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Name: iteach (Signed) · Date: 07/06/10 9:19 · For: Chapter 13
Nice story. I hope there's more.

Name: mulligas (Signed) · Date: 10/04/09 2:30 · For: Chapter 9
I thought Snape wanted the Slytherins to resist Voldemort.

Name: mulligas (Signed) · Date: 10/04/09 2:22 · For: Chapter 6
I thought Voldemort wanted Hogwarts intact not in pieces.

Name: grangergal101 (Signed) · Date: 08/27/09 4:22 · For: Chapter 13
ooohhhh....Lucius Malfoy!!!!!!
She is starting to appreciate what snape is doing for her. YAY!!!!

Author's Response: Glad there's a Lucius fan amoung my readers ;-) And yes, it has taken her long enough to consider that Snape might not be simply plain evil

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 08/25/09 22:02 · For: Chapter 3
I'm glad Nicole did'nt stoop down to Amycus' level and set the Cruciatus curse on Ginny and Neville, especially Neville. Carrow seemed pleased.
Snape seems to get how the Carrows operate, at least one anyway.
This is a great story, and I look forward to reading the next chapters.
I hope Snape does'nt have any plans to harm Nicole or her brother...He did 'read' her letter that she wrote to her parents.
That would be spying, right? Invasion of privacy? I guess Snape is paranoid about what she was writing.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it. Nicole will continue to have a very rocky time at Hogwarts, especially with members of the DA, and she hasn't got the same amount of bravery as the Gryffindors, hence why she snapped and cursed Neville and Ginny. Snape is actually concerned about her, though he would never dare to admit it, and yes it is important for him to know what she was feeding to the outside world.

Name: Saif (Signed) · Date: 08/25/09 1:47 · For: Chapter 13
Another brilliant chapter!
I was so tense when Lucius notices the Polyjuice and the Imperius but kudos to Snape for wiggling out of that one too!
I thought it was really clever of Nicole to come up with that but Snape was too quick for her!

Author's Response: Well I figured something had to go wrong! Lucius is one of my favourite characters so I hope you don't mind him popping up every so often to cause trouble.

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 08/24/09 23:10 · For: Chapter 2
Not a good start for Nicole, I'm glad to see that she is sticking up for her beliefs. I hope she does'nt suffer too much in Carrow's detentions.
Snape is not the most compassionate person in the world. It's one thing to be a part of the new orld order that is Voldemort, but clearly another to have to follow every move that he expects Snape to make involving the students and even against his colleagues at Hogwarts.
I see quite a battle brewing in this tale.
Thanks for a great story!

Author's Response: I'm really glad you're enjoying the story so far. The moment I finished reading Book Seven I felt JKR had missed a big trick by not dedicating at least some of it to Hogwarts and what Snape would be like as headmaster. There was such a story to tell there, so I began writing it ;-)

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 08/24/09 21:31 · For: Chapter 1
Hi, first of all, I know I'll be enjoying this story. Should be a fun read!
I hope Nicole's brother hangs in there as a Slytherin. Just because your ex-head of house is now headmaster, does'nt mean you're going to get an easy break.
The Carrows sound like absolute monsters. I feel sorry for the 3 houses, not for Slytherin, except for Nicole and Lewis.
The way the first years were sorted is pure evil! No wonder they were scared to death!
Thanks for deciding to bring this one back! Hang in there as you continue to write future chapters.

Name: just_a_muggle (Signed) · Date: 08/10/09 8:29 · For: Chapter 1
I really like reading the story from Snape's point of view. You did a great job describing his feelings and thoughts. I love Nicole too. Paint It Black is a great song. Ow and i don't think the story is too dark or too depressing. It feels right. Looking forward to the next chapter already. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! Sorry for not responding sooner, my computer was playing up and then I forgot <.< I am trying not to make it too dark and depressing because it could very easily be, and that would remove some of the enjoyment of writing it for me.

Name: MetamorphmagusLupin (Signed) · Date: 08/09/09 16:04 · For: Chapter 12
Good chapter. I'm assuming we get to find out what Snape took from the vault later. One tiny little error at the beginning of Nicole's POV. She says that Lewis would make a great sneaker instead of seeker. That's all though. I can't wait for the next update.

Name: Saif (Signed) · Date: 08/09/09 11:39 · For: Chapter 12
AWESOME chapter! What a genius idea having Nicole impersonate Alecto. I also liked the fact that there was a blood-charm (whatever its called) on the vault like the one in the cave in HBP. Was this vault the same one which has the cup?!
And what a cliffhanger! Nicole better act up or Lucius will smell something fishy1

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/28/09 0:46 · For: Chapter 11
I don't find either this chapter or the previous one strange. I did notice a couple of problems with your point of view and pronouns in this chapter--minor editing issues.

I know almost nothing about chess, but even so this chapter was engaging.

Author's Response: Thank you - neither do I, other than the very basics, so I made sure that I didn't describe the whole game. I shall have a read through and see if I can correct some of those errors.

Name: Saif (Signed) · Date: 07/26/09 12:28 · For: Chapter 11
Awesome chapter! I loved the dialogue interspersed with the chess!

Author's Response: Hee! Glad you enjoyed it. I'm cracking on with writing this now so updates should be coming pretty regularly.

Name: grangergal101 (Signed) · Date: 07/26/09 1:00 · For: Chapter 11
OMG!!!!!!! I'm sooo hooked to this fic, it id AWWEEESSSSOOOMMMEEE!!!!!
Please update SOON!!!

Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it and there will certainly be an update soon!

Name: Saif (Signed) · Date: 07/15/09 23:46 · For: Chapter 10
I feel really bad for Snape!
As for the previous review, I meant it would be cool for Nicole to find out whenever, before the battle of hogwarts, during, afterwards, anything!

Author's Response: She'll find out at some point, don't worry. She's intelligent enough to work it out for herself.

Name: Saif (Signed) · Date: 07/07/09 8:49 · For: Chapter 9
I can't wait for Snape to reveal the truth to Nicole!

Author's Response: But where's the fun in that? :-P

Name: MetamorphmagusLupin (Signed) · Date: 07/04/09 19:36 · For: Chapter 9
Your characterization of Snape is excellent. That last line, wow. Dumbledore wants him to instill trust in Nicole, yet he can't help but snidely respond to her question and make her think that he really wants to kill her. I can't help but smile. Great job! I can't wait for an update!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm really glad you're enjoying it. I think Snape has a fascinating personality and I really wanted to explore how he thinks and feels as well as how others perceive him in this story. Update will be coming shortly.

Name: Saif (Signed) · Date: 06/01/09 1:35 · For: Chapter 8
Awesome! I have exams as well and this was a well-deserved break for me after all that studying!

Author's Response: I'm glad you're still enjoying it. I am finally done with Uni so updates should be quicker arriving.

Name: Saif (Signed) · Date: 04/30/09 13:27 · For: Chapter 7
OMG, I can't wait to find out what happens next! Nicole is gonna be in a LOT of trouble.

Author's Response: Hee, I'm glad you're still enjoying it. Yes, she is, more than she ever realised!

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 04/30/09 12:04 · For: Chapter 7
So the password was "Harry"? I have trouble picturing Ginny the way you describe her. I know she is tenacious and fiercely loyal to Harry, but I didn't see her as so angry and suspicious. It's and interesting perpective.

Author's Response: I took a liberty and assumed that the spiral staircase would be 'loyal' to Dumbledore and Harry, since it refused Umbridge from entering the headmaster's office in Harry's fifth year. Ginny will learn to trust Nicole eventually, but for now she's being stubborn.

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