Reviews For My Heart In Half
Reviewer: sas__x
Date: 10/11/10 16:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hiya, Beiriny. So, I really liked this poem! I don’t usually read them and really can’t write them so I envy you. I have to say I may be a bit biased as Lily/James are my OTP but I really did love this. You got over Lily’s feelings really well of how she feel’s split into two. I like how you repeat ‘My heart in half’ over and over again, it get’s your message across really well. ‘Or the man, with natural flair’ I think this line describes James really well. As I think that Lily was somehow uncontrollably drawn towards him when she first started to like him, and you managed to describe it amazingly. However, I really dislike the fact that you give Lily feelings for Snape. I personally hate to think of her giving him a second though. I realise that they were close friends and she may have had a small crush on him when they were children but I don’t think he was anything compared to what she felt for James, I really don’t think she had any real feelings for Snape at all. However, we just have different views and opinions. I did really, really enjoy and like this poem though!

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