might be the chapter in Huck Finn where the two families in town kill each other off..= )
Thanks again for the review!