I was intregued by this story the minute I started to read it.
I love how you describe at the beginning the ways in which Louisa's suspicions were first aroused by the strange man who lived across the street. Being only young, her imagination would have run riot simply imagining what could be going on when she sees the flashes of light, or hears the "bangs."
I also like the way you've described how Louisa attempts to prove to people around her what she can see and hear, but nobody seems to believe her.
It's so sweet how Louisa and Laura have convinced themselves that Mr Weasley is in fact "a witch" without proper proof of any kind. This shows, in my mind, the way children's minds can go into overdrive when they're given certain snippits of information!
However, the best part for me was the coincidence of the April Fools' joke as it was played on George's birthday, and the way he just laughs it off. It was so sweet how he told Fred he'd have "liked that one." I imagine, even in old age, he'd have found it hard not to retaliate in some way or another.
All in all, a wonderful story that I really enjoyed reading!
Ah... the glories of cellophane! Somebody on my floor taped over all the doors on April Fools, but only on the lower portions so as to trip people. But being the observant person I am, I was spared the embarrassment of getting caught on it...
But I digress. This was a nice, lighthearted story. I thought Louisa calling George a "man-witch" was particularly funny - there was a time when I too didn't know what to call wizards!
Happy Easter, and don't stop writing!
Tim the Enchanter
Oh, that was very cute! Lovely job, and such an original idea to include George Weasley, only as a much older man. And then to write it from a Muggle point of view - very cool! And a great tribute to Fred, too. Great job - good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks Gina =] Good luck in the challenge as well!
very entertaining :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review =]
That was quite asweet story... And setting it in George's birthday, too.
I would have liked for him (and thought it in character) for him to have pranked them back.... Nothing big, even a light joke... Just to say 'thank you'!!
But it was lovely nonetheless!!! Kuddos!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I think it would be fine for him to prank her back, it was just slightly off the timeline of the story. You're right though, it would be good. =]
Loved it!!!! I really liked your premise and thought your George was perfect.
Author's Response: Thanks Leigh. =p
So very, very entertaining! How old is George exactly in this story, and own is it Alternative Universe (I don't know, maybe I missed something)?
But I agree with the others. You should write more stories about Louisa and her neighbor!
Author's Response: Thanks. =] I don't know exactly how old he is, maybe eighty? I'm not sure. Old enough to be whitehaired and limpy. It's AU because according to Canon, George married Angelina and had kids. I originally didn't have the warning on, until I was reminded. Whoops. We'll see if I write anything more. I was proud of myself for my conclusion actually seeming conclusion-y this time...
Your characterizations were excellent.The plot and POV were refreshing. It seems hard to believe that George would live in a Muggle community, but it works for this fic. Good job and Cheerio!
Author's Response: Thanks very much. =]
I enjoyed that, Lizzy. It was an interesting point of view. The characterisation of Louisa - especially how scared she was at the end - was excellent. I rather hoped that she'd become friends with the old man-witch by the end as I think she'd be good for George.
Author's Response: He was originally going to catch just her putting up the cellophane and then invite her over for tea, but it just never worked out. I never managed to pull it off well enough. Anyway, thanks a million for the review! =]
That was a good April Fool story-----and you have George Weasly's reaction in character.
Author's Response: Thank you. =]
That was really good. Very original idea, and beautiful writing.
Would you consider making this into a chaptered fic? Please?
Either way, really good job. This is going in my favourites. :)
Author's Response: Thanks a bunch. We'll see about chaptered. My inspiration usually dies at 2000 words, so getting much farther is very unlikely. =p