Interesting first chapter, I am looking forward to seeing how your plot develops. I liked the bantering dialogue between Severus and Lily! :-)
I really like this story! It's really good and I hopethat you can update soon!
I'm very excited to read more of this story. It is brilliant! You can really write Snape like Snape. I know very few people who can write him so perfectly. I know that I have a terrible time writing him. Hopefully you can get the next chapter up soon.
I love it love it love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Its a really good chappie... especially the part where James talks to Lily... It was sweet... oh i also lked the part where LIly smacked directly into the bookcase after telling off Snape, who snickered at her.... could u update soon? Oh ya by the way, how far r u going to write the stoy? till James and Lily gets married or till their graduation or till the night where they protect their child??
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) the next chapter should be up soon, hopefully! Well, this story is going to go until the end of the sixth year. I'm probably going to do at least one sequel though, maybe two, depending on how it turns out. Glad you liked it!!
Hey! So I'm really enjoying your story! I like the fact that how James likes Lily isn't commonly known. It provides an interesting dynamic that's different from most L/J fics and will probably make for some funny moments, I'm sure. I also really like the way that you write the characters and dialogue, it all flows very naturally without feeling rushed. One last note, I really like the whole patronus part, I had never really thought about Lily's patronus changing into a doe once she fell in love with James but I really like the idea.
Can't wait to read your next chapter!
haha yup it helps.... thanks.... but do update soon ya.... i reallly cant wait for the rest of the story!
I like this! I can't wait for the next chapter. I'd just like to take a moment to say that I agree with you on the whole Patronus thing, because even though I feel like Snape was always in love with Lily, I believe that Lily's Patronus only became a doe after she feel in love with James, and when Lily's Patronus changed, so did Snape's.
first off (just because i have the need to mention it) the real reason i started reading this was because i was so excited seeing Willow Rosenberg on my screen (if we're thinking of the same Willow, Buffy, and Xander, if not its ok) so i saw your name and started reading and i realized i really like it. you've done a splendid job! absolutely can't wait for the next chaptor!
Author's Response: haha that's exactly where it's from! And thanks so much, next chapter should be up soon.
wow, its a really great story. I love how it is heading so far... but im a bit confused abt something, isnt Lily's patronous supposed to be a doe? Sorry, its just a bit confused thats all.Other than that, great job!! Update soon. Im loking forward to it.
Author's Response: thanks! and yeah, hers and snapes both are. i kind of figured since they both become totally different people later in there lives, their Patronuses are going to change. Like Snape's not so desperately in love with Lily right now, and like his whole life becomes about her after she dies, but he hasn't gotten to that point. JJust what i figured, hope that helps!
Wow, I'm really impressed by the way you handled characters who have been written so many times before - their characters are canon but without being predictable. I also love the way Snape described Lily's patronus as "wibbly"! What a word! Please keep writing, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I will hunt you down if you do not add the second chapter soon. This is really good.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) and it's in queue now, with any luck it should be up soon.