Nice, but I can't help feel that it was a bit melodramatic. Like how they thought Smith didn't get a good enough punishment. He was tackled by James and Sirius and then got a weeks worth of detention. Just a thought. Besides that, it was good.
Author's Response: The detentions were less because of the fighting and more for messing around with dangerous plants, but i definitely see your point. thanks!
Wow! I thought that was a great chapter! The prank was great and I found myself cheering when James pounced on Smith! Please update soon!!
Author's Response: aww thanks! the next chapter should be up fast, it's coming along nicely!
Charlotte's web!!!!! LOL!!! Brilliant!!!
Isaac Smith wouldn't happen to be related to another not very nice Smith, right??
I liked this very much!! And it's quite funny the way Remus reacted to not having thought about the obliviating thing before... Again, brilliant!!
Liked it very mucho!!! Great chap!
Author's Response: Haha same last name...blond...Hufflepuff....I think it's a definite possibility :)
Haha! The bromance is hilarious!!!
I love this story, it's interesting and thrilling, looking forward for the next chapter.
//Osced
I like how you make Snape seem like a actual person without changing his personality to be nicer.
LOL LOL LOL LOL!!!!!!!!! I love this story.......... Update soon please!!!
Hahaha, Nice job putting James in detention, very clever idea with the winking! Terrific chapter ;-)
Wow, it seems really great so far! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!
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good chapter! I very much enjoyed the winking part! please update soon!!
i have to say this line made me laugh:
"The other three stared at him. Sirius raised an eyebrow. “Wormtail thinks you’re sexy,” he informed James."
I think is developing into a great story :).
I also love how you've wrote Peter, he's not some big wimpy weirdo, but part of the 4 Marauders (most other stories describe him as if he's already drifting and following old Voldy.) So well done for that :).
I also liked how you wrote the relationship between Lily and Severus, made him seem normal :).
Hope you update soon :D
Ooo I cannot wait to see how this prank turns out!!! Interesting chapter.
OOOOHHH! I'M so excited! plez update! this is like the WORST cliff-hanger becuz now i'm sitting here waiting fr the pranks to begin... UPDATE!
omg! hus the letter from? this was a good chapter and i cant wait to c wut the prank is gunna b so plz update soon!! =D
I really like the note Severus made. It fits so well with the story. I'm very excited to find out what Lily does with James and Sirius.
I really like this story so far. I really love the characterization in it. I hope the next chapter is up soon.
Very strong story, so far. It slips into JK's canon nicely, but has it's own stamp of authorship. I'm really looking forward to more!
Excellently written. It was nice to see how you incorporated JKR's actually dialogue in to your version. Cannot wait to keep reading this fan fic!
Author's Response: Thanks! Fourth chapter should be in queue soon :)
Hahahaha, This is going to be quite the tutoring session!!! Loved this chapter ;-)
