Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 09/07/09 1:37
Chapter: Christmas Day

I thought this was a lovely little chapter.

I like writing. Little bits of humor here and there, little bits of magic or wizarding society spicing things up without being overwhelming. It feels like a nice addition to the universe we've already got.

And the mystery builds slowly...I like that Albus got some information from Bill. I'm not so sure that his parents would have given it to him, lol.


Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the chapter, Amanda! I gave Bill the exposition because I thought he was an unusual choice and he rarely appears in fan fiction. I'm very flattered that you like my writing style. I do try to keep consistent with canon and to build it up a little bit when I can. Anyway, thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: WhySoSirius
Date: 06/19/09 16:11
Chapter: The Inferi

It's so suspenseful! I'm literally sitting on the edge of my seat while reading this chapter. So far this is a great story, so keep up the good work! Can't wait to read the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you! Chapter 8 should be available quite soon, probably within a couple weeks. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the chapter!

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 06/19/09 15:30
Chapter: The Inferi

WOW great chapter, what a battle. the ending is a little annoying but only cause i want to keep reading and see what happens. and see how is behind the inferi, i can't wait, keep up the great writting.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked this chapter. It was a lot of fun to write, especially the battle. I've structured Book 1 to partially revolve around this incident and you will find out who sent the Inferi, and more importantly, what they were trying to do, by the end of Book 1. Please stay tuned for more!

Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 06/10/09 21:02
Chapter: The Life and Legacy of Nicolas Flamel

Al was pretty clever on asking the Room to show him who was talking out in the Forest, and he obviously takes after his father with his ability to question (and perhaps obsess?) after things that no one else cares about. I'm very interested to see what Harry has to say...will he encourage Al, and see himself in his son and believe? Or will he understand why adults were constantly frustrated with him as a child, lol?

Author's Response: It was interesting to play around with the limits of what the Room of Requirement could and couldn't do. Clearly, it didn't give Al quite the conclusive answer he wanted, but the presence of the Foe-Glass is obviously a big hint. As for Harry's reaction, you'll get that in Chapter 7 and he and Ginny will get to be on the opposite side for once! :) Anyway, thanks for reading! I hope you like the rest of the story!

Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 05/10/09 13:49
Chapter: Generations

This is a great story! It is well-written, nicely paced and characterized, and very interesting! I wonder if they will tell their parents about the DA...different ages (they are so young!) and the need really isn't as great (as far as we know) so I'm curious as to their reactions.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story! The New DA was something I wanted to drop into the story very early because it's a very important plot point in this and later books. I reasoned that after hearing stories about the DA from their parents, the second generation would want to try it out for themselves, a decision that will become. . . . advantageous in the years to come ;) Anyway, thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 04/24/09 14:36
Chapter: First Day

Albus seems to take after his father in the scholar department. One wonders why the sorting hat placed Scorpius in Gryffindor since he seems to be very unhappy there.

Author's Response: Scorpius's placement in Gryffindor has more to do with his essential character than his desire to be in Slytherin, something that will definitely be addressed in later chapters. Anyway, thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: FinalCow
Date: 04/20/09 18:18
Chapter: The Sorting

This is a great first fic. You've a got a really smooth, readable writing style, and a nice set-up for your plot to take off. I look forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying the story and I think that Chapter 2, "First Day," should be up in two or three days! Please stay tuned!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 04/17/09 15:58
Chapter: The Sorting

Not a bad beginning. The story still needs a hook to draw the reader in. Right now it is somewhat indistinguishable from other good post Hogwarts stories.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm afraid that Chapter 1 is a little generic, but I think that the later chapters really flesh out my story pretty well. Please keep reading!

Reviewer: Quilter
Date: 04/15/09 10:45
Chapter: The Sorting

Enjoyed your story so far. Humored at your Mallory insert. Hoping that your Albus will befriend Scorpius, till next chapter, Thanks

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Very glad you like the story! Albus and Scorpius will have an interesting relationship considering their fathers' dislike of each other, something that will be explored as the story progresses. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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