hahaha cool story!! totalli funny and tres amusant!! n i lovd ur suggesti0n at d end- made it 2 c0ol !! awesum j0b, keep up the gud wrk!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it--including the plea, er, suggestion at the end! Thanks for reviewing. It made my day!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Thank you so much for a wonderful story! Your characterization of the Marauders was brilliant - some of the best I've read (and I've been reading fanfic for a *few* years lol)
The interactions were perfect - just enough Peter to remind us he was their friend (but not too much), James and Sirius playful banter to get Remus to do what they wanted, and Remus' reaction to them - pure genious. Thanks again!
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much! I've had a bad couple of days, so your wonderful review and kind words were exactly what I needed to cheer me up! I'm glad you thought the characterisations were done well--if they're too off-kilter from what everyone expects/thinks, it'll destroy a story quicker than anything, so when anyone tells me I've done a good job with that, I feel like I've accomplished something. Thanks again for your warm review!
that was really good!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! And even happier that you reviewed! Thanks again!
I MUST have swallowed some of the Potion. I need to review... Very clever story. You've characterised all the Marauders brilliantly and it's good to see a Remus who's standing up to his friends. Peter's good as well, not a tagalong or a total idiot, but a proper Marauder.
I do have a slight nit-pick, but it's more a peeve of mine, so feel free to ignore. I'm not keen on the Remus/chocolate references. The reason he handed out chocolate in POA was because he knew his Dementor remedies - it doesn't mean he was a chocoholic. I think it's turned into a bit of a fanfiction cliche.
That aside, this was very funny to read, and I couldn't stop grinning all the way through. Fabulous!
Author's Response: I'm glad you found it funny--and that you were compelled to review! Oh, I know why Remus gave Harry the chocolate, and I know it's a fandom cliche, but hey--chocolate makes me feel better during certain times of the month, so why wouldn't it work for a werewolf? (Wink) I don't always use that cliche, but it just--happened. (And I didn't know if I could say, "He's taken along his caffeine pills."). Anyhow, I'm glad you liked it--it was a lot of fun for me to write! Thanks for the kind words! Diane
I loved it so much!~~ A perfect study break for me...you made my day!~ ;) You captured the marauders just the way i like them. Thanks for such an awesome story by the way. :)
My favourite lines were :
Unfortunately, he couldn’t think of even one thing that he would enjoy more without his friends, and they knew it. Short of shagging a girl, that is, and even then, he knew he’d give up the details to his friends eventually.
:) Very interesting plotline indeed...bravo!
Author's Response: This particular story was a break for me--writer's block had really gotten me down and this was my solution. I'm glad you liked the way I wrote the Marauders. They're so much fun! Thanks so much for telling me your favourite line. That always helps me figure out what's funny and what isn't (and what I can get away with next time!) Thanks for the kind words and the review!
haha i was in stitches, i cant wait for the next chapter
Author's Response: Oh, I'm glad you liked this! It makes me feel good to know you were laughing at the boys. It was so much fun writing this and I admit I cracked myself up a few times while I did. Unfortunately, this is a one-shot story--I don't have any other chapters planned.Maybe you could check out one of my other stories, though! (A Good Shag, maybe, if you like Remus/Tonks!) Thanks for reviewing!
That was soooo funny! It was a great idea and writen really well. :D
Author's Response: Thank you! It was so much fun to write this story. There were parts of me that wanted to make it longer and torture Sirius more, but, well, I just couldn't do it to him. Thanks so much for reviewing!
You. Have. Got. To. Be. Kidding. Me!
Yeah, this is my question to you: How good can you get?
First, like many people probably pointed out to you: you have an unparallel niche for writing the Marauders. Very well-written characterisation. There are things we discuss about this quartet all the time on the forums, everything imaginable from the witty remarks, and jokes, and the brains for fun and all; you incorporate those in a single one-shot so effortlessly, it is commendable!
Remus was brilliant. I always thought that he may not take Potions, so seeing your fic that he was suffering with the subject was nice in itself. The whole idea of the one-shot pretty much was incredibly different, remembrable!
I loved your descriptions as well. The little details of the gestures really bring the narrative alive.
While I was smiling throughout, this is when I burst out laughing:
It was as if Sirius were fighting the unseen force again. “To see — Fuck!” And with the vulgarity, he stopped walking and turned to glare at James. “I was going to see Slughorn, thanks to you!”
I knew what was going on of course, the summary gave me the idea, and it was sort of predictable, but it's how you tell the tale, that I'm thinking: hold it, anything can happen here.
Thank you for putting Peter in his rightly place as the Marauder.
The very enjoyable part was also the ending. Cheers for doing a very good job!
Now... something that put me off.
I'm sorry. But this really didn't work for me. Nickname out of a nickname? I seriously think that both James and Sirius would've used Padfoot. Pads is just ... weird.
You didn't have to "strongly suggest" to review... you really deserve one from each who reads this brilliant Marauder one-shot.
P.S: I'm in the process of re-reading Daring. Another awesome piece :D
Author's Response: *shaking head in disbelief with a rueful grin* How good can I get? My self-esteem makes fun of me on a regular basis, telling me that if I string together two halfway decent sentences, it's obviously because I've had a dose of Felix Felicis that day. I'm glad you like the characterisations: I work on those more than anything, because if the characters don't work, the story collapses in on itself. Most of the time, I can 'see' the boys and try to add the gestures and expressions because I want everyone else to see what I'm 'seeing'. It makes me feel like I'm right there, and I want that for everyone. (Gosh, can you imagine being in a room with the Marauders at their most 'Marauder-ish'? How much fun would that be?!) As far as Peter is concerned, he couldn't have been trusted by the Marauders if he hadn't fit in with them and a lot of people don't see that. He couldn't have been as miserable and ratty and unlikeable as some people think, because otherwise Sirius would never have suggested he be the Secret Keeper. So, in my opinion (for whatever that's worth), he has to be just one of the guys--fun-loving, ready for anything, and trustworthy. Now, the 'Pads' thing? I have to admit, I am one who will shorten nicknames. A friend of mind had the nickname of 'Bubbles' (don't ask) and I typically called her 'Bub'. I named my son Matthew so I could logically shorten his name to 'Matt' but I call him 'Matty' or 'Matts'--just because I can. I know it's weird, but, there you go. I made art imitate life. I will never, never call Sirius 'Siri' though. THAT makes me shudder. Can't stand 'Remy', either, actually. How about if I promise not to do it again, though? Will you forgive me? Speaking of art imitating life, I was lousy in Potions, er, Chemistry. It was the one and only subject that I almost failed. As intelligent as I think Remus is, he had to have a weakness somewhere--so why not Potions? I'm glad that you thought it worked for the story. Thanks for the great review and the encouragment! - Diane P.S. Glad you're re-reading Daring. *musing* Someday I'm going to get back to that and add to it...
Nice story :)
Author's Response: *Takes a bow* Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Fantastic. Very well written. THis is a story that makes me want to read a book written about the goings on Pre HP. Maybe JKR can write another series that shows the Rise of Tom Riddle and what caused him to become Voldemort. Of course, The Marauders and all of the people that were around prior to LV's downfall. James ,Lilly, Sirius, the Weasleys, the Longbottoms and all the rest. We can only hope.
Keep writing and I'll keep reading. Great story
Author's Response: Oh, I would love for JKR to write a prequel to the HP series. I'd love to see the rise of Voldemort in her words, how the Knights of Walpurgis became Death Eaters and Tom Riddle became the Dark Lord. It would be fascinating how it actually happened in her mind. I'd love to see what happened that Sirius mistrusted Remus to the point of thinking that Remus was the spy. And I'm curious about how Peter Pettigrew and his 'defection' and how that came about. Yes, I hope she eventually tells the story! Thanks, though, for the kind words and the review!
I loved it! You write them so brilliantly! Your characterisation is alwys spot on!
Though I would suggest *wiggles eyebrows* for you to post at fanfiction.net too, the readership is much bigger, and you would deserve tons of reviews!
Author's Response: Hello, you stalker, you! I'm glad you liked the characterisations. You know I work hard at that. Of all the criticisms I can (and do) take, someone saying they didn't like the way I wrote one of the characters (especially one of the Marauders) would bother me the most, so I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reviewing here (and there! Did you read my others there yet?)
I thought this was great. I loved the interaction between all the Marauders and I loved the side bits with James and Peter. The mention of Remus and chocolate was funny, as was the things Sirius said. Interesting concept and you did a great job with this.
Author's Response: The Marauders are always so much fun to write--while you've got two going at each other, you've always got two others to make snide remarks. It's even more fun when it's Remus who's angry, since he isn't typically the one to get bent out of shape about things. Thanks for saying such nice things--and for the review!
I absolutely loved this story. It was fun to read and a nice concept. I feel like you really had the Marauders pegged and I especially liked the bit with James and Peter analyzing Remus's tirade.
Seriously great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really do try to nail the characters down, because if even one of them feels off, it can throw the whole story off. And Remus' tirade--that was just way too much fun to write! Thanks for reviewing! (Extra hug for being the first one!)