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Name: Ginnypotter2699 (Signed) · Date: 02/04/12 3:46 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
I like it!!! Please update this. -N

Name: Sapphire at Dawn (Signed) · Date: 12/14/09 3:47 · For: Chapter 1
Ooh, nice ending! I may have to go and read the next chapter!

I like the dynamics between them and the different people you have them to be, and I like the fact that Rose isn't a cardboard cut-out of Hermione, in fact, it's Hugo who is reading a book! The relationships between them are rather funny, and I liked the little arguement between Rose and Hugo.

I also liked the fact that Scorpius was placed in Ravenclaw (though I should point out that their colours are blue and bronze, not silver). Most fics i've read with him in (though to be honest, it's not a lot) place him in Slytherin (I'm guilty of this myself, though I'm going to ignore that!), and it was a nice breath of fresh air.

However, I am going to get all British on you (sorry!) and say that we tend to say 'murder' instead of 'homicide'. There were a few little grammar mistakes, for example the first comma in this sentence shouldn't be there: 'She remembered that, when she was only eleven,'

I'm also not sure I like the idea of them having someone 'in charge', to me it seemed rather immature; something a seven year old would do rather than a seventeen year old. I'd also watch out for James's character being too immature. Seventeen year olds can be immature, but in a different way to how thirteen year olds are immature, and at the moment he's coming across as a thirteen year old instead of a seventeen year old.

Sarah x

Author's Response:

Ooh, thank you, Sarah! I'm glad you liked the first chapter; that means a lot, I'm not sure if many people read this fic anymore due to lack of updates! It's on hiatus now, though, especially because I had to delete it's document due to the fact that there was a virus in my cmoputer. Anyway...

I wasn't a fan of Scorpius=Slytherin just because of his family, and I don't think it's rather fitting for his character. I always saw him as ore of a Ravenclaw, and I'm glad you liked that.

aoihfgiuDHSp!!! Lol! I'm totally failing with Briticisms, and comma usage now that you mention it, so thanks for pointing those out! As for the 'in charge' part...Yeesh, I can't remember where I used that o.O But like you said, it does seem to ring like that to me as well, hearing it from a different viewpoint :)

Thanks for reviewing! {BeccA}

Name: Phoenix13 (Signed) · Date: 06/22/09 12:20 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
I like this so far--what will happen to Hugo?

I'm working on your art request--I can't wait to see the next chapter because I need to know more about those OCs! Could you maybe PM me a draft on the boards?

Author's Response: Hi again! Sure, I can send you a first draft! I have a potential beta (I just have to reply to my thread) and it will be sent to them ASAP, but I can definitely send you a draft. Thanks for the revie,w and as for what will happen to Hugo... *evil laugh* You'll have to wait to find that out! {BeccA}

Name: manatee (Signed) · Date: 05/25/09 9:31 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
I love it plez write more soon

Author's Response: Thanks! I have chapter three submitted, so its up to the amazing mods as to how long it takes for it to be up. {BeccA}

Name: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer (Signed) · Date: 05/20/09 18:06 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
yeah it was a good wow like in WOW i loved it!!!

Author's Response: thank you! :D

Name: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer (Signed) · Date: 05/19/09 20:08 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
wow i loved the chair

Author's Response: Was that a good wow? but thanks! the chair just seemed like something McGonagall would have made. Thanks for R&R-ing! {BeccA}

Name: bellatrix-black-lestrange (Signed) · Date: 05/18/09 14:33 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
aww poor hugo :(

love the idea about the chair and the trio on it great !

Author's Response: Hi, BBL! I know whatcha mean, poor Hugo! But a woman my mother used to work with has MS, and it's captivated me. And the chair with the Trio on it was just a random idea I came up with. It would be pretty dang cool I think! Thanks for R&Ring. {BeccA}

Name: ginnygirl16 (Signed) · Date: 04/23/09 22:39 · For: Chapter 1
well done. I love to read second generation stories. I am so glad that Hugo is like Hermione, rather than Rose. Everyone always makes her out to be the book worm. Anyways, I look forward to reading more of this story.


Author's Response: thanks so much, ginnygirl16! I, too, agree that a lot of authors make Rose be the Hermione-type one of the Weasley children. I've always seen Hugo like Hermione, and that appeared to be the case in here as well. Thank you for reading and reviewing, and the second chapter should be up soon! {BeccA}

Name: Lily6161 (Signed) · Date: 04/23/09 14:20 · For: Chapter 1
Hey, I can't wait until you update! This story has such a great beginning! By the way, not to be rude, but I think Lily might have been stated as having red hair in the epilouge. Did she dye it?

Author's Response: Hey, Lily6161! Lily actually does have red hair in the epilogue, but considering she's quite the rebel in this story, I had her dye it. It is very confusing! {BeccA}

Name: JeeviS (Signed) · Date: 04/23/09 8:54 · For: Chapter 1
I love it...it kinda made my day!! thank you:D..... i especially love this lines:

“Aw, Jamesie, don’t let it get you down!” Lily patted his shoulder. “I’m sure that one of us will do worse than you… Maybe… If you’re lucky…”

“Alright, everyone. I think that’s enough. Look at the poor kid.” Scorpius gestured to James’s hurt face. “I don’t think any of you would appreciate this if it were you. But James… Seriously… That was pathetic!”

It was really good... I liked the fact u made Scorpius friends with all of them when most of the writers write on them being enemies at 1st...I think its abosuletly brilliant n unique!!!! cant wait for the next chapter....update soon!

Author's Response: Hi, JeeviS! I'm glad it made your day. *huggles* That made MY day! And those were some of my favourite lines to write, as well. And I don't see Scorpius being enemies with them; it just doesn't seem right to me. Thanks for the compliments, and the next chapter should be up soon (if the good grace of the mods shines upon me)! {BeccA}

Name: sergeantmajorette (Signed) · Date: 04/22/09 14:16 · For: Chapter 1
I'll be following this -- I love nextgen!

Author's Response: Why, thank you sergeantmajorette! I love nextgen as well; I'm completely awful at writing Trio-centric fics because I think canon doesn't give you much space to interpret in your own way, thanks to JKR's detailed writing style. My MWPP fics weren't the greatest, and so I decided to venture into nextgen... and I'm glad I did! Thanks again! {BeccA}

Name: Quilter (Signed) · Date: 04/22/09 14:03 · For: Chapter 1
Realy like you style, I love the story line, (if I am reading into it where you are going) and O, please update soon, what a way to leave it. I really like the characterizations that you have given for each of the kids. Anxiously watching for an update. Thanks for sharing the story.

Author's Response: Thanks, Quilter! I'm in the editing process of chapter two right now (and have been for half of this week!) so I'm assuming that I'll have it submitted sometime today! And if the good grace of the mods shines upon me again, it should be validated soon thereafter! {BeccA}

Name: inluvwid_pdft (Signed) · Date: 04/22/09 13:28 · For: Chapter 1
You can't just leave a story on "NO"!!!!!! I want to read more.
I really like your style of writing. Seems like you got the next generation's personalities really well.

Author's Response: Thank you, inluvwid_pdft! The reason for the "NO" is actually different than I had planned it. Originally, there was supposed to be an attack on Gryffindor, but then I realized "wait... there's really no one to attack the castle!" so it changed by a lot. It'll all be summed up in the next chapter I think, although it will play a role in the rest of the story. And thanks for the comments on my writing style and personalities for the characters; I write a LOT of original fiction and didn't change any of my style here. As for ther personalities; Rose reminds me more of Ron, and Hugo of Hermione. James is sort of a combination of his dad and Uncle Percy, Lily's the Potter family's little rebel (you'll see that progress throughout the story), and Al is a lot like Harry. Thanks again, {BeccA}

Name: bellatrix-black-lestrange (Signed) · Date: 04/22/09 12:00 · For: Chapter 1
omg quick submit another chapter i'm hanging on the edge here !!!!!!!!!!

very good i liked it but i need to get a couple of things clear James is in his seventh year , rose,albus and Scorpius are in the sixth year, and hugo and lily are in the third year right ?

Author's Response: hiya, bellatrix! I'm in the fifth day of the chapter two editing process, and then I'll have it submitted. I know, the years are a bit confusing! But actually, James is (in fact) in his seventh year (when he comes into the story, it says "James, the eldest of the cousins (being in his seventh year and all)", and Hugo and Lily are in third, but Rose, Scorpius, and Albus are in their fifth. The way you can tell that is because when Rose, Albus, and Scorpius are starting their first year in the epilogue of DH, Lily complains about starting Hogwarts "in two years". So she's two years below them. Thanks again, {BeccA}

Name: muggler180 (Signed) · Date: 04/22/09 9:42 · For: Chapter 1
really good first chapter i can't wait for the next one i like how Hugo and Rose are know it alls just like Hermione

Author's Response: Ooh, double post!

Name: muggler180 (Signed) · Date: 04/22/09 9:42 · For: Chapter 1
really good first chapter i can't wait for the next one i like how Hugo and Rose are know it alls just like Hermione

Author's Response: Ooh, thank you muggler180! Hugo is definitely a know it all like his mother, but as for Rose... She reminds me more of Ron. She is rather smart, but she would never want to be top of her year. Maybe that'll be more clear in later chapters, but if not, that's okay! Anyway, the next chapter should be up shortly! {BeccA}

Name: The_Dream_Team (Signed) · Date: 04/22/09 6:57 · For: Chapter 1
wow i really liked that! That is totally how me and my siblings and cousins act towards each other so i thought it was funny! I like the fact that scorpius is in ravenclaw... even though i think that it would be hilarious if he was in gryffindor! i hope lily isnt rite about him being like draco... and omg! what a cliffie! that means u will hav to update soon though... :) i luv ur writing style and i cant wait to read more of this fic!

Author's Response: The_Dream_Team (i love your username), You and your family are like that? Wow! That's cool! I love having people who can relate to my writing, and I think that in later chapters, they become more like stereotypical brothers and sisters, where they have issues and fight a bit. But, as the summary says, it's all alright because they're family! I hate how Scorpius is put in Slytherin, because I honestly don't think he's that bad! I think Draco redeemed himself a little bit in between the 19 years from the end of the final battle and the epilogue. It would be funny if he were to be in Gryffindor, but I think that may be too cliched (add an accent over the 'e'!) and I think Ravenclaw fits him. And yes, it is a heeee-uge cliffie, but I think it's going to be worth it. Or at least I hope so! It should be updated soon :) {BeccA}

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